Comment from JM daSilva

Excellent

I guess they are not resting there at all. No matter how you look at it. Either you have an empty body there, and the spirit is somewhere else, or if you don't believe in spirits, there is nothing there either. The only way we can keep people is in our minds and hearts . Don't you think?

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013

I definitely agree. Thanks so much! Debbie

reply by JM daSilva on 11-Aug-2013

Welcome.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

This is SO clever!

I've still not had the nerve to attempt a senryu - I'm in awe of those who do ... and do it well.

No peace in the afterlife - poor souls!

Nice one, Debbie. Love,
Sonali xxx

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013

They are a lot of fun to do. Thanks so much~Debbie

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

that was funny. At least they'll never complain. I liked the tongue in cheek behind the rest in peace. Great imagery and the rhythm and flow were excellent. Nice job on this.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013

Thanks so much~Debbie

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

This piece is dead on as for as the syllable count is concerned. The photo compliments the piece well as the words bring the photo to life. The message adds a twist as I see nothing that I would change in this piece.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013

Thanks so much~Debbie

Comment from Rmocruz

Excellent

A clever and amusing senryu making light of a dark scenario.
The appropriate photo effectively enhances imagery.
Well crafted,

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013

Thanks so much~Debbie

reply by Rmocruz on 11-Aug-2013

You're welcome Debbie.
Rich.

Comment from angelmagnet

Excellent

A little sad but way more profound than unhappy.As if it makes any bit of difference to those who can't hear I love your poetry, it always seems to talk to me. Smiles, Cindy

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013

Thanks so much, my friend. Hugs, Debbie

Comment from 4tun81

Excellent

Very funny senryu. I guess they don't like the rhythmic clickty clack of the freight trains in the night. Thanks for posting.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013

Thanks so much~Debbie

Comment from donaldww

Excellent

I guess the residents of that cemetery are a bit rattled. I thought this was funny, along the line of the cemetery jokes.

Cheers,
DW


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 Comment Written 05-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013

Thanks so very much, Donald. My humor tends to be a bit warped at times~Debbie

Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart

Excellent

Oh now this is really clever and something i would have never thought of for sure. Good job and smart thinking. God loves you and I do too.

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 Comment Written 05-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2013

Thanks so much, my friend. Have a blessed day~Debbie