My Faith Restores
a rondeau185 total reviews
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
"There is no place where dark belongs within a heart that hears hope's songs --" ..... what an insightful and inspirational message to all to never lose hope and to keep the darkness out.
An excellent Rondeau, Brooke. A pleasure to read.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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"There is no place where dark belongs within a heart that hears hope's songs --" ..... what an insightful and inspirational message to all to never lose hope and to keep the darkness out.
An excellent Rondeau, Brooke. A pleasure to read.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Connie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very peaceful poem I like it very much my friend it shows how much faith you have got very well written good luck in the contest thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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This is a very peaceful poem I like it very much my friend it shows how much faith you have got very well written good luck in the contest thank you for sharing
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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dmt, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Norbanus
Delightful how you've flowed this out
to let us see the rhythm
The picture painted by your word
will hold us tightly to them
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Delightful how you've flowed this out
to let us see the rhythm
The picture painted by your word
will hold us tightly to them
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
Comment from 3boysrule
Brooke, I really enjoyed this poem. It's important to have faith restored. I also loved the photo you chose. It was simply renewing.
Dee
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Brooke, I really enjoyed this poem. It's important to have faith restored. I also loved the photo you chose. It was simply renewing.
Dee
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Dee, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
Technically this seemed to be your priority, judging by your comments. yet the poem is beautiful as you battle with the sublime.
I tend not to concentrate too heavily on the technicalities of my poems, more on feeling. But this was well thought through and you achieved a balance of a good delivery.
Very beautiful and well written. Well done.
RGstar
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Technically this seemed to be your priority, judging by your comments. yet the poem is beautiful as you battle with the sublime.
I tend not to concentrate too heavily on the technicalities of my poems, more on feeling. But this was well thought through and you achieved a balance of a good delivery.
Very beautiful and well written. Well done.
RGstar
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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The author's notes discuss the technical aspect for those who want to write this form. They in no way indicate I place more priority on the technical aspects of the poem. I don't discuss the content or feeling of the poem in the author's notes because I think they should come through in the poem itself without explanation. Thank you for your review :-) Brooke
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I agree with that. Yes the thread should be seen without too much reading backwards and forwards. Some writers though do have a high priority on the technical aspects and so concentrate little on interpretation. I in no way put you in that category.n Absolutely beautiful.
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Brooke
Lovely to hear your words in this classic rondeau. Faith is a lot easier when life is running smoothly and we get what we want. These days I guess that is becoming more difficult as external tragedy impacts us as we move towards the more global aspects of life. We also find depression, drugs and alcohol, street violence moving into the neighbourhoods we once felt safe in ... and into our own homes.
The simple things in life and an appreciation and gratitude for them are what is important. This awareness is what I feel from your poem. Many/most of us have challenges and to use the pleasure of the morning at dawn, the birdsong to restore our well-being, to feel hope in our hearts .... God's gifts surely does all that. Even poor or war torn countries have some hope in the beauty of the dawn, even the homeless, those suffering potential terminal illnesses, even on death row.
The opportunity is there, we just have to open our eyes or feel that sunlight on our cheeks, hear the birds sing..... even if we have to do it from memory. Faith can always be restored and is boundless. Your poem is powerful and up-lifting and your words are enough to inspire others to feel the same.
Excellent rhyme and meter (I'm hopeless at meter, yet I know it when I hear it). :))
Good alliteration in "dawn/dawn", "silent/song"/stir", "times/troubles/too", "darkness/drawn", "sorrow/sights", "heart hears/hopes", "songs/shall/sorrow seems/strong". I won't go into the assonance and consonance which is also abundant. An outstanding poem and an entry in the contest which should have high placement. Beautiful. Warmest Hugs - Lovinia xoxoxo **I'm only permitted five stars when I wish you six.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Hi Brooke
Lovely to hear your words in this classic rondeau. Faith is a lot easier when life is running smoothly and we get what we want. These days I guess that is becoming more difficult as external tragedy impacts us as we move towards the more global aspects of life. We also find depression, drugs and alcohol, street violence moving into the neighbourhoods we once felt safe in ... and into our own homes.
The simple things in life and an appreciation and gratitude for them are what is important. This awareness is what I feel from your poem. Many/most of us have challenges and to use the pleasure of the morning at dawn, the birdsong to restore our well-being, to feel hope in our hearts .... God's gifts surely does all that. Even poor or war torn countries have some hope in the beauty of the dawn, even the homeless, those suffering potential terminal illnesses, even on death row.
The opportunity is there, we just have to open our eyes or feel that sunlight on our cheeks, hear the birds sing..... even if we have to do it from memory. Faith can always be restored and is boundless. Your poem is powerful and up-lifting and your words are enough to inspire others to feel the same.
Excellent rhyme and meter (I'm hopeless at meter, yet I know it when I hear it). :))
Good alliteration in "dawn/dawn", "silent/song"/stir", "times/troubles/too", "darkness/drawn", "sorrow/sights", "heart hears/hopes", "songs/shall/sorrow seems/strong". I won't go into the assonance and consonance which is also abundant. An outstanding poem and an entry in the contest which should have high placement. Beautiful. Warmest Hugs - Lovinia xoxoxo **I'm only permitted five stars when I wish you six.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Lovinia, thank you for this most thoughtful and thorough review. I appreciate all your comments and the generous wish for a sixth star. Brooke :-)
Comment from Debra White
Hi Brooke :)
I am really fond of the rondeau form and this is possibly the most beautiful and uplifting rondeau I have read so far. The first stanza is just gorgeous.
The whole presentation is perfect. I love it!
Good luck in the contest. Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Hi Brooke :)
I am really fond of the rondeau form and this is possibly the most beautiful and uplifting rondeau I have read so far. The first stanza is just gorgeous.
The whole presentation is perfect. I love it!
Good luck in the contest. Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Debra, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Terra Dane
Beautiful. Although that should suffice, as what more might one say, except fan story always wants more than just one word. the rondeau was an excellent structural choice for what is expressed here--as in life there is a pattern good and bad, hope and loss, life and death, and for some it is their faith that restores the hope, the good, life.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Beautiful. Although that should suffice, as what more might one say, except fan story always wants more than just one word. the rondeau was an excellent structural choice for what is expressed here--as in life there is a pattern good and bad, hope and loss, life and death, and for some it is their faith that restores the hope, the good, life.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much, SM, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Brooke, I really enjoyed this one. I have never written a Rondeau. You have written to the description perfectly. When sorrow has me in its sights, sorrow seems so strong, my faith restores. Have a great week, Carolyn
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Brooke, I really enjoyed this one. I have never written a Rondeau. You have written to the description perfectly. When sorrow has me in its sights, sorrow seems so strong, my faith restores. Have a great week, Carolyn
Comment Written 14-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2013
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Carolyn, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Heidixoxo
Hello Friend,
Again, I truly enjoyed this piece of poetry you have created. Such a nice flow with a great smooth tone to it. A job very well done and best of luck to you......xoxo
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Hello Friend,
Again, I truly enjoyed this piece of poetry you have created. Such a nice flow with a great smooth tone to it. A job very well done and best of luck to you......xoxo
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Heidi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
