Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Talk about "creativity"--I enjoyed your creative sandwich--must be your inner-child at work! I liked your addition of rhyme too. We have a Legoland in California too, but I've never been. Happy Saturday- Joan

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013

Thank you Joan, glad you liked it. It's a great place to bring kids or Grandkids.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
Excellent description of the lego court. It has good flow and rhyme but follows no perceptible rhyme scheme that I can discern. Set the mood of enjoyment for the kids and relaxation for the adults.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013

Thanks Preston. Nope, no set rhyme scheme.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I had to laugh at the last line, Treishel, most apt! We have Lego Land here in England, and children love it. Nicely written poem.

I tired to find your contest entry about that face, but they don't show the list on FS contest, only on prompts, so I couldn't review it. It's nice to see how others see illustrations, its the same with an art, we all see something different. Quite good fun really. Back to todays, Excellent poem, and a delight to read. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013

Thank you Sandra. Yes, can't we elders identify.
The is another way to find it. It in my profile within a book called "Commentary and Philosophy", it's Chapter 43 of that book. The name of the poem is "Oh Creation". If it worth the trouble to look.

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 02-Aug-2013

I found it, and as soon as I started to read it, I knew it, and had already reviewed it. It was a wonderfully written poem, Good luck in the contest!! xsx

reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013

And to you, Sandra.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

I was just going to ask you but then you wrote it in your foot note. You made this form up. It is very nice. So this is also in the shopping mall?

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013

Thank you Ine. Yes, at Mall of America. Glad you liked the format.

reply by robina1978 on 02-Aug-2013

welcome, Ine

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Creative format. Good author notes. Nice poem. Well thought out as it is researched and quite informative. It sounds nice. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013

Thaks again sunnilicious. Hope I'm not getting boring and predictable.

reply by sunnilicious on 02-Aug-2013

Well, it's a series. So it is partial predictable. But it's not boring. Nice work. Goodnight :)

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Have I ever told you Tom, that I am totally in awe of your great erudition where poetic forms and the "stuff" concerning the technicalities of poetry?

You've created your own sandwich here, and a very tasty, satisfying one it is, too!

And the LEGO review is longer than the LEGO poem ....:)

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thank you Sonali. Yes, you just might have, not that I mind. That's the way with these small forms. Reviews longer forms.

Comment from trimple

Excellent

A triple haiku style poem capturing three generations and how they respond to the land of Lego!
delightful style Tom. I think this could catch on :)
Kind regards
trimple

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thank you Trimple. That would be amazing.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

I like the creativity in utilizing shorter formats, as they greatly express the joys of childhood play;
"Elders rest"--a great conclusion as the needs of fatigued parents are satiated.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thanks Margaret. Yes, don't we appreciate a nice place to sit?

Comment from Sararb

Excellent

Sounds like a nice place to take the kids, while parents and grandparents can enjoy a nice lunch while the children play. Great job. Sararb :)

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thanks Sara.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

You're darn right the elders rest! Geesh, that place'll kill ya!

L wish we had a Mall of America in our little red-neck town. The nearest mall to us is the EastGate Mall, and that is a 40 minute drive away. It's not even 1/3 the size of the Mall of America, either. A few good stores, Hollister, Gucci, and my personal favorite, Barne's & Noble Booksellers.

Oh yeah, I almost forgot. There's a Victoria's Secret, too...

Ain't life grand?

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thanks Dean yup, can't forget that one. I love Barnes and Nobless too. :0/