My Faith Restores
a rondeau185 total reviews
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
The theme of the rondeau is excellent without recourse to over sentiment. Despite the usual spiritual references to night/day or sorrow/faith or hope/heart, the poem resonates a basic truth..we have to move on in life despite tribulations and to do that, some survive on faith while others on perseverance or both. Well versed and rhymed with the required meter.
Regards:
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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The theme of the rondeau is excellent without recourse to over sentiment. Despite the usual spiritual references to night/day or sorrow/faith or hope/heart, the poem resonates a basic truth..we have to move on in life despite tribulations and to do that, some survive on faith while others on perseverance or both. Well versed and rhymed with the required meter.
Regards:
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much, Stephen :-) Brooke
Comment from Mastery
An excellent mantra to live by, Brooke:
"Despair shall never win the fight
to wrap my world in endless night,
for just as sorrow seems too strong,
my faith restores.
Very fine writing as usual. Bob
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An excellent mantra to live by, Brooke:
"Despair shall never win the fight
to wrap my world in endless night,
for just as sorrow seems too strong,
my faith restores.
Very fine writing as usual. Bob
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
Comment from denhagan
Excellent Rondeau with a good message. Uses a partial repeating line, holding with the original rondeau. Great rhythm and rhyme scheme.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Excellent Rondeau with a good message. Uses a partial repeating line, holding with the original rondeau. Great rhythm and rhyme scheme.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Denhagan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome Brooke.
I'm debating on whether to take your Advanced Poetry class,
Dennis
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I hope you decide in favor of it :-)
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I have a lot on my plate right now, so I'm not sure I'll be able to. Do you know the days and times the class will be held?
Dennis
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The class will meet on Monday and Wednesday - I always work with the students to find a time that works even if it means teaching two sections :-)
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Thanks Brooke,
That might work out for me.
Dennis
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I sure hope so :-)
Comment from Cedar
This is a very emotional poem about your faith. The second stanza says it all for me. Without our faith, what would we have to get us through troubled times? I wish you the best of luck in the contest. It looks like a sure winner to me. Take care. Bill
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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This is a very emotional poem about your faith. The second stanza says it all for me. Without our faith, what would we have to get us through troubled times? I wish you the best of luck in the contest. It looks like a sure winner to me. Take care. Bill
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Bill, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from mizzkris20
Just beautiful Adewpearl! I loved every line of your poem and it has strengthened me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Just beautiful Adewpearl! I loved every line of your poem and it has strengthened me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much, Kris, for your thoughtful comments and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Quillian
Beautifully constructed poem. I share your sentiment of the sense of renewal in the early morning.
'Despair shall never win the fight to wrap my world in endless night' sounds like a credo.. Beautiful photo you chose....
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Beautifully constructed poem. I share your sentiment of the sense of renewal in the early morning.
'Despair shall never win the fight to wrap my world in endless night' sounds like a credo.. Beautiful photo you chose....
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Quillian, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Lately I've been reading many pieces that feel good to have in my heart as my day goes on. This is such a piece and I'm mighty grateful to have friends like you Brooke. xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Lately I've been reading many pieces that feel good to have in my heart as my day goes on. This is such a piece and I'm mighty grateful to have friends like you Brooke. xoxo deborah
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Deborah, thank you so very much :-) I really appreciate having "reviewers" who are friends. Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Another excellent Rondeau, and a very strong submission for the Faith Poetry contest. Your confidence that your faith will provide comfort and support you comes shining through in the refrain 'My Faith Restores'
Good choice of the two rhyming sounds - That is the key to good Rondeaux.
Loved this one, Brooke.
Rose.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Another excellent Rondeau, and a very strong submission for the Faith Poetry contest. Your confidence that your faith will provide comfort and support you comes shining through in the refrain 'My Faith Restores'
Good choice of the two rhyming sounds - That is the key to good Rondeaux.
Loved this one, Brooke.
Rose.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much, Rose :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
I'm so glad I am able to offer you six stars!
