Karma
If at first you don't succeed...50 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
I felt you were all over the place. I couldn't figure what the story was about. The protagonist was a dying crow who is miraculously revived. Well, it's a twist. I guess even crows go through the tunnel of light. It's different. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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I felt you were all over the place. I couldn't figure what the story was about. The protagonist was a dying crow who is miraculously revived. Well, it's a twist. I guess even crows go through the tunnel of light. It's different. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Comment from Jackarrie
I think you did a brilliant job with this prompt, you wrote a very good humorous short story, I really enjoyed it, I loved the phrase "I'd die laughing, if I wasn't, well ... you know."
Well done and good luck in the competition. Mary
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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I think you did a brilliant job with this prompt, you wrote a very good humorous short story, I really enjoyed it, I loved the phrase "I'd die laughing, if I wasn't, well ... you know."
Well done and good luck in the competition. Mary
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Comment from N.K. Wagner
You caught me. I love it. Your flash fiction entry made me laugh. The bottle cap collection spelling "Murderer" in the driveway was a great touch. Good luck. :D Nancy
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You caught me. I love it. Your flash fiction entry made me laugh. The bottle cap collection spelling "Murderer" in the driveway was a great touch. Good luck. :D Nancy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Comment from Rondeno
A humorous take on those near-death experience things we see and read about, and on the Buddhist concept of rebirth. It's well done, and your punch line is cleverly set up.
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A humorous take on those near-death experience things we see and read about, and on the Buddhist concept of rebirth. It's well done, and your punch line is cleverly set up.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Comment from InkBottle
Haha! Wonderfully written and original story. Very introspective and fresh when it comes to the "light at the end of the tunnel" concept. Well done!
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Haha! Wonderfully written and original story. Very introspective and fresh when it comes to the "light at the end of the tunnel" concept. Well done!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Wow. Thank you so very much! You made my day. :-)
Comment from Mary-Kate
It meet the criteria and took a comical view on the words used. I wasn't too sure were it was going, but I then understood the title of 'Karma'. A good tale.
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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It meet the criteria and took a comical view on the words used. I wasn't too sure were it was going, but I then understood the title of 'Karma'. A good tale.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Comment from Craigitar
Well written, clever and entertaining little story. You got a good laugh out of me with this one--very imaginative write.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Well written, clever and entertaining little story. You got a good laugh out of me with this one--very imaginative write.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Comment from Liz Dunbee
I just loved this. It was very entertaining. You used all the necessary words, and your ending had a great little twist. Good Luck in the contest. You have done an excellent job.
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I just loved this. It was very entertaining. You used all the necessary words, and your ending had a great little twist. Good Luck in the contest. You have done an excellent job.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
Oh, very well done, indeed! There is justice, even for crows. But then everyone knows you can't kill 'em. A great imagination and an incredible use of the key words. Well done.
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Oh, very well done, indeed! There is justice, even for crows. But then everyone knows you can't kill 'em. A great imagination and an incredible use of the key words. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Comment from Sonjalee
All the words have been used.
The rules were followed very well. The story was a good one. It held my attention to the end . The last two lines were interesting...? watched, horrified, as the small black body on the ground gasps.
Aw crap[, caw, caw , caw.
Well done. I liked it. Well written. I have nothing to add.
Sonjalee
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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All the words have been used.
The rules were followed very well. The story was a good one. It held my attention to the end . The last two lines were interesting...? watched, horrified, as the small black body on the ground gasps.
Aw crap[, caw, caw , caw.
Well done. I liked it. Well written. I have nothing to add.
Sonjalee
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
