Dark Night Delivers
5/3/5 Lune poem32 total reviews
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Evening, Bev
I've not yet written in Lune form, though I'm often described as
as Lune-a-tic, LOL. I admire the message you've woven in these
few lines. Indeed, a dark night is the 'laundromat' of day's stress and
always ends with a fresh start, a new day.
Well done,
Ray
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Good Evening, Bev
I've not yet written in Lune form, though I'm often described as
as Lune-a-tic, LOL. I admire the message you've woven in these
few lines. Indeed, a dark night is the 'laundromat' of day's stress and
always ends with a fresh start, a new day.
Well done,
Ray
Comment Written 13-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Ray, how gracious of you to go into my portfolio and review for a pittance! You are a very special guy, you know. I think I'm getting some sort of message - you're the second person to review this poem today! Hmmm.....
One thing I'm pretty sure I'll never tackle is the sonnet. I couldn't imagine coming even close to your ability to write them so beautifully. And I'm so happy to see all the great reviews you're getting for it. About time you got a poem in the POM, Ray. And I'm hoping this one will be the charm for you.
Have a wonderful week, my friend.
Warmest regards, Bev
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Thanks so much, Bev. I regret not being able to read much of your works, or others in the recent months. Just glad I found your poem tonight. I love reading people I admire and don't need/require high payouts, just good verse. That's payout enough, and your poem this evening was significant in the payout with its poetic flare and message. :) thank you for your very kind comments. I'd love to take a class with you again.
Ray
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You're very welcome, Ray. I'm signed on for the November horror class. Not much of a chance I'll see you there I'm guessing LOL. Maybe we'll catch up sometime in one of Brooke's classes. She's a great teacher -- a feeling I know you share.
:0) Bev
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Yes, horror is what I deal with day in and day out at work, so I wouldn't take it as a class! LOL. but yes, perhaps Brooke in the spring. :)
R
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Perhaps I'll see you then. :0)
Comment from Maustin
Your little work says so much in its few words. You are so right about what a dark night can do. It is something how what it can bring in. You explored that perfectly in this 5/3/5. Love the art work. Wish I had a six left. A virtual 6. Good write and presentation.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Your little work says so much in its few words. You are so right about what a dark night can do. It is something how what it can bring in. You explored that perfectly in this 5/3/5. Love the art work. Wish I had a six left. A virtual 6. Good write and presentation.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Miracle. Your review is very timely for me. I've been thinking of doing some poetry writing as a break from prose.
Sure appreciate it, my lovely friend. Big Hug, Bev
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So welcome, Bev. Great write!!! ,)
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XXXOOO
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Comment from Joan E.
I am pleased you also tried your hand at this form. Your created a thought-provoking message. Your artwork choice is perfect as well. Hugs and here's to a great new week- Joan
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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I am pleased you also tried your hand at this form. Your created a thought-provoking message. Your artwork choice is perfect as well. Hugs and here's to a great new week- Joan
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much, Joan. :0) Bev
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Writingfundimension .....
The words that you have presented in this short work with a syllable count of just 535, certainly invite further thought from your readers.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2013
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Hullo Writingfundimension .....
The words that you have presented in this short work with a syllable count of just 535, certainly invite further thought from your readers.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing these thoughts with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much, Nanette Mary. I am honored by our generous and gracious review. Blessings, Bev
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes, it most certainly does...
A very beautifully done hauku.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2013
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Yes, it most certainly does...
A very beautifully done hauku.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2013
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Dean, thank you for this gracious review! Love the ribbon. :0) Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
A good one to finish the day on, my dear friend. How true this is. The old adage, of course - sleep on it. It took me a long time to learn that. I tend to be quick to react - the 'knee jerk' response. I've learned to take a breath, and step back - or 'sleep on it'. The morning does, indeed, bring new perspectives.
Speaking of sleep... it's been a long and busy day, so...
ZZZzzzzz LOL!
Sleep well, Bev, and sweet dreams!
Love and hugs,
Av
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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A good one to finish the day on, my dear friend. How true this is. The old adage, of course - sleep on it. It took me a long time to learn that. I tend to be quick to react - the 'knee jerk' response. I've learned to take a breath, and step back - or 'sleep on it'. The morning does, indeed, bring new perspectives.
Speaking of sleep... it's been a long and busy day, so...
ZZZzzzzz LOL!
Sleep well, Bev, and sweet dreams!
Love and hugs,
Av
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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You've expressed perfectly what prompted me to write this poem, Av. As always, you get at what is the heart of the writing. And thank you for the very-generous six, I'm really honored. I'm writing this to you in the A.M. here in Michigan and I actually had a great dream last night LOL.
Love to you,
Bev
Comment from Connie C
What an excellent entry this is for the contest, Bev. The way I like to read this is that the dark night symbolizes tribulations that might bring about a new perspective and, thus, a "fresh, new day." So much said in so few words! My best to you in the contest.
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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What an excellent entry this is for the contest, Bev. The way I like to read this is that the dark night symbolizes tribulations that might bring about a new perspective and, thus, a "fresh, new day." So much said in so few words! My best to you in the contest.
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much, Connie - I love your interpretation of my little poem. And I appreciate your good wishes! Always great to hear from you, my friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from donkeyoatey
I am always amazed when a writer is able to get so many feelings and emotions and thoughts into so few words! That truly is an amazing talent. I appreciate you choosing my artwork to go with this thank you. DonkeyOatey
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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I am always amazed when a writer is able to get so many feelings and emotions and thoughts into so few words! That truly is an amazing talent. I appreciate you choosing my artwork to go with this thank you. DonkeyOatey
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you for this thoroughly gracious and thoughtful review, D. It's most kind of you to read and review. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh Bev, what a marvelous poem - yes! Dark night does deliver perspective, in more ways than one. For me this captures the magic of an inky sky, a million sparkling stars, the romance of a full moon...(*sigh*) but it can also be said that everything looks so much different at night - changes our perspective so completely. So, it's really saying a lot for a tiny poem!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Oh Bev, what a marvelous poem - yes! Dark night does deliver perspective, in more ways than one. For me this captures the magic of an inky sky, a million sparkling stars, the romance of a full moon...(*sigh*) but it can also be said that everything looks so much different at night - changes our perspective so completely. So, it's really saying a lot for a tiny poem!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Dawn, what an amazing review! Thank you for this elegant review and sharing your perspective. Yes, you have gotten to the heart of what I intended with this poem. Always so good to hear from you! Hugs, Bev
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It was so much my pleasure!
Comment from gene roush
very nice work
You managed to give an incredible perspective on life using nine words -- I'd use a hundred-thousand and do less.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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very nice work
You managed to give an incredible perspective on life using nine words -- I'd use a hundred-thousand and do less.
Thanks for sharing
Gene
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you for this gracious review, Gene. I appreciate it.
:0) Bev
