Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Well, was going to say that maybe a wet fairway would give you an advantage. But your brother does not like Windows. Always heard horror stories about golfers getting hit by lightning mid-swing, the club fusing to their hands. Urban legend?

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013

Thanks ravenblack.that does happen. I often worry, as we are carrying a bag of lightning rods with use on the course.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Rain on the golf course in the midst of a game. That must have been some excitement. Well, you're in good poetic form. Good narrative. Good rhymes. Nice work. Have a good weekend.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013

Thank you Sunnilicious . I'll be coaching my grandson's football team in a game tomorrow.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Well written poem which conforms to the stated guidelines for this style of poem.
Well presented and agreat picture choice.
The varying syllable count allows for the expression of ideas to flow freely throughout the poem.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013

Thank you Shirley. Yes, it does change up the pace a bit.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent poem with good flow, excellent rhyme and acbd rhyme scheme consistently followed. It has some good figurative language-"fearsome force" and "lightning flashes at play". I believe it gets the golfer's frustration across.
Preston

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013

Thank you Preston. Can't let a little weather hold you back.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Well, I should guess your dear brother wouldn't be. Not only did he experience the embarrassment of slicing the drive, he broke out someone's window, only putting an exclamation mark to that embarrassment. What's a new window cost today, especially one in a home as nice as one would find on a golf course? Probably well over three-hundred bucks, or maybe even more!

Great poem/story. It sounds as if you had a great time, with the exception of that broken window, of 'course'. (Course...get it? Oh, never mind...)

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013

Thanks Dean. Yes it's over 300 dollars. Plus installation. Clever pun.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

LOL I can see where your brother would have been down and oooooout. LOL a picture window to boot. Oh well, it's only money. Great Canzone to tell of this.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013

Thank you Gungalo.

reply by Gungalo on 20-Sep-2013

Smile.

Comment from Thatguypk

Excellent

Love it, and I can identify with the sentiments, being a golfer. Great rhyme pattern, and an easy and enjoyable read. I'll remember this the next time i'm waiting in the clubhouse, cursing the elements.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013

Thank you Thatguypk. Good to hear from fellow golfer.