The Boat
A 5-7-5 poetry contest entry.214 total reviews
Comment from J. P. Egry
I like your interpretation of your lovely 5-7-5. It is such a great metaphor of so many moments in life. The artwork you chose fits so perfectly to your message and is quite visually beautiful. Even without it, I would be able to visualize myself there just from your words.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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I like your interpretation of your lovely 5-7-5. It is such a great metaphor of so many moments in life. The artwork you chose fits so perfectly to your message and is quite visually beautiful. Even without it, I would be able to visualize myself there just from your words.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the review it is much appreciated. Wow it is such a compliment when a reviewer says that! :P I appreciate that.
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Comment from Curly Girly
Your verse is a perfectly formed haiku which meets the criteria for the syllable count:
Stone-still on the pier
yet I know not how to steer--
how did I get here?
Stimulating the reader to think...
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Your verse is a perfectly formed haiku which meets the criteria for the syllable count:
Stone-still on the pier
yet I know not how to steer--
how did I get here?
Stimulating the reader to think...
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the review it is much appreciated.
- G
Comment from paulah60
Well done; you succeeded! It is a thought-provoking 5-7-5. I'm mystified when I hear someone say they had no choice. That presupposes we're at the mercy of external forces. There's ALWAYS a choice though. As to what guides it is another matter. Is it driven by a psychological imprint, or by something much deeper? And to quote James Hillman, father of archetypal psychology, a "what" question is 'from the soul of the questioner that quests for the soul of the happening.' Answers are inside, not out there.
BTW, like you, I have a fascination with words (a passion that's almost my lifeblood!)
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Well done; you succeeded! It is a thought-provoking 5-7-5. I'm mystified when I hear someone say they had no choice. That presupposes we're at the mercy of external forces. There's ALWAYS a choice though. As to what guides it is another matter. Is it driven by a psychological imprint, or by something much deeper? And to quote James Hillman, father of archetypal psychology, a "what" question is 'from the soul of the questioner that quests for the soul of the happening.' Answers are inside, not out there.
BTW, like you, I have a fascination with words (a passion that's almost my lifeblood!)
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the review it is much appreciated. I just wish for my words to travel like the winds, so all can hear them in their journey.
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Comment from /*Twinkle
This verse reminds me of my favorite quote: "Success is a journey, not a destination." I believe in the journey and its mini successes.
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This verse reminds me of my favorite quote: "Success is a journey, not a destination." I believe in the journey and its mini successes.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the review it is much appreciated.
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Comment from Dawn Munro
First, let me comment on your author's notes if I may - I think what you set out to accomplish with this very beautiful and very strong little 5-7-5 was achieved beautifully. The interpretation I had for it before reading your notes was pretty much exactly as you had intended. My only question (which I might have answered, had I taken a little more time before I read the notes) was why it was entitled "The Boat".
Just a fabulous 5-7-5, and beautifully presented as well - very striking artwork. I enjoyed the end rhyme too!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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First, let me comment on your author's notes if I may - I think what you set out to accomplish with this very beautiful and very strong little 5-7-5 was achieved beautifully. The interpretation I had for it before reading your notes was pretty much exactly as you had intended. My only question (which I might have answered, had I taken a little more time before I read the notes) was why it was entitled "The Boat".
Just a fabulous 5-7-5, and beautifully presented as well - very striking artwork. I enjoyed the end rhyme too!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much for your beautiful review. I always love it when I can make people enjoy my work.
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You are very welcome. :)
Comment from Selina Stambi
Nice work, Gabriel. You achieved what you set out to do ... you "provoked" my thoughts!
We've all been there, or will be, at some point or other in our lives. Good author notes.
Nicely done!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Nice work, Gabriel. You achieved what you set out to do ... you "provoked" my thoughts!
We've all been there, or will be, at some point or other in our lives. Good author notes.
Nicely done!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your review and your compliments!
Comment from Millibrad
You achieved what you set out to do. This is a very thought- provoking, deeply philosophical poem. Who has never stopped and asked "what was I thinking??"
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You achieved what you set out to do. This is a very thought- provoking, deeply philosophical poem. Who has never stopped and asked "what was I thinking??"
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Lol people in love. (I'm in love at the moment, and forever more if the Lord wills it.)
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God bless you.
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:P thats the best answer I could come up with.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a thought-provoking piece of philosophical poetry that says a lot in a few words. I like the poignant question you used to end it. kudos
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This is a thought-provoking piece of philosophical poetry that says a lot in a few words. I like the poignant question you used to end it. kudos
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much for your review and complements! :P
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Comment from Terry wrote
My favorite style poetry! Perfect image to capture the verse. How, indeed, do we arrive at some points in our lives? Well written piece :)Thank you for sharing.
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My favorite style poetry! Perfect image to capture the verse. How, indeed, do we arrive at some points in our lives? Well written piece :)Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much for your review and complements. :P much appreciated!
Comment from womanwriter
The poem does exactly what you said it did. But I am glad you explained it, because you had me wondering about how you came up with the title for a moment. Now that I understand and see it - it makes perfect sense. Good Job!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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The poem does exactly what you said it did. But I am glad you explained it, because you had me wondering about how you came up with the title for a moment. Now that I understand and see it - it makes perfect sense. Good Job!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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:P Thank you very much for your review.
