Skinny Dipping
Don't go skinny dipping with the sea creatures34 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
You always find out who your friends are when you need to get out of some trouble your in they are conveniently not around whose going to drop everything just to get you out of the pokey
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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You always find out who your friends are when you need to get out of some trouble your in they are conveniently not around whose going to drop everything just to get you out of the pokey
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
I appreciate you takng the time to read and comment.
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welcome
Comment from H Darwin Reeves
Well done. Funny, too and there's certainly a grain of truth in that last line: "All the pals, who found me charming
have left town, and that's alarming.
When you need them, that's the time when friendships fail."
Good job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Well done. Funny, too and there's certainly a grain of truth in that last line: "All the pals, who found me charming
have left town, and that's alarming.
When you need them, that's the time when friendships fail."
Good job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Darwin. I really appreciate the review and nice comments. Yep, Some people are fair weather friends.
:)
Comment from The Death
Hello
It is a very serious poem about a naked man swimming in the sea sent to jail for harming marine life....hahahaha...I enjoyed this funny skinny dipping..lol..what a pity..guy hokey in a pokey..really good.
But the end line hasn't got that finishing punch.
But still,you did an excellent narration.
Regards
Shar-A
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Hello
It is a very serious poem about a naked man swimming in the sea sent to jail for harming marine life....hahahaha...I enjoyed this funny skinny dipping..lol..what a pity..guy hokey in a pokey..really good.
But the end line hasn't got that finishing punch.
But still,you did an excellent narration.
Regards
Shar-A
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the review and the funny comments. You're the second one who's had a problem with the last line. Let me know if you like this better. I'm thinking of changing it.
Now Iā??m sttting in the pokey,
but I think thereā??s something hokey,
since no one has volunteered to pay my bail.
All the pals who found me charming
Have left town, and thatā??s alarming.
When you need them, thatā??s the time when friendships fail.
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Yes,I like this one more.
It is better than the last one:-).
Comment from barleygirl
I came very close to giving you 6 stars for this stellar & entertaining poem! I love everything but the last line. The way the last stanza was going, I was expecting a line giving info as to why nobody bailed the guy out of jail. The last line was so unrelated to everything that came before it, I couldn't see it as a delightful & surprising twist. To me, it just didn't belong. (Sorry to be so blunt!) But it's still an amazing piece of writing becuz of all the other interesting & complicated aspects, particularly rhythm & rhyme. Great work!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I came very close to giving you 6 stars for this stellar & entertaining poem! I love everything but the last line. The way the last stanza was going, I was expecting a line giving info as to why nobody bailed the guy out of jail. The last line was so unrelated to everything that came before it, I couldn't see it as a delightful & surprising twist. To me, it just didn't belong. (Sorry to be so blunt!) But it's still an amazing piece of writing becuz of all the other interesting & complicated aspects, particularly rhythm & rhyme. Great work!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Hi Barley girl. I appreciate your great review and suggestions.
I'm thinking of changing the last verse. Please let me know if your think this works better.
Now Iā??m sttting in the pokey,
but I think thereā??s something hokey,
since no one has volunteered to pay my bail.
All the pals who found me charming
Have left town, and thatā??s alarming.
When you need them, thatā??s the time when friendships fail.
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A million times better! I love it! *smile*
Comment from vapros
Five stars today for a very good poem, that seems to comply with the requirements of the Gertrude Poem, which I am seeing for the first time. Another first. Excellent rhymes and cadence - reminiscent of Edgar Alan Poe - and a skillfully rendered entertaining story. Well done.
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Five stars today for a very good poem, that seems to comply with the requirements of the Gertrude Poem, which I am seeing for the first time. Another first. Excellent rhymes and cadence - reminiscent of Edgar Alan Poe - and a skillfully rendered entertaining story. Well done.
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and comments on my poem. Edgar Allen Poe rythem in The Raven was mentioned when Phyllis decided to name this poetic form Gertrude.
Comment from gaangel62
Love it, love it, love it.....did I mention that I love this poem.....so much fun...If you see that man running around naked...send him my way......Angie
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Love it, love it, love it.....did I mention that I love this poem.....so much fun...If you see that man running around naked...send him my way......Angie
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you Angie. I really appreciate the review and enthusiastic comments. I may decide to bail him out myself.
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha from Hawaii,
This is a fun poem and the streak of words just flowed along in a fast pace. I enjoyed it very much and the photo was a "WOW". Good luck in the contest, you have my vote.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Aloha from Hawaii,
This is a fun poem and the streak of words just flowed along in a fast pace. I enjoyed it very much and the photo was a "WOW". Good luck in the contest, you have my vote.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you Ginger, I'm glad you liked this poem. I appreciate the review and comments.
:)
Comment from ruhama
Utterly charming. It brought a great smile to my face although I don't think your choice of streaker would provoke anyone to arrest him. Just too gorgeous!! :) The rhythm seems difficult to write. It flowed along with your rhyme scheme which both enhance the flight from the police. Pity the poor bloke suffering from terrible food. Delightful
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Utterly charming. It brought a great smile to my face although I don't think your choice of streaker would provoke anyone to arrest him. Just too gorgeous!! :) The rhythm seems difficult to write. It flowed along with your rhyme scheme which both enhance the flight from the police. Pity the poor bloke suffering from terrible food. Delightful
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank yous much for the review and the delightful comments. I assume those weren't lady cops doing the arresting. The guys would probably like the hunk off the street.
Smiles
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The guys might be afraid to tackle him in case he got away and they would have to admit defeat in the face of this Adonis.
Comment from wiljacro
HI! Not only is this a great piece of work, but a great laugh too, from start to finish. It fired my imagination so much that I felt I was a fly on the wall ,or on the wing, watching this scenario unfold. I hope you do very well in this prompt. wiljacro.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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HI! Not only is this a great piece of work, but a great laugh too, from start to finish. It fired my imagination so much that I felt I was a fly on the wall ,or on the wing, watching this scenario unfold. I hope you do very well in this prompt. wiljacro.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for giving this a six-star review. I'm so glad you found it funny and enjoyed reading it. I liked your comments :)
Comment from Sarah78
Funny! It reminds me of one of those "naughty" poems from back in the 30's and 40's which I find so hilarious to read in this day of nude beaches and let-it-all-hang-out celebrities. I really enjoyed it and got a good laugh. Very well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Funny! It reminds me of one of those "naughty" poems from back in the 30's and 40's which I find so hilarious to read in this day of nude beaches and let-it-all-hang-out celebrities. I really enjoyed it and got a good laugh. Very well done.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I hope I don't offend anyone with the picture. I'm glad you found in funny.
