Humpty's Gold Heart
A Fairy Tale with a Clue53 total reviews
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Deb,
This is such a creative post - Uniquely crafted with both great imagery and witty word play. I thought it was fabulous and I enjoyed every moment of it...
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Dear Deb,
This is such a creative post - Uniquely crafted with both great imagery and witty word play. I thought it was fabulous and I enjoyed every moment of it...
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Maureen.
I sincerely appreciate the gracious review and am flattered by your comments about imagery and word play. Fabulous, creative and unique don't go unappreciated either. I am so happy you enjoyed reading it.
Debi
Comment from Iese
Such a new brilliant touch on the humpty story. I enjoyed every part of the story hard to pick out but if I will it would be this part, Expensive tastes left her in debt.
Gold was something she had to get.
Hatching an evil and murderous plan,
She required the help of a single man.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Such a new brilliant touch on the humpty story. I enjoyed every part of the story hard to pick out but if I will it would be this part, Expensive tastes left her in debt.
Gold was something she had to get.
Hatching an evil and murderous plan,
She required the help of a single man.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind comments and the generous stars. Yes, greed can be a terrible motivation... I'm so glad you enjoyed my crazy little poem. Thanks for reading it.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
An amusing and clever fairy tale. Ten good stanzas in 8/8/10/10 syllable counts. I recognised all the fairy tale characters except Scarlett - I could only think of Scarlett O'Hara from Gone with the Wind - she was greedy for gold! I enjoyed it all and can't single out one particular stanza - they are all very good. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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An amusing and clever fairy tale. Ten good stanzas in 8/8/10/10 syllable counts. I recognised all the fairy tale characters except Scarlett - I could only think of Scarlett O'Hara from Gone with the Wind - she was greedy for gold! I enjoyed it all and can't single out one particular stanza - they are all very good. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review, Dorothy. I appreciate the gracious comments and generous stars.
Miss Scarlett and Colonel Mustard are actually characters in a classic board game called Clue. The object of the game is to guess which suspect committed the murder of Mr. Body, which weapon was used and in which room of the house. But I like your version with Scarlett O'Hara too.
Comment from Martin Chan
Humpty's Gold Heart is a nicely written fairy tale about Humpty Dumpty. The poem is written with a good imagination in intricate detail. It is nicely presented and the picture complements the poem.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Humpty's Gold Heart is a nicely written fairy tale about Humpty Dumpty. The poem is written with a good imagination in intricate detail. It is nicely presented and the picture complements the poem.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Thank you for such a complete and flattering review. I appreciate you taking the time to be so thorough. Thank you for the generous stars.
Comment from amanda98653
An allusion to the well-known childhood rhymes.
"Humpty Dumpty there on the wall,
Humpty's not what he seems at all.
With his grin so wide and his arms and legs
He's son of the goose who lays golden eggs. "
A very good rhyme scheme that goes well with the flow.
One's greed could be a poison to others.
God bless
-AJ
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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An allusion to the well-known childhood rhymes.
"Humpty Dumpty there on the wall,
Humpty's not what he seems at all.
With his grin so wide and his arms and legs
He's son of the goose who lays golden eggs. "
A very good rhyme scheme that goes well with the flow.
One's greed could be a poison to others.
God bless
-AJ
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Thank you, AJ. I appreciate the kind comments and generous review.
Comment from ElegantButler
I love the incorporation of Clue into this delightful poem. And the last verse is so delightfully horrifying. Even though Humpty is but an egg.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I love the incorporation of Clue into this delightful poem. And the last verse is so delightfully horrifying. Even though Humpty is but an egg.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for your review. I am flattered that you found it "delightfully horrifying." Thank you for the generous stars.
Comment from Mastery
My goodness, Deb. You are one heck of a writer, aren't you? I love this little poem. Especially the great ending stanza: "Not even Mother Goose can tell
That Humpty is an empty shell.
And all Mustard got for his greed and pain
Was a few deviled eggs and quiche Lorraine"
Do you write children's books or poems?
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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My goodness, Deb. You are one heck of a writer, aren't you? I love this little poem. Especially the great ending stanza: "Not even Mother Goose can tell
That Humpty is an empty shell.
And all Mustard got for his greed and pain
Was a few deviled eggs and quiche Lorraine"
Do you write children's books or poems?
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Wow. Thank you so much for the six stars! And for the compliments.
I have written since I was child, but it has only been the last year or so that I've actually shared my writing. So far it's quite eclectic. I have two YA vampire novels that I've shared with a few friends and they've shared with a few people I don't know and I've had people offer to pay me for a copy. I'm not quite ready yet, but building confidence and starting to explore the possibility of publishing. I want to learn a bit more about the business first. For now, I just write because I enjoy it.
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atta girl...You are on the right track, believe me. been there, done that. Bob :)
Comment from kiwijenny
Ha ha ha ah ah.......Scarlett has egg on her face..........and she and Colonel Mustard were unequally yolked........She scrambled out of there....
Sorry for the ineggsact review....
Well done.....I laughed out loud....
God bless
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Ha ha ha ah ah.......Scarlett has egg on her face..........and she and Colonel Mustard were unequally yolked........She scrambled out of there....
Sorry for the ineggsact review....
Well done.....I laughed out loud....
God bless
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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I love it when the reviewer is having fun with the material. Looks like you enjoyed this piece and that was the objective--to have a bit of fun. You are making me laugh. Thanks for an entertaining review.
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Your'e welcome
Comment from GWHARGIS
What a fun and wicked poem. I liked the merger of Clue and the Nursery Rhyme. The imagery was wonderful with the white gore and the yellow yolk. Nice tongue in cheek emotion. Nicely done. I enjoyed.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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What a fun and wicked poem. I liked the merger of Clue and the Nursery Rhyme. The imagery was wonderful with the white gore and the yellow yolk. Nice tongue in cheek emotion. Nicely done. I enjoyed.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review. I like the "fun and wicked" comment. I'm flattered that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Gungalo
Not even Mother Goose can tell
That Humpty is an empty shell.
And all Mustard got for his greed and pain
Was a few deviled eggs and quiche Lorraine.
So you can actually put Humpty together again? Hehehe I thought so. This write is really something else and answers all those sticky little questions. Poor Mustard.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Not even Mother Goose can tell
That Humpty is an empty shell.
And all Mustard got for his greed and pain
Was a few deviled eggs and quiche Lorraine.
So you can actually put Humpty together again? Hehehe I thought so. This write is really something else and answers all those sticky little questions. Poor Mustard.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2013
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Yes, if you have Mustard plaster then you can put Humpty together again, but you have to know the right recipe, and be willing to eat a lot of eggs....
Thanks for sharing a laugh.
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