Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from barkingdog
Well done, Bev. Danika is just what we expect to see in a reporter.You add the snobby attitude about Skeet's choice of restaurants and wanting her lemon slices just so, and she becomes down right annoying.
Fine dialogue and an underlying tension between Danika and the waitress. Will we see Patty again? She seems to have a thing for Skeets.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Well done, Bev. Danika is just what we expect to see in a reporter.You add the snobby attitude about Skeet's choice of restaurants and wanting her lemon slices just so, and she becomes down right annoying.
Fine dialogue and an underlying tension between Danika and the waitress. Will we see Patty again? She seems to have a thing for Skeets.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Hi, Ellen. Thank you so very much for this awesome review. I appreciate your encourgement and generosity very much. I don't know if we'll see Patty again. I'm thinking this story is getting a bit crowded with all the side characters. They just seem to have a mind of their own and insist on pushing themselves into my stories. Darned annoying LOL. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh WOW, Bev, what a superb chapter! This is knock-your-socks off good! I 'saw' the whole thing in my mind like I was watching a movie, I swear, right down to the tiny details, like Miss Thang ordering lemon slices, not the 'heel' of the lemon and the waitress's exasperated look :)
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Oh WOW, Bev, what a superb chapter! This is knock-your-socks off good! I 'saw' the whole thing in my mind like I was watching a movie, I swear, right down to the tiny details, like Miss Thang ordering lemon slices, not the 'heel' of the lemon and the waitress's exasperated look :)
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Dear Dawn, thank you so much for this totally gob-smakingingly, awesome review. I so appreciate it coming from a write I admire so much. Thanks for hanging with me despite my sporadic posting. But I have to wait until I 'see' the chapter's locale before I can go ahead. Glad you could 'see' it too. Hugs, Bev
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Oh, I sure could, clearly! You're very welcome; most deserved!
Comment from chasennov
Along The Jericho Road. 'Nama Moon.' An excellent chapter you have penned here again. I enjoyed reading it. (You said WE earlier. Does that mean Sheriff Oleson knows about our little tete-a-tete?) Good stuff.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Along The Jericho Road. 'Nama Moon.' An excellent chapter you have penned here again. I enjoyed reading it. (You said WE earlier. Does that mean Sheriff Oleson knows about our little tete-a-tete?) Good stuff.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I wasn't sure about that section, so I'm glad you pointed out the caps. I think it works better. Thanks so much for your positive and generous review. Warm regards, Bev
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You're most welcome, Bev.
Comment from Connie C
I like the exchange between Danika Martin and Epstein and the waitress as well, who doesn't need much interaction with the anchor woman to figure out that she's bitchy. What a nice little surprise at the very end when it's revealed that Danika is ahead of Epstein with the information he has supplied her with.
You do so well with this mystery, Bev. It makes me wonder if you ever lie awake at night thinking up the next chapter.
I didn't detect any spags and your use of dialogue is always perfect.
Keep 'em coming. As always, you held my attention throughout.
Lots Hugs to my favorite budding author.
Connie
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I like the exchange between Danika Martin and Epstein and the waitress as well, who doesn't need much interaction with the anchor woman to figure out that she's bitchy. What a nice little surprise at the very end when it's revealed that Danika is ahead of Epstein with the information he has supplied her with.
You do so well with this mystery, Bev. It makes me wonder if you ever lie awake at night thinking up the next chapter.
I didn't detect any spags and your use of dialogue is always perfect.
Keep 'em coming. As always, you held my attention throughout.
Lots Hugs to my favorite budding author.
Connie
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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I don't sleep well for about three nights before and three nights after when I post a chapter, Connie. I always worry it's be a flop!
Thanks so very much, my dear friend, for your generosity and your kind encouraging words. You've been so faithful to this novel and I can't thank you enough.
Love ya,
Bev
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well done as always. I didn't see any errors and felt it was very well written. It just gets more and more interesting. Looking foreword to the next chapter. =} Rox
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Well done as always. I didn't see any errors and felt it was very well written. It just gets more and more interesting. Looking foreword to the next chapter. =} Rox
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Hi, Rox. Thank you so much, my friend, for your generous review. I appreciate the support very much. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Gungalo
She is way ahead of him and really lets him know it. Wonderful way that he is speeding up the inestigation. Well she'll have her chance at the profiler when they catch the killer.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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She is way ahead of him and really lets him know it. Wonderful way that he is speeding up the inestigation. Well she'll have her chance at the profiler when they catch the killer.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much, Gungalo. I enjoyed writing these characters clashing. Appreciate you taking time to read and so generously review. Bev
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Smile Bev.
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Comment from Adri7enne
Good chapter, Bev. I enjoyed watching Skeets in action. He's smooth and feeding his media person what he wants her to put out. Almost looks like there might be some chemistry between them. You know me, Bev....always looking for the romantic angle. Well done, girl.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Good chapter, Bev. I enjoyed watching Skeets in action. He's smooth and feeding his media person what he wants her to put out. Almost looks like there might be some chemistry between them. You know me, Bev....always looking for the romantic angle. Well done, girl.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much, Adrienne. I appreciate your gracious and supportive review. :0) Bev
Comment from jjstar
Oh, crap! Skeets has been had! Nosy reporters always seem to stick their nose in where it doesn't belong in these types of investigations. I have to tell you that I loveher strong, feisty,and ball-busting type of personality. It adds a breath of fresh air to the story, just like Jana. Great chapter!
Steel met steel, and Danika broke first===Nice..:)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Oh, crap! Skeets has been had! Nosy reporters always seem to stick their nose in where it doesn't belong in these types of investigations. I have to tell you that I loveher strong, feisty,and ball-busting type of personality. It adds a breath of fresh air to the story, just like Jana. Great chapter!
Steel met steel, and Danika broke first===Nice..:)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Hiya, JJ. Thanks for your very generous and supportive review. I so appreciate how you've stuck with this story. I do like writing strong women and am glad you liked this character. Aas often happens with me, she sort of took on a personality of her own as I wrote her. Hugs, Bev
Comment from AprilShower
Hope they are getting closer to solving these murders. Maybe the murderer will reveal something that wasn't reveal by the press. Could this be one reason for concealing information? There seems to be a small struggle between the FBI, local police force, and the media.
Well done, Bev.
Hugs,
April
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Hope they are getting closer to solving these murders. Maybe the murderer will reveal something that wasn't reveal by the press. Could this be one reason for concealing information? There seems to be a small struggle between the FBI, local police force, and the media.
Well done, Bev.
Hugs,
April
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much, April. I sure appreciate you hanging in with this story. Good to hear from you! Hugs, Bev
You're welcome, Bev. I've just have to find out how this mystery turns out, my friend. I love reading mysteries.
Hugs,
April
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I do, too, April. You might say I have a passion for them. :0)
Comment from Zue65
This piece is packed with action, the classified information in following a heinous crime versus public information for the sake of public interest is a complication that Danika and Skeets have to face. Danika have to prove where her mouth is and she's accountable to Skeets for any leak in the vital information. I can't wait to read the next piece.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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This piece is packed with action, the classified information in following a heinous crime versus public information for the sake of public interest is a complication that Danika and Skeets have to face. Danika have to prove where her mouth is and she's accountable to Skeets for any leak in the vital information. I can't wait to read the next piece.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much, nassus. You sound like a student of the crime genre, so you probably understand well that the 'cops' always like to have information that only the killer knows. So, I appreciate your grasp of that nuance as well as generosity. Warm regards, Bev
