Comment from eafournier

Excellent

I guess we all reap what we sow. People who have led evil lives deserve consequences. Nicely written with a great illustration!

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013

Thank you eafourmier

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Treischel,

This is an outstanding poem and one I really enjoyed. Your use of alliteration is stunning, the flow is easy. I think some enjoy sinning but when they strive to let go of their sin it is too late. Well done....chey

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013

Thanks Chey. Yes, I know what you mean.

Comment from words

Excellent

I appreciate you contemplative write on the price of evil.Over the years, I have thought about this a lot. I have come to the conclusion that those who consistently choose evil over good, actually enjoy the heat.

Hugs, d

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013

Thanks D, that must be the case.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

love the alliteration in do devils dare to doubt
and in silken slither
and in bear his burning
and evil ego
and fiery fate
good internal rhyme in burning/yearning
excellent closing rhyme
effective use of questions to draw the reader in
thought-provoking musings on Satan's minions
Brooke

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013

Thanks Brooke, you nailed my intentions.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Wow, that is one vivid picture and presentation! I admired your abundant use of alliteration and the finality of your last line--the ultimate consequence! Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013

Thanks Joan. Your words are appreciated.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

That is some wicked artwork. Well thought out and clearly written free verse poem. Good flow of lyrical rhythm and rhymes. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thank you Sunnilicious. That was really some perfect artwork. I was eater when I found it.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Too late!
What an awful eternal fate!
Better make that date
With the Father ... now!!

A ginormous spiritual message told with carefully crafted artistic finesse.

I would change the colour of either the wording or the background, Tom. This combination strained my eyes and I had to make myself keep going.

p.s. Going to be away for a couple of weeks. Won't be reviewing. See you in September (all together now ... sing with me!)

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thank you Sobali. I'll miss you, but have a wonderful couple weeks. Be happy!

Comment from elchupakabra

Excellent

Though I find the concept of heaven and hell hilarious I quite like this piece. It was well writ, you used great color, illustration and imagery to accentuate your theme and the Pearly gates line was a nice touch. Great work all around

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thank you elchupakabra. Glad the pearly did it,

Comment from rhonny

Excellent

Very cleverly done with words that flow well talking about consequences of one's actions. Love the pic. A subtle rhyme is appreciated.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thank you rhony, glad you got it.

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

Your well-written poem is very thought-provoking and chilling, posing gripping questions about those who have let their chances to accept Jesus go by!

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013

Thank you Janice. Yup, you got the point.