To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Cyclone"Free Verse Poetry
13 total reviews
Comment from joneau2
Wow, quite an impressive introspective piece. There's much sadness coming through, an indicator of how well you express your emotions when you write. Very well done.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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Wow, quite an impressive introspective piece. There's much sadness coming through, an indicator of how well you express your emotions when you write. Very well done.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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glad you liked it better than the person that gave me a 1. hahaha. well, I am indeed grateful for the rescue and very pleased that you enjoyed this. thank you very much. mike
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That's sad. Did the reviewer understand English?
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apparently not my particular dialect. ha! mike
Comment from Ceabiscuit
I felt mixed when I read this, it seemed to me I was here then I was there and so forth. I read it and felt it took me on a journey that I could feel like I got to the destination
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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I felt mixed when I read this, it seemed to me I was here then I was there and so forth. I read it and felt it took me on a journey that I could feel like I got to the destination
Comment Written 13-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. it would be helpful if you could offer me some detail as to why you found it flawed enough to give it a low mark as most consider it excellent. criticism is more helpful if there are some suggestions for improvements. if you have the time that is. again I appreciate you time and thoughts. thank you. mike
Comment from Lunar Morning Glory
Very expressive and emotive work..Life is full of rejections which can hurt deeply but we come through on the other side a stronger person if we understand it for what it is not about us but about the other person..Lunar Morning Glory/ Sar
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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Very expressive and emotive work..Life is full of rejections which can hurt deeply but we come through on the other side a stronger person if we understand it for what it is not about us but about the other person..Lunar Morning Glory/ Sar
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2013
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thank you for your kind words and for reading my poem. I don't really understand from your review why you are giving me such a low rating. but, thank you for reviewing and if you have the time perhaps you could explain. mike
Comment from Sankey
Very good. Complex but good. I see several themes in here.
Loneliness, that hole you feel in your heart when a relationship is broken. I wrote about that in Chapter 11 of my book today.
On spag in your comments field...is (it?)will always be what it really is.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Very good. Complex but good. I see several themes in here.
Loneliness, that hole you feel in your heart when a relationship is broken. I wrote about that in Chapter 11 of my book today.
On spag in your comments field...is (it?)will always be what it really is.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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yes. good catch. thank you. must find and read that. regards, mike
Comment from Selina Stambi
I was fascinated by the rapid movement of thought in this piece.
No need to pretend to laugh ... no need to laugh ... and I enjoyed it! It reads almost like a bitter monologue from a script.
Nicely done, sir!
Nice to meet you and welcome to Fanstory, Michael. :)
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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I was fascinated by the rapid movement of thought in this piece.
No need to pretend to laugh ... no need to laugh ... and I enjoyed it! It reads almost like a bitter monologue from a script.
Nicely done, sir!
Nice to meet you and welcome to Fanstory, Michael. :)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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thank you very much. nice to meet you as well. very happy to be here where I am considered half sane. ha! kind words. mike
Comment from Darkhorse555
IN THE BEGINNING I LIKE THE WAY YOU ROLL THE WORDS IN THE BUILD UP TO THE FINAL IMPACT OH I BETTER CORK THAT WIND AND BLOW OUT EXCELLENT PIECE I ENJOYED
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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IN THE BEGINNING I LIKE THE WAY YOU ROLL THE WORDS IN THE BUILD UP TO THE FINAL IMPACT OH I BETTER CORK THAT WIND AND BLOW OUT EXCELLENT PIECE I ENJOYED
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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thank you very much. high praise indeed. great to hear you liked this one. mike
Comment from krys123
A man suffering loss of woman who choose not of him. One day be put on a pedestal only to find that she toppled over the stand that you put her on high. "For she is not the dancer in your centerfold" she is not the one for you not the few had envisioned and now alone, alas, you have but one life to live, without her. Very nicely written piece I like your flow and rhythm flowing with a piece. Each sign flows into the other and so on. Making the rhythm and tempo very much alive and also making it easier to read your piece. Thank you for sharing this with us. You have a good one God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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A man suffering loss of woman who choose not of him. One day be put on a pedestal only to find that she toppled over the stand that you put her on high. "For she is not the dancer in your centerfold" she is not the one for you not the few had envisioned and now alone, alas, you have but one life to live, without her. Very nicely written piece I like your flow and rhythm flowing with a piece. Each sign flows into the other and so on. Making the rhythm and tempo very much alive and also making it easier to read your piece. Thank you for sharing this with us. You have a good one God bless.
AK
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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thank you very much. what an encouraging way to great my morning. happy dance and big smile! mike
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You are so very welcome Mike
Comment from TAB_that's me
This sounds a little lonely and forelorn but it is well written and holds the reader's attention throughout. The line 'doubt of what your about' - your should you're.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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This sounds a little lonely and forelorn but it is well written and holds the reader's attention throughout. The line 'doubt of what your about' - your should you're.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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good catch. read it a million times without seeing it. thank you. and for the fine review. mike
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes love can turn from sweet dream to horrible nightmare sometimes. With a breakup it seems that way. But time heals the wound and new and better love can be exchanged.
I like the metaphor of love being a cyclone.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Yes love can turn from sweet dream to horrible nightmare sometimes. With a breakup it seems that way. But time heals the wound and new and better love can be exchanged.
I like the metaphor of love being a cyclone.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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with this king of encouragement I surely will. thank you. mike
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You're very welcome, Mike.
Joan
Comment from rhonny
Wow! What a deep and dark place is this place you write about. Your words paint vivid pictures in words that flow nicely into rhythmic lines for us.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Wow! What a deep and dark place is this place you write about. Your words paint vivid pictures in words that flow nicely into rhythmic lines for us.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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how very nice to here. delighted. thank you so much. mike
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that's ok :O)
