Minnesota Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Colorful Rite"Poems About and Around Minnesota
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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow! What an amazing format.
I really like the style and function of this poem.
"To illuminate the subject and re-imagine or personalise it
for the reader"
I am amazed this is so well crafted and suits the guidelines for this style perfectly.
A very clever Lantern Suite and I appreciate the thought and effort used to create this.
Sorry I don't have a six.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
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Wow! What an amazing format.
I really like the style and function of this poem.
"To illuminate the subject and re-imagine or personalise it
for the reader"
I am amazed this is so well crafted and suits the guidelines for this style perfectly.
A very clever Lantern Suite and I appreciate the thought and effort used to create this.
Sorry I don't have a six.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
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Thank you Shirley. I virtual six is fine with me.
Comment from sunnilicious
Those are such bright costumes. Nice photograph. Great author notes. I appreciate the spotlight. Wonderful poem. Creative with great visual imagery. Nice narrative. Great!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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Those are such bright costumes. Nice photograph. Great author notes. I appreciate the spotlight. Wonderful poem. Creative with great visual imagery. Nice narrative. Great!
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sunnilicious. And I gave your Inspiration credit.
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You're nice.
Comment from Sueellen11
I like the lantern,,, no easy to write,, i did one,,, and only one,,ha ha,,, not easy,,,but you have shown its form , count and style excellently,,,well done, a lovely picture to company your poem,, I watch a traditional spiritual,, Add dance in Mexico,,, truly lovely,,, and their costumes are so bright in colour and such beautiful handiwork,,,enjoyed this one,,,blessings,,,sueellen
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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I like the lantern,,, no easy to write,, i did one,,, and only one,,ha ha,,, not easy,,,but you have shown its form , count and style excellently,,,well done, a lovely picture to company your poem,, I watch a traditional spiritual,, Add dance in Mexico,,, truly lovely,,, and their costumes are so bright in colour and such beautiful handiwork,,,enjoyed this one,,,blessings,,,sueellen
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2013
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Thank you sueellen, very colorful.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent lantern suite following all of the difficult rules enumerated for that genre. I like this poem.
Preston
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent lantern suite following all of the difficult rules enumerated for that genre. I like this poem.
Preston
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from ravenblack
Very minimalist form. Reads like Impressionism. Thought this was a scene from a Pow Wow. Have you ever seen one? Grass dancers, hoop dancers, jingle dress- and if an eagle feather falls from a costume everything stops in silence until it is reverently retrieved.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Very minimalist form. Reads like Impressionism. Thought this was a scene from a Pow Wow. Have you ever seen one? Grass dancers, hoop dancers, jingle dress- and if an eagle feather falls from a costume everything stops in silence until it is reverently retrieved.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thanks ravenblack. Actually I did in the BlackHills near Custer State park.
Comment from NicciFaye
I like this one Treischel. I might try this format as well. Colorful and not to much stringent rules to comply with for it to be to complicated to accomplish. Beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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I like this one Treischel. I might try this format as well. Colorful and not to much stringent rules to comply with for it to be to complicated to accomplish. Beautiful poem.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you Nicci. I'm sure you will do very well if you try one.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
"Virgin Mary =4 beats not 3
Rite Bob shuffle Garb Dress Hat Cap Hue = HEADINGS
LAST VERSE=SUMMATION of the above
Fringe
buckskin
tasseled skirt
swaying ribbons
Pomp
Excellent.
Refards:
Author Notes
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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"Virgin Mary =4 beats not 3
Rite Bob shuffle Garb Dress Hat Cap Hue = HEADINGS
LAST VERSE=SUMMATION of the above
Fringe
buckskin
tasseled skirt
swaying ribbons
Pomp
Excellent.
Refards:
Author Notes
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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OMG, how could I miss that! Thank you Stephen, fixed it.
Comment from marycec
Had not heard of lantern form but it looks lovely on the page indeed a lantern! Your short lines in keeping with the form nevertheless paint a vibrant picture of the fiesta as does your photograph.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Had not heard of lantern form but it looks lovely on the page indeed a lantern! Your short lines in keeping with the form nevertheless paint a vibrant picture of the fiesta as does your photograph.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you Mary. The purpose of the Lantern is to shed light. I am glad you caught that.
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Smile :)
Comment from Capricorn30
I find the Mexican culture incorporates many vivid colors;
I love the photograph of these dancers--lovely!
A well-crafted writing which so nicely complements the attractive performance of a fascinating culture.
I love the headdresses!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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I find the Mexican culture incorporates many vivid colors;
I love the photograph of these dancers--lovely!
A well-crafted writing which so nicely complements the attractive performance of a fascinating culture.
I love the headdresses!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you Shirley, yes. I was anazed at the colors. Also, in Native American culture, it is very unusual for women to wear headdresses.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I think you did a wonderful job with this lantern form of poetry. I like all of the descriptions for the Indian dance.
~teresa~
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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I think you did a wonderful job with this lantern form of poetry. I like all of the descriptions for the Indian dance.
~teresa~
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much Teresa.
