My Faith Restores
a rondeau185 total reviews
Comment from pipersfancy
Beautiful! Isn't it miraculous how our faith can be restored in an instant, repelling the dark that forever seeks to consume, should we only open our eyes and see the light that surrounds and protects us.
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Beautiful! Isn't it miraculous how our faith can be restored in an instant, repelling the dark that forever seeks to consume, should we only open our eyes and see the light that surrounds and protects us.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Pipersfancy, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your thoughtful comments and generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Brooke You definitely know how to tell us what having faith can do to one with your perfect rondeau format.
Thank you for sharing what you said--
Despair shall never win the fight
to wrap my world in endless night,
for just as sorrow seems too strong,
my faith restores.
Gert
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Brooke You definitely know how to tell us what having faith can do to one with your perfect rondeau format.
Thank you for sharing what you said--
Despair shall never win the fight
to wrap my world in endless night,
for just as sorrow seems too strong,
my faith restores.
Gert
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Gert, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from MAMONIA
You are just too good for words. What can I say..
I love 'my faith restores.' It is like a lifeline
for me.
As I look back on my life I can actually see when
a rope was flung out to rescue me. I feel like I have
lived through many lives because when the doctors gave
up on me, God didn't. I knew my faith would always see
me through.
This poem is perfect in every way.
Best of luck, my friend.
Marie
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You are just too good for words. What can I say..
I love 'my faith restores.' It is like a lifeline
for me.
As I look back on my life I can actually see when
a rope was flung out to rescue me. I feel like I have
lived through many lives because when the doctors gave
up on me, God didn't. I knew my faith would always see
me through.
This poem is perfect in every way.
Best of luck, my friend.
Marie
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Marie, thank you so very much, my friend. I truly appreciate your most thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
The shorter refrain sign sounds almost like iambic pentameter instead of dimeter, correct me if I am wrong. The poem or peace is done to perfection in the rhythm is so well done that it makes for me easier to read the piece. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem.
The rhyme at certain times was done very well.
You have a good one in God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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The shorter refrain sign sounds almost like iambic pentameter instead of dimeter, correct me if I am wrong. The poem or peace is done to perfection in the rhythm is so well done that it makes for me easier to read the piece. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem.
The rhyme at certain times was done very well.
You have a good one in God bless.
AK
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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AK - the shorter lines are iambic dimeter because they are 4 syllables long. Dimeter means two iambic feet, and one iambic foot is daDUM. That is why the longer lines are iambic tetramenter, meaning four iambic feet, or 8 syllables - daDUM daDUM daDUM daDUM
Thank you so much, AK :-) Brooke
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Thank you for the education and you are welcome
Comment from kiwisteveh
Brooke, my Kiwi ear doesn't like the rhymes in the first stanza - to me dawn, gon.e, song are three different sounds
despite that, this is a lovely rondeau and of course a strong statement of faith and optimism in a sometimes dark world.
As ever, your meter is pitch perfect and I like the continuing image of cloaking or wrapping to portray darkness/sorrow.
Steve
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Brooke, my Kiwi ear doesn't like the rhymes in the first stanza - to me dawn, gon.e, song are three different sounds
despite that, this is a lovely rondeau and of course a strong statement of faith and optimism in a sometimes dark world.
As ever, your meter is pitch perfect and I like the continuing image of cloaking or wrapping to portray darkness/sorrow.
Steve
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Steve, in my accent dawn and gone are perfect rhymes Song has the same vowel sound but is a proximate rhyme because it ends with G
Thank you for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,
Great rondo here. I liked your clever use of near-rhyme song/dawn and the beautiful, rhythmic pulse throughout. Masterfully done--Tedl
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Dear Brooke,
Great rondo here. I liked your clever use of near-rhyme song/dawn and the beautiful, rhythmic pulse throughout. Masterfully done--Tedl
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
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Ted, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
You are really good at these strict guideline poems. I love the rhyme scheme of this one. And as usual the rhyme was not forced. great job.
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You are really good at these strict guideline poems. I love the rhyme scheme of this one. And as usual the rhyme was not forced. great job.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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amahra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dougspoetry
The photo is absolutely beautiful! I love the encouraging message that goes forth from the beginning. Smooth rhyme and meter throughout. Nice work!
God Bless!
Doug
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The photo is absolutely beautiful! I love the encouraging message that goes forth from the beginning. Smooth rhyme and meter throughout. Nice work!
God Bless!
Doug
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
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Doug, thank you so very much :-) I do appreciate your generous rating and kind comments. Brooke
Comment from Cherokee messenger
An absolutely beautiful poem! "There is no place where dark belongs... my faith restores." is very inspiring. It should uplift anyone who reads it. Good luck in the contest.
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An absolutely beautiful poem! "There is no place where dark belongs... my faith restores." is very inspiring. It should uplift anyone who reads it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Cherokee Messenger, thank you so very much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review, and also for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Janelle
Who better to write a poem about faith, and who better to do so with perfect rhythm,rhyme and styling, than you Brooke. Faith can move mountains and lift a sodden spirit when it's low, just as this poem has done Brooke. It's a beautiful poem. Regards, Jan
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Who better to write a poem about faith, and who better to do so with perfect rhythm,rhyme and styling, than you Brooke. Faith can move mountains and lift a sodden spirit when it's low, just as this poem has done Brooke. It's a beautiful poem. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013
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Janelle, thank you so much for your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
