Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

The machines were telling you to take a day off. But your girl should have went to work. Her co-workers may like her new hair do.I hate to wake up to unruly appliances. They make the whole day bad. Great read.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2013

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Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hi :)
This is a great entry for the contest.
I particularly enjoyed your rhyme scheme and you executed it perfectly. I relate to the subject of the poem in that we are never happy with our hair and if it doesn't look quite right, we don't want to be seen out in public!
I like that you threw in the coffee perculator going kaput at the end also, when one appliance goes wrong, it doesn't take long for others to follow suit!
Nice alliteration in curls/cluster and sizzle/smoking/stinks/sin.
Very well done, I enjoyed the read and you made me laugh :)
Good luck in the contest, kindest regards, Debra

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013

Thank you so very much for your review and comments. I do appreciate the time you take to do these reviews.

Comment from Millibrad

Excellent

I liked your poem a lot. I especially liked verse two. How is it the grass always seems greener on the other side? Oh, yeah, the last verse is super too. We all have such days when nothing seems to work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013

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Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good use of mono-rhyming in each stanza
good alliteration and descriptive detail in curls that cluster
and in smoking and stinks like sin
a humorous story of the death of the curling iron :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013

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Comment from barrieblakeway

Excellent

AnnieDawn, Well done! Frustration galore and so well delivered. I could smell the hair. Great to see simple happenings recorded poetically.

Keep up with your daughters!
bye baz

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013

Thanks for your comments. It is fun to take a topic and let it flow.

Comment from angelface2

Excellent

The funniest poem I have read in a long time. Made me laugh right out loud. I think you have a good one for this contest. Good luck. Miss Sally

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013

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Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Annie, I really liked this - you use exaggeration well to create humour. Part of that is the monorhymed stanzas and the bouncy, exaggerated rhythm - works pretty well except for line 8 which is a syllable short - may I suggest something like 'She hates the curls that cluster there...'

lots of fun and a good concluding stanza - best of luck in the contest.

Steve

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013

Thank you for your review and so very much for your comments. I go back and review my work and make changes from the constructive criticism and I thank you for yours. I think that's what it is all about and that is why I am here.

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

LOL...the one with straight hair wants some curls, the one with curls just wants it straight....and now the curling iron's kaput! No waves were set, she can't go to work...poor Annie can't even get - a cup of joe to drown her woes!!

Funny write :-)

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2013

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Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Poor Annie. We all have days when nothing goes right, however. Enjoyed your fun romp with excellent meter and rhyme. Love the line 'her self-esteem is stuck on jerk.' Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013

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Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

What a delightful entry! I admired your rhymes, flow, meter and cadence, as well as your artistic presentation.

A couple people wrote about a curling iron - I guess, when those malfunction, it's the end of the world! (lol).

Very enjoyable lines like:

So with a sigh and much chagrin
Ann plugs her curling iron in.
And hears a sizzle deep within.
It's smoking and it stinks like sin!

What a calamity! I believe it's a true story.

Good luck in the contest, thank you for joining us; blessings and love, Y.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013

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