Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a fantastic poem and a great story. I can't imagine doing that - how scary! I love the free style and the occasional rhyme.
~Teresa~

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks Theresa. Glad you liked it.

Comment from denhagan

Excellent

This was an interesting free style poem to read about a boy trying to catch a train. Had an appropriate picture to accompany the poem. I enjoyed reading this poem.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks denhagan.

reply by denhagan on 22-Aug-2013

You're welcome

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

So you had a the roving bug as a youth too. I always wanted to hop a train. Hearing the whistle in the distance always makes me yearn to travel. Free verse pacing serves the rhythm of your run well, the brass handle akin to a brass ring. Just glad that when you tripped you did not do an Anna karanina.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thank you Ravenblack. Me too just scuffed knees and torn jeans.

Comment from Sararb

Excellent

A great poem about the train. Oh wow! You were quiet daring as a teen. You are lucky that you didn't get thrown under the moving train. It is scary to think of the chance teens will take. great job! Sara :)

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks Sara. I tried to give it drama.

Comment from SteveY

Excellent

Wow, excellent story that you've managed to tell here. Yes teenagers do really crazy things but it's not only limited to the boys. Great job with this one though!

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 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thank you SteveY. True, especially these days.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

I've always been fascinated with trains; your well-crafted free verse is no exception;
Great audio imagery;
Good visual imagery"black engine gathers steam"; "burnished handle" express adventurous boyhood pastimes with mechanical marvels.
Excellent! A great story-in-a-poem.

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 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thank you Margaret. And a true one too.