Humpty's Gold Heart
A Fairy Tale with a Clue53 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Love the humour here Debi and you made me smile with your fun words and rhymes in this magical rewrite of the story of Humpty Dumpty, this is inventive and entertaining, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Love the humour here Debi and you made me smile with your fun words and rhymes in this magical rewrite of the story of Humpty Dumpty, this is inventive and entertaining, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Hi Dolly,
I am glad you enjoyed the humour and it made you smile. I appreciate the encouraging comments.
Debi
Comment from JT traveller
Bravo! Such a contemporary write inspired by an age old tale. I congratulate you. This poem is exceptional. To configure multiple tales and rhymes into one. Well done. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Bravo! Such a contemporary write inspired by an age old tale. I congratulate you. This poem is exceptional. To configure multiple tales and rhymes into one. Well done. Jacqueline
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Hi Jacqueline,
Thank you for the shiny six stars and the encouraging comments about the writing. You made me day!
Debi
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming couplets
good alliteration in greed grew and shattered the shell
I'm laughing as you introduce the characters from Clue into the story of Humpty :-)
very funny description of his egg-white gore LOL
good use of enjambment throughout to keep the story flowing from line to line
all the King's horses and all the kings men - King's men
A fantastically funny ending :-) Very clever! Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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solid rhyming couplets
good alliteration in greed grew and shattered the shell
I'm laughing as you introduce the characters from Clue into the story of Humpty :-)
very funny description of his egg-white gore LOL
good use of enjambment throughout to keep the story flowing from line to line
all the King's horses and all the kings men - King's men
A fantastically funny ending :-) Very clever! Brooke :-)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Hi Brooke. Thank you so much for a wonderful review.
I appreciate the edit comments. I can't believe I missed something so simple. If anyone else noticed it, they didn't comment on it. I appreciate you taking the time to mention it so I can correct it.
I'm so happy that you found this poem entertaining and that it made you laugh. I had fun writing it.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello and smiles to you w.j.debi
I really liked your version of Humpty Dumpty
well rhymed and very good how you added in Colonel Mustard
( I believe from a game called Clue?
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Hello and smiles to you w.j.debi
I really liked your version of Humpty Dumpty
well rhymed and very good how you added in Colonel Mustard
( I believe from a game called Clue?
Gert
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Gert. You are correct about the game being called Clue. I am pleased that you like this silly poem. It was fun to write. Thanks for the generous review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Spitfire
OMG! This is brilliant. Putting a nursery rhyme together with a popular child's game, Clue, and the story about the goose who lay golden eggs (Jack in the Beanstalk, if memory serves me.) Love the smart way Mustard put Humpty back together again and sat him on the wall. Great ending with the eggs and quiche. What a fun read. Glad you reviewed me so I could hook on to this.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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OMG! This is brilliant. Putting a nursery rhyme together with a popular child's game, Clue, and the story about the goose who lay golden eggs (Jack in the Beanstalk, if memory serves me.) Love the smart way Mustard put Humpty back together again and sat him on the wall. Great ending with the eggs and quiche. What a fun read. Glad you reviewed me so I could hook on to this.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Wow, six stars! Thank you so much. Even better are your comments. I am flattered and so delighted that you enjoyed reading it.
Comment from emjaihammond
Haha! This is a wonderful new version of an old boring fairytale. I always wondered what made old Humpty fall off the wall. And what is an egg doing sitting on a wall anyway. Loved this one.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Haha! This is a wonderful new version of an old boring fairytale. I always wondered what made old Humpty fall off the wall. And what is an egg doing sitting on a wall anyway. Loved this one.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, silly egg, what was he thinking? I'm so glad you enjoyed this crazy little piece. Thank you for reading it.
Comment from Jane Johnson
Very cute! I just wrote a long one also about Nursery Rhymes with Mr. Humpty Dumpty and friends. Your verse rhymed well. A story verse at that. Good flow of words. I liked it. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Very cute! I just wrote a long one also about Nursery Rhymes with Mr. Humpty Dumpty and friends. Your verse rhymed well. A story verse at that. Good flow of words. I liked it. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Wow! Six stars. Thank you for the generous stars. I am flattered that you liked it. Even more, I appreciate your gracious comments.
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Comment from TJayK
You've an amamzing sense of humour. I love this version of Humpty Dumpty, with a little Clue thrown in! You've set up a nice little plot, a compelling motive, and provided the perfect cover up, all laced with humour. Well done, my friend!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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You've an amamzing sense of humour. I love this version of Humpty Dumpty, with a little Clue thrown in! You've set up a nice little plot, a compelling motive, and provided the perfect cover up, all laced with humour. Well done, my friend!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for your review. I love the analysis and am flattered by your generous comments. I appreciate the excellent star rating too.
Comment from tfawcus
Lovely! On a par with Roald Dahl's Revolting Rhymes! By a remarkable coincidence I recently wrote a short poem relating another story about unfortunate Dumpty! It started off: Empty Dumbty sat on the fence
With a great big grin.
He was so dense.
Nothing to compare with your, of course. In fact I filed it away having given it my own personal rejection slip before anyone else did!
I loved your last line! Splendid! Best wishes, Tony
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Lovely! On a par with Roald Dahl's Revolting Rhymes! By a remarkable coincidence I recently wrote a short poem relating another story about unfortunate Dumpty! It started off: Empty Dumbty sat on the fence
With a great big grin.
He was so dense.
Nothing to compare with your, of course. In fact I filed it away having given it my own personal rejection slip before anyone else did!
I loved your last line! Splendid! Best wishes, Tony
Comment Written 04-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Oh, Tony, I'm very flattered by the six stars and your comments! Please don't file your poem away. I would love to read it when you're ready to show it. Just because we pick similar themes doesn't mean a thing. There are many love poems and faith poems that say nearly the same thing, but everyone brings their own personal touch to their work and it reaches others in a variety of ways.
Fact is, I went to check out your works and I have already reviewed all you have. Please post more.
Thanks again for the generous stars and very gracious comments.
Comment from denhagan
This was a delightful poem that told a story about humpty dumpty. Written in the quatrain style with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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This was a delightful poem that told a story about humpty dumpty. Written in the quatrain style with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the kind comments and the excellent review rating. I'm happy you liked it,
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You're welcome,
Dennis
