Geoff's Book Of Poultry
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Spring is 'ere"My Book Of Funny Poems and Stories.
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Comment from Zue65
The slang language used in the poem gave a local color, an Australian hue to your poem, which make it unique, putting your own signature to it, truly your own, about bindii with a clover like appearance that can prick one's ass. Nice one.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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The slang language used in the poem gave a local color, an Australian hue to your poem, which make it unique, putting your own signature to it, truly your own, about bindii with a clover like appearance that can prick one's ass. Nice one.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Hi thanks for the comments. I need to clarify... the clover and the bindii are separate. I guess I was not real clear on the fact that it is when the clover is on the rise you also know the bindii is also around, just harder to find except for a little tiny yellow flower- hehe pretty little flower, but terrible consequences if you go near it with bare feet or whatever. Thanks again.
Comment from Steve Pantazis
Interesting and quirky piece, with a Brooklyn accent thrown in for good measure. Not sure if you need the "arse" reference at the end, particularly with a question mark. "Ass" will do quite nicely.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Interesting and quirky piece, with a Brooklyn accent thrown in for good measure. Not sure if you need the "arse" reference at the end, particularly with a question mark. "Ass" will do quite nicely.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Hi thanks well I might correct that. I just qualified it coz in a lot of places asses are donkeys ...oh the complexity of the English language.. Also your comment about Brooklyn Accent I thought that too but Mr Silcock had it in with Cockney Rhymes so go figure. maybe if he was English he did not understand the "Brooklynism" of it. We are Aussie here as you will know from my profile. Thanks again.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
How awful or painful it could be the Spring day is well visualised and expressed, physical inconvenience is evident in the colourful day with beautiful fragrance in the air, a nice work done. 03/723
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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How awful or painful it could be the Spring day is well visualised and expressed, physical inconvenience is evident in the colourful day with beautiful fragrance in the air, a nice work done. 03/723
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the great review...I should add Spring is not here yet but the Clover is already out and bet I can see the little yellow buds yuck of bindii too.
Comment from RodG
Ilike your Aussie flavor here and sense of humor. A delightful spoof of some Enlish (and/or American) idioms.
Thanks for sharing. RodG
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Ilike your Aussie flavor here and sense of humor. A delightful spoof of some Enlish (and/or American) idioms.
Thanks for sharing. RodG
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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hi Rod thanks so much as I said above to another reviewer it was a bit complex with "Anonymous's" Brooklyn accent in his first verse for Mr Arnold Silcock from whose paperback I got the first verse many years ago...to have it in amongst Cockney rhymes Ho Hum! Thanks for the great review.
Comment from ronnie k
Fun read The verses are complimentary, the fun was in the language, Which I had failure with, critics seemed to have a distaste for ebonics
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Fun read The verses are complimentary, the fun was in the language, Which I had failure with, critics seemed to have a distaste for ebonics
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Hi have to study up on that word "ebonics" never heard that one before.
Glad you felt like I conveyed a continuance of Mr "Anonymous's" Thoughts in the first stanza.
I got this book from my brother years ago we used to have a great time fooling around with words...I still do.
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typo, but referred to as black tongue
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Hi again almost Christmas in 2016 and only just seeing your definition of ebonics thanks so much. have a great Christmas.
Comment from 9999pool
This is such a joyful write and to imitate the style of the first author is a great idea of creativity and innovation. Loved both the verses. Anything Aussie from down under is definitely a good read with them slang and all. I was in Australia for 4 short years. Ta!
Great write in a short verse.
Cheerio, Ritchie. I shouldn't be liking bindii but I loved this cute word.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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This is such a joyful write and to imitate the style of the first author is a great idea of creativity and innovation. Loved both the verses. Anything Aussie from down under is definitely a good read with them slang and all. I was in Australia for 4 short years. Ta!
Great write in a short verse.
Cheerio, Ritchie. I shouldn't be liking bindii but I loved this cute word.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Thanks Ritchie appreciate your encouraging review. I don't know where 'anonymous' who wrote the first stanza came from probably England I am guessing although as another reviewer pointed out it was definitely Not a Cockney accent in the first verse as the they commented.. more Brooklyn with which I tend to agree
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Interesting. Thanks for the info.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment from Starlit Ink
I'm never going to want to sit on grass again, lol. This is very humorous and I like the free-flowing whimsical nature of the verse. It makes me think of spring when all those boidies are singing their boidie songs (at least the ones that didn't fall in the thistle.)
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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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I'm never going to want to sit on grass again, lol. This is very humorous and I like the free-flowing whimsical nature of the verse. It makes me think of spring when all those boidies are singing their boidie songs (at least the ones that didn't fall in the thistle.)
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Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Actually the boidies probably have a knack of eating the bindii's and not getting stuck on them like us bigger humans
Thanks heaps.
Comment from Mary-Kate
You have followed the rule, the rhyming works and it is a little bit of fun. Good effort and it is nice to read a fun poem, sometimes people get to dark with there work. Keep it up.
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
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You have followed the rule, the rhyming works and it is a little bit of fun. Good effort and it is nice to read a fun poem, sometimes people get to dark with there work. Keep it up.
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Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your review. I am so glad I have brought a bit of fun to the readers.