"My faith restores me dawn by dawn
as silent night gives way to song,
and life, once huddled in the night,
begins to stir with morning light
as if the day had never gone." ... I picture you "huddled" in your bed, about to "stir with morning light". The birds are singing outside, "as silent night gives way to song". Dawn has a way of restoring your faith in God, knowing He is always there, whether darkness enfolds or Sun breaks forth. You don't step out of bed without Him at your side.
"At times when troubles last too long
and keep the cloak of darkness drawn,
when sorrow has me in its sights,
my faith restores." ... I especially love your line, "when sorrow has me in its sights". This is fine personification as well as alliteration. It reminds me suddenly of a speech by Sean Penn in the movie "We're No Heroes" when he says,
"Everything happens to everybody. And you ain't gonna find nothing in your pocket that can stave it off. Nothing can stave it off." ...We need God in our lives "dawn by dawn", not just when we run out of ideas on how to handle things, not just when we think we need Him. There's nothing in our own pockets that will help. We need to look to God for help.
I like the alliteration here too,
"within a heart that hears hope's songs"
Your poem is about facing the day, with God at our side,
"Despair shall never win the fight
to wrap my world in endless night,
for just as sorrow seems too strong,
my faith restores."
"He restores my soul; He leads me in the paths of righteousness for His name's sake." Psalm 23:3
Nicely penned, Brooke! Perfect rondeau, this is an excellent entry for the Faith Poetry contest.
blessings
Kimbob
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Hi Brooke
I'm so glad I am able to offer you six stars!
"My faith restores me dawn by dawn
as silent night gives way to song,
and life, once huddled in the night,
begins to stir with morning light
as if the day had never gone." ... I picture you "huddled" in your bed, about to "stir with morning light". The birds are singing outside, "as silent night gives way to song". Dawn has a way of restoring your faith in God, knowing He is always there, whether darkness enfolds or Sun breaks forth. You don't step out of bed without Him at your side.
"At times when troubles last too long
and keep the cloak of darkness drawn,
when sorrow has me in its sights,
my faith restores." ... I especially love your line, "when sorrow has me in its sights". This is fine personification as well as alliteration. It reminds me suddenly of a speech by Sean Penn in the movie "We're No Heroes" when he says,
"Everything happens to everybody. And you ain't gonna find nothing in your pocket that can stave it off. Nothing can stave it off." ...We need God in our lives "dawn by dawn", not just when we run out of ideas on how to handle things, not just when we think we need Him. There's nothing in our own pockets that will help. We need to look to God for help.
I like the alliteration here too,
"within a heart that hears hope's songs"
Your poem is about facing the day, with God at our side,
"Despair shall never win the fight
to wrap my world in endless night,
for just as sorrow seems too strong,
my faith restores."
"He restores my soul; He leads me in the paths of righteousness for His name's sake." Psalm 23:3
Nicely penned, Brooke! Perfect rondeau, this is an excellent entry for the Faith Poetry contest.
blessings
Kimbob
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Kimbob, thank you :-) I always know when I write that there will be you out in the "audience," who really and truly reads each line and will do your best to understand each word and relate to each line. I truly appreciate you, my friend, and of course, I appreciate your generous sixth star. Brooke :-)
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Hi Brooke,
I made a mistake in my review when I named Sean Penn's movie as "We're No Heroes". It was "We're No Angels". Sean Penn and Robert DeNiro starred as escaped convicts who masqueraded as monks in a border monastery during the dirty 30's. It was an excellent movie!
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
The perfect form for this affirmation of faith and the return to it each time the world overwhelms. Alliteration aplenty but not intrusive and the flow is as serene as the heart when faith is restored.- Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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The perfect form for this affirmation of faith and the return to it each time the world overwhelms. Alliteration aplenty but not intrusive and the flow is as serene as the heart when faith is restored.- Wendy
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2013
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Wendy, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your supportive comments and generous sixth star. Brooke
