Becky Bacardin
This is an 800 word short story about fame.3 total reviews
Comment from SaluteDobby
Well done, I really liked this story. Loved the narration-her sureptitious manner, her dismay, etc. It seemed very realistic! Cute ending too.
You definitely have my vote for this!All the best with the contest :)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Well done, I really liked this story. Loved the narration-her sureptitious manner, her dismay, etc. It seemed very realistic! Cute ending too.
You definitely have my vote for this!All the best with the contest :)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thank you for reading my story and for your comments.
Comment from angelajfrank
it a good story. Becky could of got into a car accident. than drove into Janes car and took off and began to laugh and talk. No worries about anything. you should of been happy that nothing bad happened.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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it a good story. Becky could of got into a car accident. than drove into Janes car and took off and began to laugh and talk. No worries about anything. you should of been happy that nothing bad happened.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Interesting idea about what to add to the story. Another reviewer said there was not enough excitement in the story, and I have to agree. I think you are way too kind to be giving me an excellent rating for this though!!!! I believe it needs work.
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no its pretty good. keep on the good writing. i hope you enjoy my poem i wrote.
Comment from j.moore
Was OK did not have enough excitement in the story. It tried to show she was not happy with fame. A good scenery was set up but I did not see the story taking off from there. Was not one of my favorite. Still was a cute story. thank you
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Was OK did not have enough excitement in the story. It tried to show she was not happy with fame. A good scenery was set up but I did not see the story taking off from there. Was not one of my favorite. Still was a cute story. thank you
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thanks for your input. Actually, it was not one of my favorites either. I think it needs more work, but I found it challenging to write a story under 800 words. To me, it seems an unfinished story, perhaps the beginning of one.
