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Comment from sunnilicious
Wonderful alliteration of the letter S running through this poem. Well thought out. Nicely written. Good format. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Wonderful alliteration of the letter S running through this poem. Well thought out. Nicely written. Good format. Excellent work.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you sunnilicious. That alliteration kept me from calling it a Senryu.
Comment from Capricorn30
An amazing picture!
The unique beauty of fireworks utilizing nice alliteration so finely complements the great photograph.
Adults and children admire so unusual a display.
Excellent!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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An amazing picture!
The unique beauty of fireworks utilizing nice alliteration so finely complements the great photograph.
Adults and children admire so unusual a display.
Excellent!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you Capricorn. The alliteration keeps it from being a Senryu.
Comment from NicciFaye
I like the picture of the child in the background and the sparkler in the forefront....excellent 5/7/5...bursting alliteration on the first two lines and a personal touch on the last...
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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I like the picture of the child in the background and the sparkler in the forefront....excellent 5/7/5...bursting alliteration on the first two lines and a personal touch on the last...
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you Nicci. The alliteration I added kept me from calling it a Senryu.
Comment from robina1978
Can't have been easy to make this photo rightly. And you did. Your grandson must have had such fun with holding this.
Nice and catching title as well.
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Can't have been easy to make this photo rightly. And you did. Your grandson must have had such fun with holding this.
Nice and catching title as well.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you Ine. Sparklers are fun.
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They look it and welcome, Ine
Comment from Adora Bayles
Very pretty poem about children and the fascination with light. Our five year old surrogate grandson loves to chase lightening bugs in the yard after dark. What a delight to watch him.
Conni
aka Adora
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Very pretty poem about children and the fascination with light. Our five year old surrogate grandson loves to chase lightening bugs in the yard after dark. What a delight to watch him.
Conni
aka Adora
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you Connie. Sounds delightful to watch him scamper.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is excellent 5-7-5 poetry meeting all of the requirements of that form. Not only does it bring back memories of past holidays with sparkler traces but of happy campfires with burning brands writing names of loved ones in the sky.
Preston
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Hi, Treischel,
This is excellent 5-7-5 poetry meeting all of the requirements of that form. Not only does it bring back memories of past holidays with sparkler traces but of happy campfires with burning brands writing names of loved ones in the sky.
Preston
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you Preston. Yes, happy times.
