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Comment from Selina Stambi
These few lines tore at my heart as I read between them.
How perceptive of a nine year old. I hope the sadness went away.
I'd love to read more. Keep writing and dreaming, my dear.
Bless you! Dropping in to say hello.
Hugs,
xxx
Sonali :)
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These few lines tore at my heart as I read between them.
How perceptive of a nine year old. I hope the sadness went away.
I'd love to read more. Keep writing and dreaming, my dear.
Bless you! Dropping in to say hello.
Hugs,
xxx
Sonali :)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
Comment from hubba marwa
Great ! Great! Great! Very nice poem that really grips the reader all along ! You have created maximum of effect with the minimum of words !
With much love ,
From,
''Pakistan :)
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Great ! Great! Great! Very nice poem that really grips the reader all along ! You have created maximum of effect with the minimum of words !
With much love ,
From,
''Pakistan :)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2013
Comment from Benny Beeharry
I cannot guess what the problem is. I do not know how old she is.
But it is always alwAys sad to see tears in a mothers eyes,she who is supposed to wipe the tears of others.
There is so much here, I could write and write but will not be able to delve into your mothers heart. Sorry.well written
Take care
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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I cannot guess what the problem is. I do not know how old she is.
But it is always alwAys sad to see tears in a mothers eyes,she who is supposed to wipe the tears of others.
There is so much here, I could write and write but will not be able to delve into your mothers heart. Sorry.well written
Take care
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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the problem is oblivious for a reason. as she was my mum she would not let me worry, would always tell me she was fine. thank you for your feedback it is most appreciated!
Comment from tfawcus
Life must go on and mums sometimes seem almost indestructible. No matter what the demons of the night each new day is a 'Good morning' and lets get on with it all the same. You have compressed a great deal of meaning into these seventeen syllables - sixteen in fact and not actually distributed 5-7-5 but that is beside the point. It is the thought that counts and the thought in your poem transcends the rules.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Life must go on and mums sometimes seem almost indestructible. No matter what the demons of the night each new day is a 'Good morning' and lets get on with it all the same. You have compressed a great deal of meaning into these seventeen syllables - sixteen in fact and not actually distributed 5-7-5 but that is beside the point. It is the thought that counts and the thought in your poem transcends the rules.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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she is a strong women, as are all mums! thanks you for your feedback! i must check twice next time
Comment from Nuad1
When we first see this kind of emotion in one we love, especially an adult or care giver, it stays with us forever; thank God we can write it out in an attempt to work it out. Good job w/this.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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When we first see this kind of emotion in one we love, especially an adult or care giver, it stays with us forever; thank God we can write it out in an attempt to work it out. Good job w/this.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your feedback! It is appreciated and also true. you have given me a smile
