Geoff's Book Of Poultry
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Toodle Loo"My Book Of Funny Poems and Stories.
26 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I didn't find "Spring is Here" but I stumbled on this "Loo" poem. You had me laughing from the title to the wordplay with "bum" and your rhymes. Thanks for the fun- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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I didn't find "Spring is Here" but I stumbled on this "Loo" poem. You had me laughing from the title to the wordplay with "bum" and your rhymes. Thanks for the fun- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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I will find the other and give you the link to it. Glad you like this, one of a few "pooey" poems from my work days and other stuff.
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At last can,contact you. Something wrong with your profile. That poem I was talking about is Chapter 5 in,this collection. For some reason you are hard to contact through your profile. Might just be this darn Mobile(Cell for you!!😒
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I am sorry you've been encountering problems communicating. Thank you for the additional information. -J
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh, my, what a shame. Some people just have no respect, or caring for others. I can't believe they leave their own homes so trashed. A shame, blessings...
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Oh, my, what a shame. Some people just have no respect, or caring for others. I can't believe they leave their own homes so trashed. A shame, blessings...
Comment Written 27-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Hi friend thanks. It is shared facilities at work. Making the point if like this at work, what are their homes like, hehe
Comment from Thal1959
Just though I'd stop by, Geoff. An interesting twist for you. Reminds me of the jingle that is commonly found on the walls in men's rooms here in America...
"Here I sit, broken hearted,
tried to shit, but only farted."
Potty humor - oh, well.
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Just though I'd stop by, Geoff. An interesting twist for you. Reminds me of the jingle that is commonly found on the walls in men's rooms here in America...
"Here I sit, broken hearted,
tried to shit, but only farted."
Potty humor - oh, well.
Comment Written 27-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Thanks mate, how did I do Comma wise. Remind me to share a great Gif file Dean Kuch gave me have a look down through the reviews and you will see it! I loved it, saved it for myself!
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The commas are perfect. You have them bracket "guys" which is used as an identifier to whom the line is speaking... and after "But" in the next line. Punctuation is perfect.
Leave it to Dean to come up with something like that gif!
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Yeah Thal I think he might have designed that himself! I guess you saw it back a ways in here?
Comment from bookishfabler
Well, this certainly was an interesting little ditty. I have no idea about it's style or form or any of that. All I know it made me smile.
hugs HEidi
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Well, this certainly was an interesting little ditty. I have no idea about it's style or form or any of that. All I know it made me smile.
hugs HEidi
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Heidi that was the idea there is more coming. Sorry the picture is gone. Thanks for the lovely review.
Comment from Caressa_08
I must admit your Toodle Loo poem got my attention, and think, it looks to be when a bum has to go, and he has to find a toilet somewhere on the street to do his business, I guess they're aren't many homeless shelters in Australia that have proper restrooms, if this happens quite a bit over there.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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I must admit your Toodle Loo poem got my attention, and think, it looks to be when a bum has to go, and he has to find a toilet somewhere on the street to do his business, I guess they're aren't many homeless shelters in Australia that have proper restrooms, if this happens quite a bit over there.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Hi Sis this was mainly addressed to fellow workers in the public service who were lax in their clean up after themselves in shared facilities. Thanks for coming along.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Yuck. You have penned this charming poem about one of life's displeasure's. It is disgusting enough to have to use a public bathroom - but even worse to follow someone so despicable they would leave a mess like this!
~patty~
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Yuck. You have penned this charming poem about one of life's displeasure's. It is disgusting enough to have to use a public bathroom - but even worse to follow someone so despicable they would leave a mess like this!
~patty~
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Yep mate and it gets worse there is more of this pooey stuff coming hehe. Thanks for the lovely review.
Comment from Sasha
This is really funny. I got a big kick out of it too. I didn't know you were also a poultry poet. The image didn't show here, but the wording was filled with enough imagery to get the point across very well. I look forward to reading the next one.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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This is really funny. I got a big kick out of it too. I didn't know you were also a poultry poet. The image didn't show here, but the wording was filled with enough imagery to get the point across very well. I look forward to reading the next one.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thanks Sasha, I knew people would enjoy these. I dunno what happened to the image some are seeing it some not it is from Fan Art I might get Tom to look into it. A new lady FS Fan and Fb friend has just gone all the way back into my Biography at no reward which is lovely.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
There is no picture which I feel would have really made this piece stick out. Double meaning and I understood more after I read the notes you gave us. We have a school here that has the same problem and no one seems to care
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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There is no picture which I feel would have really made this piece stick out. Double meaning and I understood more after I read the notes you gave us. We have a school here that has the same problem and no one seems to care
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi barb funny how Roy in South Australia saw a picture. I don't know what happened. I got a gross gif cartoon from Dean Kuch I can share with you or if you look back through these you will see it...so funny! I saved it. Thanks again.
Comment from Ben Colder
Wow. Crapped in your seat? What never. He must been high on something or low in ignorance. Sorry I have been out of pocket and not read your work. Getting things ready for the publisher. Best to you Bro.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Wow. Crapped in your seat? What never. He must been high on something or low in ignorance. Sorry I have been out of pocket and not read your work. Getting things ready for the publisher. Best to you Bro.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thanks Bro Ben so good seeing you again. have a look at the gif file Dean Kuch put on his review of this back a ways. I saved it. hehe! Did you see the pic with this some said yes some said no?? The biography is finished and a lovely new fan has beautifully gone all the way back for no rewards to read from the start! I nearly quit FS but my renewal came up too quick so I had to renew again and 2 years was not much dearer than one.
Comment from royowen
I like this great piece of poetry mate Geoff, I've experienced many outside dunnies, in the fifties we had a "picked up" dunny, then we graduated to a septic, much to the chagrin of my father. (Many blockages) digging up a gross back yard, beautifully written Goeff, great, amusing narrative. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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I like this great piece of poetry mate Geoff, I've experienced many outside dunnies, in the fifties we had a "picked up" dunny, then we graduated to a septic, much to the chagrin of my father. (Many blockages) digging up a gross back yard, beautifully written Goeff, great, amusing narrative. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thanks mate did the picture appear it was from Fan art. Appreciate the great review.
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Yes it Did Geoff, a goodie, well dine
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Hi again, I told Tom some saw the picture and others didn't have to find another one now. Remind to share a funny GROSS Gif file Dean Kuch gave me or it is the earlier reviews.
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Well done Geoff
