Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Not light on the calories, for sure, and now you've made this reader ravenous!

She's hungry ...

Lovely frivolous froth ! :)

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013

Thanks you Sonali, go get a bite!

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

With the mention of all these favorite food on the table, our stomachs are no growling and saliva oozing form our glands. So tempting and inviting these sumptuous food.
Have a great breakfast to start the day and don't starve - be happy and eat your heart out!
Cheerio, Ritchie.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013

Thanks Ritchie, will do!

reply by 9999pool on 22-Jul-2013

Thank you too.
Ritchie. :))

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Fortunately, I just had dinner--so, your little poem did not make me hungry! I enjoyed the regular pattern and your rhymes. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013

Thank you Joan. I'm smiling!

reply by Joan E. on 21-Jul-2013

Me too! Now, we can both have sweet dreams- J

Comment from sunnilicious

Exceptional

Well, that sounds like a Sunday morning breakfast fit for royalty. But I'm okay with granola and coffee. Creative poem. Great visual imagery. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013

Thank you sunnilicious. I appreciate the comments and stars.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This little jewel has rhythm and rhyme and good flow. It has delicious imagery. You must have written it before breakfast. It communicates hunger I enjoyed reading this.
Preston

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013

Thank you Preston. Yup, I was thinking about what to have.

Comment from CornishChick

Excellent

I'm telling you, I look forward to all your poems. I'm always smiling even before I open them up! Do you compose in your sleep, too??
I do love your stuff!

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013

Thank you. The one's in my sleep are the unpublished masterpieces.

reply by CornishChick on 21-Jul-2013

so, obviously you composed breakfast at 3am when your stomach was grrrroooowwwlling!

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Okay, Mr. T...now you've gone and done it! I just ate lunch, but now I want some biscuits and apple butter. Oh, the AGONY of it all...

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013

Thank you Dean. Eat hearty!

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

A well-penned children's writing I enjoyed, with the spot-on rhyme incorporated for a smooth-flowing poem;
Good alliteration of "Bread and Butter;
The reading of this comes as I sit down to a bit of breakfast Tom, although it does not consist of your menu!

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013

Thanks Margaret. These days not considered healthy, yet how many generations were raised on such daily morning fare?

reply by Capricorn30 on 20-Jul-2013

I agree--times have very much changed.

Comment from JB Lynn

Excellent

I like the alliteration of "bread and butter" and would love to see it repeated in the 4th line - maybe "helping of ham"? I think that would help add to the whimsy of this poem. I'm not sure what the 4/3 means, but maybe that's the format of the poem you're writing? I notice it alternates, 4 syllables with 3, in which case, my suggestion wouldn't fit the format.
Either way, this was very lighthearted and I'm grateful I already had breakfast because otherwise, this would make me very hungry.
Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013

Thank you JB. You are correct about the format. I did like yore suggestion and adopted it. Thanks.

Comment from ann marie mazz

Excellent

good morning

this type of format is always fine with me
so much can be stated utilizing few words
syllables were true to form
your theme is so appropriate for a saturday morning

thank you for sharing
ann marie

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013

Thank you Ann Marie. Good morning!