fire and ice (haiku)
Nature 5/7/5 Prompt Contest21 total reviews
Comment from Saucey
Well I must agree this piece is loaded with fire from the presentation to the wording. Syllables are on point so perfection it is. Well done gurlllllll:)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Well I must agree this piece is loaded with fire from the presentation to the wording. Syllables are on point so perfection it is. Well done gurlllllll:)
Comment Written 27-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Oh Wow! Thank you Saucey. I greatly appreciate your savvy comments and exceptional rating. Have a wonderful night! JR
Comment from EMB
Yes, that is definitely an accurate way of looking at the change of seasons when autumn approaches. I liked this one. I found it to be fresh and original. Very nice. :)
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Yes, that is definitely an accurate way of looking at the change of seasons when autumn approaches. I liked this one. I found it to be fresh and original. Very nice. :)
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Hi Edward, I'm very happy that you enjoyed the read. Thanks for your gracious comments and generous rating. Kindest regards, JR
Comment from Ridley Williams
Beautiful colors to go with this piece.
The red carpet of fall leads the way
to the white pristine carpet of winter.
Nice thought, Ridley
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Beautiful colors to go with this piece.
The red carpet of fall leads the way
to the white pristine carpet of winter.
Nice thought, Ridley
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Hi Ridley, I'm delighted that you enjoyed the read. Many thanks for your wonderful comments and generous rating. Kindest regards, JR
Comment from kiwijenny
Beautiful and dramatic..................this is a great little poem...............
Autumn turns to watch leaves fall
Across winters path.........
Beautiful
God bless
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Beautiful and dramatic..................this is a great little poem...............
Autumn turns to watch leaves fall
Across winters path.........
Beautiful
God bless
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Hi Jenny, Smiles all around... I appreciate your most generous comments and favorable rating. It means a great deal to me. Kindest regards :)
Comment from Righteous Riter
The syllable count is consistent with that of a 5-7-5. The photo fits this piece perfectly as the words bring the photo to life. The writer delivers a message that is short, simple and to the point.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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The syllable count is consistent with that of a 5-7-5. The photo fits this piece perfectly as the words bring the photo to life. The writer delivers a message that is short, simple and to the point.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Hi Righteous, I appreciate your gracious comments and favorable rating. Kindest regards :)
Comment from ravenblack
Can't go wrong
With the contrast
Of fire and ice.
Flames of bursting flair- excellent line,the word play between flair as in style and flare as in flame like a road flare. And such a natural personification of autumn that it is barely noticed. Red leaves in contrast to white - excellent work.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Can't go wrong
With the contrast
Of fire and ice.
Flames of bursting flair- excellent line,the word play between flair as in style and flare as in flame like a road flare. And such a natural personification of autumn that it is barely noticed. Red leaves in contrast to white - excellent work.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Hi Ed, That means a great deal to me. I realized the personification which is most consistent with my style. I'm used to the static and do what I do best - ignore that rule. Frankly, I've never understood the opposition since ancients like "Issa" often used that device. I've seen a lot of change in acceptable rules of haiku over the years. Who knows, perhaps personification will go out with the trend. Thanks for your beautiful comments and excellent rating. Best regards :)
Comment from wierdgrace
You can look at this for a while and see so much, your words described it wonderfully and I loved it for this contest, I wish you luck in the voting, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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You can look at this for a while and see so much, your words described it wonderfully and I loved it for this contest, I wish you luck in the voting, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Hi Grace, That means a great deal to me. My utmost thanks for your beautiful comments and considerate rating. Smiles! Warmest regards
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
SUCH A NICE VERBAL PAINTING HERE THAT YOU CREATED I KNOW HOW DIFFICULT IT IS TO MAKE SOMETHING UNDERSTANDABLE IN THIS FORMAT BUT YOU HAVE SUCCEEDED IN DOING IT
TK
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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SUCH A NICE VERBAL PAINTING HERE THAT YOU CREATED I KNOW HOW DIFFICULT IT IS TO MAKE SOMETHING UNDERSTANDABLE IN THIS FORMAT BUT YOU HAVE SUCCEEDED IN DOING IT
TK
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Hi TK, I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the read. Many thanks for your wonderful comments and generous rating. It means a great deal to me. Have a wonderful night!
Comment from Dutchie
Wonderful Haiku and very well expressed in well chosen words and perfect syllable count. Picture and poem go so well together. Well done!! Fia
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Wonderful Haiku and very well expressed in well chosen words and perfect syllable count. Picture and poem go so well together. Well done!! Fia
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Hi Fia, Huge Smiles! Thanks so much for your wonderful comments and generous rating. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the read. Have a great night! Kindest regards*
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A lovely Nature 5/7/5 and a good picture to go with it. You have the correct syllable count and have mentioned the word Nature in the poem which was required. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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A lovely Nature 5/7/5 and a good picture to go with it. You have the correct syllable count and have mentioned the word Nature in the poem which was required. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Hi Dorothy, Thank you so much. I'm thrilled with the rating and I sincerely appreciate your wonderful comments. Kindest regards*
