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Stories of the Dreamtime

Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Googarh Twins"
Aboriginal myths and legends.

21 total reviews 
Comment from dellsworthpoet
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This piece is well-paced. The images are clear. The narrative stays on point. The words are simple and the sentences uncomplicated. Reminds me somewhat of Jungle Book. The author's notes are informative, but could be gathered from the story.

Thanks for a good read.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
    If it warmed your heart, it has done it's job. Thank you for reading; more chapters to come. K xx
reply by dellsworthpoet on 24-Sep-2022
    Then it did it's job and you are welcome.
Comment from paige_a
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Wow, thank you for the information at the end, I learned some new things today! I really loved your story - the way you made me care about two lizards proves that you have a powerful way with words. So glad there was a happy ending of sorts for those left alive.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2022
    Hello new friend. Nature is our friend. The aboriginal way is to worship nature and thank her for all living things. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from aryr
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Rather enjoyable to read despite the topic ( I don't do well with anything regarding snakes-Yuk). I did learn a lot from reading this as did the twins. First they were definitely new animals for me, so their habits were interesting. Second, it was great that the mother who lost her eggs adopted them- it is the way of nature and of life. Well done, thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
    Yalunga the rainbow serpent was sent by Great Spirit to make the lands inhabitle for the tribes. He was gigantic spirit snake. Made rivers, hills and dales. When the spirits had finished making the lands they disappeared into the gum trees. That is why we call the trees ghost gums today. XX
reply by aryr on 20-Aug-2018
    Wow, that's interesting.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
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;) Oh my goodness - I read your author notes -The carpet snake can dislocate their jaws to accommodate the swallowing of a large animal, terrifying. I saw the movie "Python" some years back and had nightmares for two weeks. I like a happy ending and the twin lizards have a loving foster mama and that's happy! I so enjoyed your story. Elly

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
    Hello Elly, Whoops! You nearly got eaten! Glad you enjoyed the happy ending. Thanks for reading. Love, Kay.
Comment from Jendowoz
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Another wonderful story, Aussie. you have obviously read many of the Dreamtime stories and know them by heart in order to write your version of them so well. I would love to use these with my students when I get back to school, with your permission of course. They are written well and simple enough for all aged students to understand. I am home at present recovering from 2 knee replacements within 12 wks at the moment, however.

regards, Jen

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
    Jen, My grandmother was aboriginal; contact me when you are well again - two replacements are a lot to handle. Don't stop doing your exercises, most important - soon you will be the bionic woman! Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Scribelle
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Wonderful story! I like how everything ties together - the twins lose their mother, the snake is full from eating eggs, the twins are adopted by the same mother who lost her eggs. That the tree is wise and protects them is precious as I read and think of what could happen to the twins. You kept my attention through to the very end! Hugs, Scribelle

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
    Hello Scribelle, Thanks so much for your lovely review; lots more stories to come. Hugs, Kay.
reply by Scribelle on 10-Oct-2013
    I look forward to your stories!
    Hugs, Scribelle.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
    Have posted two so far - three is on the way; all separate tales of our aborigines. Hugs, K.
Comment from Alan K Pease
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Your doing well on creating a story from natures contribution to Australian aboriginal lore, biology, and ecology. It is good to work from a biologies historical perspective.among the tribes.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
    Thanks so much Alan - glad you enjoyed the story. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from jmdg1954
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I enjoyed how you told about these unique animals in story fashion. I thought that was cool.
Although you notes gave me the willies, I enjoyed that whivh you wrote.
Nicely done, Kay.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013
    Hello John, Thanks so much for reading, so pleased you enjoyed; next chapter on the way. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Writingfundimension
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What a delightful chapter, Aussie. I love the lesson in life and nature that you sprinkle throughout this chapter. It's enjoyable reading for both adult and child. Great job!

:0) Bev

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013
    Hello Bev, Thanks so much for reading; glad you enjoyed; next chapter on its way. :-) Kay.
reply by Writingfundimension on 08-Oct-2013
    You're very welcome, Kay. :0)
Comment from Nanette Mary
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Hullo Aussie ....

When in Africa, I was accustomed to seeing Guanas or Iguanas, which you refer to as Goannas. I found this to be an interesting little story reflecting kindness and a motherly instinct reflected in two different animal species.
There is one small change to recommend ...

* You have - never approach a goanna (singular) when they (plural) are feeding. I suggest - never approach
Guanas when they are feeding.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013
    Hello my friend, Goannas are not Guanas - the goanna or Googarh is native to my land; glad you liked the story - more to come. Love, Kay.