The Trolls of Sewer Mountain
Gertrude Poem contest entry25 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Bravo! Superb piece, above and beyond what was asked. You really have a flair for telling a story in poetry. CONGRATULATIONS on winning my contest. I was rooting for you, since I posted my own as a joke. :)
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Bravo! Superb piece, above and beyond what was asked. You really have a flair for telling a story in poetry. CONGRATULATIONS on winning my contest. I was rooting for you, since I posted my own as a joke. :)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Hey, Phyllis, hello. Thank you so much for the excellent review and for sponsoring the contest. It took a long while to get it all together but I had a blast with it. This form is a lot trickier than it sounds. I always love a good challenge. I really appreciate the gracious stars and congrats, P. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from Carrie Carson
Stunning, this is absolutely beautiful.
Thanks for a thoroughly enjoyable romp despite its bits of gore.
Can't comment on who will or will not win...Not often do I figure who will win ahead. Why Gertrude? is only rhetorical. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Stunning, this is absolutely beautiful.
Thanks for a thoroughly enjoyable romp despite its bits of gore.
Can't comment on who will or will not win...Not often do I figure who will win ahead. Why Gertrude? is only rhetorical. :) Carrie
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and the big sixer, Carrie. I don't know why they called it Gertrude, lol. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Thank you again.
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Sure, you're welcome.
I read one of the author's notes and someone told Phyllis not to call this form a Gertrude, so she did. Or this could just be how rumors gets substantiated...I "NEVER" start them. :)
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Lol. Thank you again, C.
Comment from Quillian
Gnomes.....! Brilliant. I do not know out of what drug soaked dream you pulled this potent poem, but I'm glad you did. This is almost sacrilegious; making Merlin a drug lord?! The title alone is give you the prize, you've got my vote!
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Gnomes.....! Brilliant. I do not know out of what drug soaked dream you pulled this potent poem, but I'm glad you did. This is almost sacrilegious; making Merlin a drug lord?! The title alone is give you the prize, you've got my vote!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and support, Quillian. Yeah, I don't know where this idea came from. I had it nearly done before I even knew how I wanted it to end. I had a couple ideas rolling around in my head but once I came up with Merlin as the drug lord I just had to go with that, Lol. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and help. I'm glad you liked my little tale.
Comment from BeckyW
This is a superbly written Gertrude poem. I'd give it six stars if I had any. It's perfect rhyme and rhythm throughout, and the story kept my interest. Great poem, great story.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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This is a superbly written Gertrude poem. I'd give it six stars if I had any. It's perfect rhyme and rhythm throughout, and the story kept my interest. Great poem, great story.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the excellent review, Becky. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and big six offer. I'm glad you liked my little tale.
Comment from poesyapprentice
Thank God I hadn't used the other six for you yet! Wow! You're amazin, you know. : ) Excellent piece! I didn't check every da dum but the flow sounded great and what a story! Lol, poor fairies! ; ) Wish I had a mind like yours, man. Excellent ending. You always do have the best! You're a stinker, lol, and it deserves a ten! Hope this one is in the bag!!!!! (If not, they're brain dead). Best of luck and Hugs!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank God I hadn't used the other six for you yet! Wow! You're amazin, you know. : ) Excellent piece! I didn't check every da dum but the flow sounded great and what a story! Lol, poor fairies! ; ) Wish I had a mind like yours, man. Excellent ending. You always do have the best! You're a stinker, lol, and it deserves a ten! Hope this one is in the bag!!!!! (If not, they're brain dead). Best of luck and Hugs!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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I will admit, this one took a good long time to write. Nearly a week. But you know me, it had to be perfect. All the da dums are exactly where they need to be. ;) I had it nearly done before I had an ending even figured out. I had a couple ideas how it was going to turn out but when I came across the idea of Merlin being the drug lord I just had to go with that. Haha Then I lucked out finding this perfect picture, lol. I dearly appreciate the gracious sixer, Marsha. Sorry I've been slacking in my reviewing too. My job has me running ragged. An average of 550 to 600 miles every night this week. I went in at 11 PM last night and just got home at 1PM today. This job sucks. Time to eat and crash so I can do it again tonight. I'm glad you liked my little tale, M. Thank you again.
