Humpty's Gold Heart
A Fairy Tale with a Clue53 total reviews
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does an excellent job of remaking this nursery rhyme. The writer uses the aabb rhyme scheme effectively. The rhyming is good. The piece flows well as the rhymes don't seemed forced. The photo compliments the piece well as this piece holds my attention from beginning to end.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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The writer does an excellent job of remaking this nursery rhyme. The writer uses the aabb rhyme scheme effectively. The rhyming is good. The piece flows well as the rhymes don't seemed forced. The photo compliments the piece well as this piece holds my attention from beginning to end.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for your kind remarks and excellent review with analysis of various elements. I appreciate you taking the extra time.
Comment from pipersfancy
This tale is the sad undoing of poor 'ole Humpty! Murdered for something he did not even possess! Well written, flows well and delightful to read -
PF
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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This tale is the sad undoing of poor 'ole Humpty! Murdered for something he did not even possess! Well written, flows well and delightful to read -
PF
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you PF. I appreciate your insights about poor Humpty. He really was the unsuspecting victim. Thank you for the gracious comments and generous stars.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Oh, I had a smile on my face by the time I came to the last line.
Very, very cleverly put together.
I don't think I've bumped into you before. Nice to meet you, wj!
:) Sonali
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Oh, I had a smile on my face by the time I came to the last line.
Very, very cleverly put together.
I don't think I've bumped into you before. Nice to meet you, wj!
:) Sonali
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for generous review and kind comments. I'm happy it made you smile. Just a bit of silliness to share. Nice to meet too.
Comment from Cookie333
Oh my goodness! I shall never read this one to the kiddos in the same way again my friend. That greed will get us every time. Poor Humpty to be an eaten, beaten egg...
Thanks for a chuckle
K
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Oh my goodness! I shall never read this one to the kiddos in the same way again my friend. That greed will get us every time. Poor Humpty to be an eaten, beaten egg...
Thanks for a chuckle
K
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for a wonderful review. Yes, greed is a terrible thing, and poor Humpty didn't have it coming. Your review made me laugh. Thanks so much for the generous stars.
Comment from elchupakabra
I thought this ireverent piece had dark undertones that made this remix of humpty dumpty unique. Well writ and well constructed, thk u for sharing
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I thought this ireverent piece had dark undertones that made this remix of humpty dumpty unique. Well writ and well constructed, thk u for sharing
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the kind comments and generous stars.
Comment from justmarly
Humpty Dumpty there on there on the wall< Did you mean to have 2 theres. This is a good poem. Goood for Mustard he got what he desired. >And all Mustard got for his greed and pain
Was a few deviled eggs and quiche Lorraine. I also like your picture. JM
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Humpty Dumpty there on there on the wall< Did you mean to have 2 theres. This is a good poem. Goood for Mustard he got what he desired. >And all Mustard got for his greed and pain
Was a few deviled eggs and quiche Lorraine. I also like your picture. JM
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thanks for the heads up on the double words. I read it over so many times and still missed that. Thanks for the kind remarks and generous review.
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You are welcome. I do the same thing. JM
Comment from ravenblack
Clue, Scarlett O'hara and Humpty Dumptry left with a sunny side up lobotomy. Very, very strange but on some level it works except for one thing- colonel mustard did not do it. The butler did. Than humpty should be that humpty.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Clue, Scarlett O'hara and Humpty Dumptry left with a sunny side up lobotomy. Very, very strange but on some level it works except for one thing- colonel mustard did not do it. The butler did. Than humpty should be that humpty.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thanks for the heads up on the word correction . Love your take on the butler doing it and Scarlett running away with Humpty. Thanks for the generous review.
Comment from Cindy Warren
I laughed so hard I nearly cried. So it was Mustard who did it, Humpty didn't just fall. And Mustard was clever enough to put him back together, albiet without his insides. But I never could figure out what Humpty was doing on that wall in the first place. It seems like a rather foolish place to hang out if you're an egg.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I laughed so hard I nearly cried. So it was Mustard who did it, Humpty didn't just fall. And Mustard was clever enough to put him back together, albiet without his insides. But I never could figure out what Humpty was doing on that wall in the first place. It seems like a rather foolish place to hang out if you're an egg.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I agree with you. Maybe the egg thought he would grow wings and fly. Thanks for the insights and your kind review. I'm glad your found it amusing and it gave you a good laugh.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Than [That] Humpty is an empty shell. I think there is a minor nit there.
The picture is great along with the presentation. The story is very amuseing even if it did contain some violence. The syllable count to the stanzas spot on. Good work !!!
xsx Nancy
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Than [That] Humpty is an empty shell. I think there is a minor nit there.
The picture is great along with the presentation. The story is very amuseing even if it did contain some violence. The syllable count to the stanzas spot on. Good work !!!
xsx Nancy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thanks for the heads up on the misspelling. I read it so many times I missed it. I appreciate the editing and the gracious review comments.
Comment from SteveY
A very nicely rhymed poem of the old nursery tale of Humpty Dumpty. However I think you've added a couple of words in the first line that you didn't intend. "There on there" instead of just "there on the wall."
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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A very nicely rhymed poem of the old nursery tale of Humpty Dumpty. However I think you've added a couple of words in the first line that you didn't intend. "There on there" instead of just "there on the wall."
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. I have corrected the double words.
