Beyond the Setting Sun
Beyond the sunset lies a new day18 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
Very nice poem Beth. Good work. Couldn't see any Spags neither. I loved the art work as well. Thinking of some nice sunsets out our front and sunrises at our back door. Should get some photos on some where of them.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Very nice poem Beth. Good work. Couldn't see any Spags neither. I loved the art work as well. Thinking of some nice sunsets out our front and sunrises at our back door. Should get some photos on some where of them.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for the review. I've been out of town and it will take me a while to catch up with reviewing.
Beth
Comment from Samuel Dickens
A lovely way of looking at it. Though a daily event, never is it mundane but always inspiring. The picture you chose is fantastic.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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A lovely way of looking at it. Though a daily event, never is it mundane but always inspiring. The picture you chose is fantastic.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thank you Samuel. I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your very strong contest entry. The descriptions cause a strong emotion in this reader. I could see the sun setting. The rhythm made for easy reading. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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I enjoyed reading your very strong contest entry. The descriptions cause a strong emotion in this reader. I could see the sun setting. The rhythm made for easy reading. Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thank you Barbara. I appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from mrskristinball
Beautiful, refreshing, encouraging! I love the flow and format, especially how each stanza ends with one word. Again, your poetry inspires me and brings me joy. Love it!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Beautiful, refreshing, encouraging! I love the flow and format, especially how each stanza ends with one word. Again, your poetry inspires me and brings me joy. Love it!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for six star rating and the lovely comments. I'm so glad you like my poem
Beth
Comment from MAMONIA
Very excellently written. I just don't know if
I would have kept all the Caps...in the beginning
of each line.
The last stanza..a new day awaits..would seem to
flow easier on my tongue.
I think this is a beautifully composed poem with
fabulous imagery and expression.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Very excellently written. I just don't know if
I would have kept all the Caps...in the beginning
of each line.
The last stanza..a new day awaits..would seem to
flow easier on my tongue.
I think this is a beautifully composed poem with
fabulous imagery and expression.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marie
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you Marie. I've never written a poem before with no punctuation and usually don't write free verse. The processor wants to put those caps at the first of each line but like you I don't like them. I had taken them out but put them back when I decided to go with no punctuation. I've taken them out again.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
As the earth turns it's back on the sun. That's different and original Beth.
That is an awesome picture too. Good alliteration included.
Beyond the sunset there is a new day dawning; that is the beauty of life, Kudos. Nancy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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As the earth turns it's back on the sun. That's different and original Beth.
That is an awesome picture too. Good alliteration included.
Beyond the sunset there is a new day dawning; that is the beauty of life, Kudos. Nancy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you Nancy I appreciate the review and comments. I'm glad you liked this.
Beth
Comment from AprilShower
I enjoyed the message in this poem, Beth and the way each stanza ended with one word. The picture and the poem go well together, too.
You have my best wishes for the contest.
April :o)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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I enjoyed the message in this poem, Beth and the way each stanza ended with one word. The picture and the poem go well together, too.
You have my best wishes for the contest.
April :o)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you April. I really appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Sueellen11
Yes my friend what a wonderful blessings each day brings,,GOG's glory beaming through ones bedroom,,, great entry,,good luck,,,,blessings,,sueellen
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Yes my friend what a wonderful blessings each day brings,,GOG's glory beaming through ones bedroom,,, great entry,,good luck,,,,blessings,,sueellen
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sueellen. I appreciate the review and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from barleygirl
Love this poem! I entered this contest & wouldn't mind getting beat out by you, your poem is so nicely written & well-conceived. I love the many parallels you present (I'm drawn to organizing devices in writing) . . . such as: the 3 balanced stanzas, with the last word singled out in each, for emphasis. The picture is awesome!
It's funny, I don't pay much attention to writers, when I select a piece to review. I'm usually deciding, based on title & description offered. Since I end up enjoying your work pretty regularly, whatever you're doing with the way you name your pieces, must be very effective! *smile*
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Love this poem! I entered this contest & wouldn't mind getting beat out by you, your poem is so nicely written & well-conceived. I love the many parallels you present (I'm drawn to organizing devices in writing) . . . such as: the 3 balanced stanzas, with the last word singled out in each, for emphasis. The picture is awesome!
It's funny, I don't pay much attention to writers, when I select a piece to review. I'm usually deciding, based on title & description offered. Since I end up enjoying your work pretty regularly, whatever you're doing with the way you name your pieces, must be very effective! *smile*
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for the lovely review and comments. I'm so glad you like this.
Beth
Comment from Al-Masud
Beautiful. It is a reflection on life and death cycle in metaphoric sense.It also shows the relationship between human and natural activities and their interrelationship. It lack of punctuation bears out the continuum between the two bodies. However, i suggest the poet reworks line 2 stanza 3 to make the meaning clearer. She can remove "our" to read "refreshed spirits are unleased" Kudos.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Beautiful. It is a reflection on life and death cycle in metaphoric sense.It also shows the relationship between human and natural activities and their interrelationship. It lack of punctuation bears out the continuum between the two bodies. However, i suggest the poet reworks line 2 stanza 3 to make the meaning clearer. She can remove "our" to read "refreshed spirits are unleased" Kudos.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for the review, the comments and suggestions. I think you are right about the second and third stanza. I've worked on it.
Beth