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I didn't doubt that every note in the rhythm was perfect, my friend : ) I wasn't able to vote when I did the review because the voting bubbles didn't show up, but I just did now and it put you in the lead by one : ) I really hope you keep it for this one. I could tell you worked hard on it, and it was excellent! That job of yours is going to run you into the ground! I really hope you are able to get out of there! Best of luck to you, on everything!!
Comment from danddanthnyt
A very clever write with cute analogies that are yet deep in figurative imagery; "as we storm with guns a blazing then escaping as their fortress burns to ash," "At the rally to prepare us as the dusk veils Fairy Terrace," "In the frightful exhibition, it was Merlin the Magician, that we found to be the drug-lord billionaire." These are great descriptions of the fantastic "'trolls' of Sewer Mountain."
Great use of word capitalization. You get my vote!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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A very clever write with cute analogies that are yet deep in figurative imagery; "as we storm with guns a blazing then escaping as their fortress burns to ash," "At the rally to prepare us as the dusk veils Fairy Terrace," "In the frightful exhibition, it was Merlin the Magician, that we found to be the drug-lord billionaire." These are great descriptions of the fantastic "'trolls' of Sewer Mountain."
Great use of word capitalization. You get my vote!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review and the big sixer, Dan. I really appreciate the generous rating and support, friend. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Thank you again.
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most welcome, dan
Comment from ravenblack
The war of cartels- gargoyles vs. Faeries...liked it. Really Don't like la Dee da fairy fantasy, so I have to admit treating the little buggers like bloody mosquitos did not bother me at all. And Merlin as surface. Very strange, but you pulled it off. Excellent use of rhythm and rhyme but have to ask, just what is a Gertrude?
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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The war of cartels- gargoyles vs. Faeries...liked it. Really Don't like la Dee da fairy fantasy, so I have to admit treating the little buggers like bloody mosquitos did not bother me at all. And Merlin as surface. Very strange, but you pulled it off. Excellent use of rhythm and rhyme but have to ask, just what is a Gertrude?
Comment Written 30-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review, Raven B. Gertrude is just a name the person who sponsored this contest wanted to call it. She didn't know what to call it and someone said just as long as she didn't call it Gertrude, so then that's what she named it. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked my little tale.
Comment from eafournier
This poem is amazing! I couldn't stop reading it. Unfortunately no one ever wins when the trolls and the fairies battle it out over "fairy dust".
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2013
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This poem is amazing! I couldn't stop reading it. Unfortunately no one ever wins when the trolls and the fairies battle it out over "fairy dust".
Comment Written 29-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2013
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Lol. Thank you so much for the excellent review and the big sixer, eafournier. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Thank you again.
Comment from BethShelby
This is great. You've really written a lot of verses to this poem in perfect Gertrude rhythm and rhyme. It is a excellent story poem and it is very enjoyable written in this format. I think you'll do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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This is great. You've really written a lot of verses to this poem in perfect Gertrude rhythm and rhyme. It is a excellent story poem and it is very enjoyable written in this format. I think you'll do well in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the excellent review, Beth. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked my little tale.
Comment from alexgeorge
What an enchanting gargoyle!
Haha. This was a very amusing and witty poem of trolls from Sewer Mountain breaking into Merlin's lair, Fairy Terrace, to steal his mushroom drugs. They manage to squish the elves but the magician turns them to stone and uses them as ornaments in his garden.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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What an enchanting gargoyle!
Haha. This was a very amusing and witty poem of trolls from Sewer Mountain breaking into Merlin's lair, Fairy Terrace, to steal his mushroom drugs. They manage to squish the elves but the magician turns them to stone and uses them as ornaments in his garden.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the excellent review, Alex. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
