My Faith Restores
a rondeau185 total reviews
Comment from CarloG
Interesting piece Brooke, I felt you could have took a few more chances and a poem like this allows it. I enjoyed the faith restores theory. The rhyming is nice and it is a pleasant read. I like the second stanza the most because it feel the most real. Good work as always
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Interesting piece Brooke, I felt you could have took a few more chances and a poem like this allows it. I enjoyed the faith restores theory. The rhyming is nice and it is a pleasant read. I like the second stanza the most because it feel the most real. Good work as always
Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Thank you for your thoughtful review, Carlo :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
This is a marvelous statement of the power of faith. This poem has a style that does not overwhelm the reader, but it coaxes the reader along an allows him to discover some delightful thoughts as he reads, then at the end he receives a positive message that he is almost compelled to accept. Really good writing Brooke.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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This is a marvelous statement of the power of faith. This poem has a style that does not overwhelm the reader, but it coaxes the reader along an allows him to discover some delightful thoughts as he reads, then at the end he receives a positive message that he is almost compelled to accept. Really good writing Brooke.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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nomi, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Great job, you poets always fascinate me with your rondeaus , and you troliets. It reminds me too stay out of that side of the pool because I have no business there. Superlative rhythm and quite mathematical as well.
daDUM daDUM daDUM daDUM.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Great job, you poets always fascinate me with your rondeaus , and you troliets. It reminds me too stay out of that side of the pool because I have no business there. Superlative rhythm and quite mathematical as well.
daDUM daDUM daDUM daDUM.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Christof, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Jokerswild
Wow! Another wonderful piece. At first I found the rhythm a little disconcerting as I had never run across this particular form of poetry before. But, thanks to your informative notes I was able to understand and appreciate it. Looking at the rules for this style you've hit the nail on the head again. Amazing work. Thank you for another wonderful lesson in the art and skill of poetry.
Jackie
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Wow! Another wonderful piece. At first I found the rhythm a little disconcerting as I had never run across this particular form of poetry before. But, thanks to your informative notes I was able to understand and appreciate it. Looking at the rules for this style you've hit the nail on the head again. Amazing work. Thank you for another wonderful lesson in the art and skill of poetry.
Jackie
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Jokerswild, thanks so much for your thoughtful feedback and for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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You are more than welcome. You definitely deserve it.
Jackie
Comment from Warren Rodgers
A beautifully written Rondeau, my friend. I love it when a writer uses metaphors that can connect people of varied backgrounds with common experiences that we all to often take for granted! Excellent personification and great repeating line. The word restores is a great choice! The only thing I noticed was the word "night" was a repeated end rhyme. Not sure if that matters in a contest entry or not. Excellent thought provoking message delivered very effectively. Good luck in the contest!
All the best,
Rodger :)
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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A beautifully written Rondeau, my friend. I love it when a writer uses metaphors that can connect people of varied backgrounds with common experiences that we all to often take for granted! Excellent personification and great repeating line. The word restores is a great choice! The only thing I noticed was the word "night" was a repeated end rhyme. Not sure if that matters in a contest entry or not. Excellent thought provoking message delivered very effectively. Good luck in the contest!
All the best,
Rodger :)
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Rodger, thank you so much. I'm aware of the repeated "night" and decided I like it :-) For anyone on the committee who has a problem with it, I guess they won't vote for it. LOL :-) I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is very poignant and beautiful, Brooke; inspirational really. The light of hope seems to shine from this poem, and as well as being so easily visualized, it's felt.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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This is very poignant and beautiful, Brooke; inspirational really. The light of hope seems to shine from this poem, and as well as being so easily visualized, it's felt.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Dawn, thank you so very much :-) I appreciate your thoughtful comments and generous sixth star. :-) Brooke
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It was my pleasure, Brooke.
Comment from country ranch writer
never give up and never loos faith for hope is just around the corner waiting with happiness for your life to unfold, we are never ever truly alone for God is with us always
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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never give up and never loos faith for hope is just around the corner waiting with happiness for your life to unfold, we are never ever truly alone for God is with us always
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much, country ranch writer :-) Brooke
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Brooke,
Lovely work once more. Great inner message and strong faith submission. I liked your rhyming in this one -when I read it aloud it just rolled right off the tongue. Beautiful indeed.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Hi Brooke,
Lovely work once more. Great inner message and strong faith submission. I liked your rhyming in this one -when I read it aloud it just rolled right off the tongue. Beautiful indeed.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Maureen, thank you so very much for your kind wishes and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Katzintx
The poem expresses a beautiful concept. it follows the structure and the rhythm for the type. My favorite line is the " my faith restores."
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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The poem expresses a beautiful concept. it follows the structure and the rhythm for the type. My favorite line is the " my faith restores."
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Katzintx, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
Everybody needs something to believe in or you'll end up going through life with no direction. This is a lovely poem that is very well written. Good Luck.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Everybody needs something to believe in or you'll end up going through life with no direction. This is a lovely poem that is very well written. Good Luck.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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CR, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
