Little Poems
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Comment from sunnilicious
A nice tribute to Golf. It is informative about the game and seems well researched. The repeat lines work well. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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A nice tribute to Golf. It is informative about the game and seems well researched. The repeat lines work well. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Excellent work.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you sunnilicious.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi Treischel,
This is excellent verse with good rhyme, flow and figurative language, It follows an usual rhyme scheme. The repeating lines work well. I would change "roll" to "rolls" in the penultimate line of the last stanza to make it parallel to strokes.
Preston
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Hi Treischel,
This is excellent verse with good rhyme, flow and figurative language, It follows an usual rhyme scheme. The repeating lines work well. I would change "roll" to "rolls" in the penultimate line of the last stanza to make it parallel to strokes.
Preston
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks you Preston, I'll do that.
Comment from Sararb
Very nice write about the game of golf. Your poem describes it well. The rhyme and flow are so smooth. You play the game well and then Wow! That's a par! Nice job! Sararb :)
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Very nice write about the game of golf. Your poem describes it well. The rhyme and flow are so smooth. You play the game well and then Wow! That's a par! Nice job! Sararb :)
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you Sara. I shot the best round of golf in two years the other day, and that inspired me.
Comment from CarloG
Nice pantoum. Creative golf poem that used the laws of nature to describe, easy to read and had cool rhymes, good job getting into the mindset of the golfer, from lining up and adressing the ball to the actual physic of the spinning ball
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Nice pantoum. Creative golf poem that used the laws of nature to describe, easy to read and had cool rhymes, good job getting into the mindset of the golfer, from lining up and adressing the ball to the actual physic of the spinning ball
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you CarloG
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
OK THIS IS PAR FOR THE COURSE FOR YOU ANOTHER VERBAL HOLE IN ONE YOU HAVE CREATED... YOUR MIND, I DO BELIEVE, IS AS WARPED AS MINE LOL
THIS WAS A FUN ONE MR T . LOL
TK
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OK THIS IS PAR FOR THE COURSE FOR YOU ANOTHER VERBAL HOLE IN ONE YOU HAVE CREATED... YOUR MIND, I DO BELIEVE, IS AS WARPED AS MINE LOL
THIS WAS A FUN ONE MR T . LOL
TK
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you Sir T, that is high praise.
