Minnesota Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Canterbury Downs"Poems About and Around Minnesota
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Comment from adewpearl
strong rhymes in each stanza - I'm not so sure I'm a fan of changing the rhyme scheme from stanza to stanza
good alliteration in handicappers forecast horse's fate
and in bugle blows
strong verbs add to the drama of the race - verbs like churn,
flew, throw
churn up/ flew down - I would change it to fly for tense consistency
Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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strong rhymes in each stanza - I'm not so sure I'm a fan of changing the rhyme scheme from stanza to stanza
good alliteration in handicappers forecast horse's fate
and in bugle blows
strong verbs add to the drama of the race - verbs like churn,
flew, throw
churn up/ flew down - I would change it to fly for tense consistency
Brooke
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you Brooke..
Comment from modestreject22
Strong poem you have here. The format of the stanzas help dictate the flow of the poem, which inversely gave the poem a vigorous musicality. The last line resonated with me and left me with a powerful impression. The imagery was vibrant and kept me intrigued as a reader the entire poem. Good job with this one keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Strong poem you have here. The format of the stanzas help dictate the flow of the poem, which inversely gave the poem a vigorous musicality. The last line resonated with me and left me with a powerful impression. The imagery was vibrant and kept me intrigued as a reader the entire poem. Good job with this one keep up the good work!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much modestreject22. I am pleased by the depth of your review.
Comment from ravenblack
Your rhythm really captures the gallop, the thundering of hooves. My daughter rides, and this is one I'm going to have her read. Like the detail of exhaling smoke. I steer clear of the tracks- went once and got a bit carried away ( too much beer and betting...and then no beer 'cause I was broke).
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Your rhythm really captures the gallop, the thundering of hooves. My daughter rides, and this is one I'm going to have her read. Like the detail of exhaling smoke. I steer clear of the tracks- went once and got a bit carried away ( too much beer and betting...and then no beer 'cause I was broke).
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thanks Ravenblack. I try to practise moderation in everything. Mostly successful.
Comment from Gungalo
Dreaming about the winnings I'd fetch,
With the leading horse, I'm in heaven!
But then, it faded in the last stretch.
Too bad I bet on number seven!
That happened to me once but the horse dropped dead coming in the homestretch. LOL and it was leading too.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Dreaming about the winnings I'd fetch,
With the leading horse, I'm in heaven!
But then, it faded in the last stretch.
Too bad I bet on number seven!
That happened to me once but the horse dropped dead coming in the homestretch. LOL and it was leading too.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thanks Gungalo. LOL. . :0})
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Thanks Gungalo. LOL. . :0})
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LOL smile.
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LOL.
Comment from Sararb
This was an outstanding rhyming verse never missing a beat. Describing the exhilaration of watching the horse racing, and hoping that you have picked the winner. I love going to the horse races. It has been a long time since I have been, but it is exciting to place your bets on your favorite. I usually go by the names or numbers. Great job! Sara :)
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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This was an outstanding rhyming verse never missing a beat. Describing the exhilaration of watching the horse racing, and hoping that you have picked the winner. I love going to the horse races. It has been a long time since I have been, but it is exciting to place your bets on your favorite. I usually go by the names or numbers. Great job! Sara :)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you Sara. Yes it is, I try to figure the right combination of the Jockey and horse.
Comment from lorijean
Nothing better than a day at the races, such fun and a lovely atmosphere, a day full of excitement and colour, just like your great poem....
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Nothing better than a day at the races, such fun and a lovely atmosphere, a day full of excitement and colour, just like your great poem....
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you lorijean, yes, if you don't go crazy betting, it actually good family entertainment.
Comment from Capricorn30
A well-penned sports writing, as great audio imagery: "bugle blows"; "cheering fans"; "rolling thunder" easily places the reader amongst the betting crowds;
Good video imagery--"powerful hooves churn up the turf".
Thank you for sharing your eventful evening in poetic form.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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A well-penned sports writing, as great audio imagery: "bugle blows"; "cheering fans"; "rolling thunder" easily places the reader amongst the betting crowds;
Good video imagery--"powerful hooves churn up the turf".
Thank you for sharing your eventful evening in poetic form.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you Margaret. Glad to share fun experiences.
Comment from joneau2
You are indeed a prolific writer. Once again, your poems are marvelous, and this one is no exception. It's very well written and flows from end to end.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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You are indeed a prolific writer. Once again, your poems are marvelous, and this one is no exception. It's very well written and flows from end to end.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you joneau2. I appreciTe the comments and compliment.
