Amazing Space
A poem incorporating two colors18 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
I really love your title and have to wonder if its a bit of a pun about Amazing Grace? The picture is captivating and sets the tone. You presented and used the two colors well and with imagination. I like your words juxtaposing and juggling. I can especially see the pink color in the line about, "A happy person's face". The length of this poem is perfect for someone like me who isn't terribly gifted at reading modern stuff and free verse style poetry.
Five stars from the Canadian reviewer, Joy.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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I really love your title and have to wonder if its a bit of a pun about Amazing Grace? The picture is captivating and sets the tone. You presented and used the two colors well and with imagination. I like your words juxtaposing and juggling. I can especially see the pink color in the line about, "A happy person's face". The length of this poem is perfect for someone like me who isn't terribly gifted at reading modern stuff and free verse style poetry.
Five stars from the Canadian reviewer, Joy.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2013
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Joy, thank you for your thoughtful review. I appreciate it.
Nichola
Comment from Parissa
This poem is very descriptive and I can picture in my head the colors being used. Soft, pink verses steel blue. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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This poem is very descriptive and I can picture in my head the colors being used. Soft, pink verses steel blue. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. When I wrote this poem, I too, visualized the colors and the moments associated with the colors. It is one of my favorites for that reason.
Comment from denhagan
This was an interesting poem to read, written in the free style form, where the author uses two colors to describe a steel blue bridge and pink people.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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This was an interesting poem to read, written in the free style form, where the author uses two colors to describe a steel blue bridge and pink people.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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ha ha ha, I like your take on this!!!! Better than blue people and a pink bridge!!!!!!!
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You're welcome,
Dennis
Comment from Darkhorse555
STEEL BLUE LAUGHING AT THE CONFUSION A SMALL MIRACLE A HAPPY FACE WITH A THINKING CAP ON MAKING USE OF THE SPACE BEAUTIFUL PIECE
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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STEEL BLUE LAUGHING AT THE CONFUSION A SMALL MIRACLE A HAPPY FACE WITH A THINKING CAP ON MAKING USE OF THE SPACE BEAUTIFUL PIECE
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thank you Darkhorse555.
Comment from Cookie333
Ahhh, I read it through once, then I read your notes, then it all made perfect sense, the creative (dancer perhaps, in pink?) and the steel eyed engineer (analytical or critical thinker?). Great one my friend,
thank you
k
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Ahhh, I read it through once, then I read your notes, then it all made perfect sense, the creative (dancer perhaps, in pink?) and the steel eyed engineer (analytical or critical thinker?). Great one my friend,
thank you
k
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thank you for liking my poem and for your comments.
Comment from elchupakabra
Really great work overall on this piece. It had smooth flow, a good and interesting choice in vocab;I especially enjoy the line juxtaposing geometries. The imagery was and linework was strong and very well writ. Excellent work on this piece, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Really great work overall on this piece. It had smooth flow, a good and interesting choice in vocab;I especially enjoy the line juxtaposing geometries. The imagery was and linework was strong and very well writ. Excellent work on this piece, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Well you have satisfied the requirements for the Short and Colourful prompt - steel blue and pink. Two colours repeated in the poem. Steel blue eyes and pink dancing shoes in a good short happy poem. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Well you have satisfied the requirements for the Short and Colourful prompt - steel blue and pink. Two colours repeated in the poem. Steel blue eyes and pink dancing shoes in a good short happy poem. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thank you Dorothy.
Comment from ravenblack
and whether we realize it or not, it is a constant struggle. like the photo as when we are driving, all the spatial relationships our brain engages in - especially in new territory - does unlock/refresh the creative mind. always have a digital, hand held recorder for the ride. interesting use of blue and pink, an abstract in the process of being put together.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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and whether we realize it or not, it is a constant struggle. like the photo as when we are driving, all the spatial relationships our brain engages in - especially in new territory - does unlock/refresh the creative mind. always have a digital, hand held recorder for the ride. interesting use of blue and pink, an abstract in the process of being put together.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thank you for reviewing my poem in such detail. It is a constant struggle, especially for those with mental illness, such as bipolar disorder.
Perhaps the reason I write, is because I have spent much of my life in new territories.
Thank you for the idea of the hand held digital recorder. I should invest in one.
Comment from MarjorieAnne
Fantastic metaphors, brilliantly imaginative words and phrases. Excellent photo and note. All of us as writers identify with this continual interplay of left and right brain, emotion and intellect, strength and beauty. Thanks for portraying the contest as a dance! Only thing I might change is more variety in punctuation, instead of all commas: maybe replace some adjectives with verbs.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Fantastic metaphors, brilliantly imaginative words and phrases. Excellent photo and note. All of us as writers identify with this continual interplay of left and right brain, emotion and intellect, strength and beauty. Thanks for portraying the contest as a dance! Only thing I might change is more variety in punctuation, instead of all commas: maybe replace some adjectives with verbs.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thank you for your kind and helpful suggestions. I appreciate your feedback which was given in a very constructive manner!
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You're welcome. I'm trying to earn points and member dollars as a reviewer :)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very enjoyable and thought-provoking poem. Good use of color to infer meaning. I like your use of strong verbs and your artwork, too~Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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A very enjoyable and thought-provoking poem. Good use of color to infer meaning. I like your use of strong verbs and your artwork, too~Debbie
Comment Written 29-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2013
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Thank you for your kind review, Debbie.
