Love is Blind
A funny way to look at things3 total reviews
Comment from MsHeavens
Very appropriate picture and choice of words. A picture says it all and this one definitely describes how some things are overlooked, all in the name of love. Is it the love that goes astray or the person? LOL oh well. Thanks for sharing, nice write.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
Very appropriate picture and choice of words. A picture says it all and this one definitely describes how some things are overlooked, all in the name of love. Is it the love that goes astray or the person? LOL oh well. Thanks for sharing, nice write.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thank you. It is the love that goes 'astray'.lol
Comment from Cookie333
I have given a 5 for an honest attempt at this prompt, you have a wonderful theme/message.
Just a few thoughts
1st line= 5 syllables, perfect!
2nd line=8 syllables, totally fixable if you contract 'it is' to "it's"
3rd line = 9 syllables, a bit tougher but still...do-able if you play with it a bit.
I hope this helps,
thank you for sharing, and for the chuckle,
karen
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
I have given a 5 for an honest attempt at this prompt, you have a wonderful theme/message.
Just a few thoughts
1st line= 5 syllables, perfect!
2nd line=8 syllables, totally fixable if you contract 'it is' to "it's"
3rd line = 9 syllables, a bit tougher but still...do-able if you play with it a bit.
I hope this helps,
thank you for sharing, and for the chuckle,
karen
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much.
Please teach me how to count correctly.
Comment from emrpoems
Sorry for the four star but this is not a 5-7-5.
They say love is blind
No wonder it is hard to find
It probably keeps going astray --My count 5-8-9
Great theme though
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
Sorry for the four star but this is not a 5-7-5.
They say love is blind
No wonder it is hard to find
It probably keeps going astray --My count 5-8-9
Great theme though
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2013
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Thanks.
I appreciate, but please teach me how to count.
How would you rather I should have written it instead?
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You must count every syllable in each word eg.
No wonder it is hard to find
no-won-der-it-is-hard-to-find ----8
It probably keeps going astray
It- pro-bab-ly- keeps- go-ing a-stray--- 9
sometimes you can shorten words like it is can be it's
eg No- won-der -it's- hard- to -find --7
It probably keeps going astray -- could be
It prob-a-bly goes -a-stray---7
Hope this helps. Writing this type of poetry is not easy so you did a fairly good job
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Thank you...I tried to restructure it again. How can I get you to see it again.