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Comment from Ben Colder
Yes it is. Very nice poem that captures the moment of a child having a great time with making circles in the night with sparklers.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Yes it is. Very nice poem that captures the moment of a child having a great time with making circles in the night with sparklers.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you Ben.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Miss Evelyn is in the hospital with a broken hip and no computer so we are tag teaming this morning. We were never much into firecrackers but we did like those sparklers for sure. great little poem that brings back fun memories. God loves you and we do too.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Miss Evelyn is in the hospital with a broken hip and no computer so we are tag teaming this morning. We were never much into firecrackers but we did like those sparklers for sure. great little poem that brings back fun memories. God loves you and we do too.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the review. Sorry to hear about her accident. I pray for her full recovery.
Comment from GracieAnn
TREISCHEL, you have successfully fulfilled the requirements of the 5-7-5 in syllable count and in the use of original words chosen to express a universal experience in the child's wonderful imagination. :0 Gracieann
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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TREISCHEL, you have successfully fulfilled the requirements of the 5-7-5 in syllable count and in the use of original words chosen to express a universal experience in the child's wonderful imagination. :0 Gracieann
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you Gracieann. A wonderful review is alway appreciated.
Comment from Sally Carter
Not just a child's delight, I'm sure. I can still remember doing this, both as a child and an adult, and the magic never fades.
Since this is not bound by any "rules" other than the syllable count, I really like the alliteration of "s"s throughout, and the assonance on sparks/dark.
Great job!
Best wishes
Sally
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Not just a child's delight, I'm sure. I can still remember doing this, both as a child and an adult, and the magic never fades.
Since this is not bound by any "rules" other than the syllable count, I really like the alliteration of "s"s throughout, and the assonance on sparks/dark.
Great job!
Best wishes
Sally
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you Sally. I really like being unfettered from those restrictive Haiku and Senryu rules that take the beauty out of the poetry.
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Me too. Though I am going to have a go at Alvin's beginners' class starting tomorrow, to see what I'm missing. Should be fun!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Dear Gramps,
'Twould appear that you are still savouring the last sparks of July 4th!
And you did create the mood .... again ... with so few words! :)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Dear Gramps,
'Twould appear that you are still savouring the last sparks of July 4th!
And you did create the mood .... again ... with so few words! :)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks Sonali. I like that holiday.
Comment from L. Sherman
What a stunning image. And a simple 5-7-5 that captures the joy sparklers bring out in children. There's great motion in the piece, starting with the picture, that just carries through the poem and makes it feel alive.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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What a stunning image. And a simple 5-7-5 that captures the joy sparklers bring out in children. There's great motion in the piece, starting with the picture, that just carries through the poem and makes it feel alive.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you Lisa. Great descriptive review.
Comment from mrsmajor
Well written 5-7-5 poem, celebrating the Fourth of July. the sparkles certainly were in abundance around here...lots of fun.
Thanks for sharing this with us,
Hugs,
Victoria
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Well written 5-7-5 poem, celebrating the Fourth of July. the sparkles certainly were in abundance around here...lots of fun.
Thanks for sharing this with us,
Hugs,
Victoria
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you Victoria. The Fourth of July is a fun holiday celebration. I enjoyed it much.
You are most welcome, it was a pleasure!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow, what a great photo! After having seen many, MANY! children with sparklers last night, they sure do light up a child's day, don't they?
Perfect syllable count, great message...
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Wow, what a great photo! After having seen many, MANY! children with sparklers last night, they sure do light up a child's day, don't they?
Perfect syllable count, great message...
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you Dean. Children light ulp the world with or without sparklers. We they are they not screaming, demanding little demons, that is.
Comment from adewpearl
I have always loved sparklers
your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form and pairs wonderfully with your delightful photo
great alliteration of soft S words
and pairing of dark delight - a wonderfully upbeat tribute to this time-honored tradition :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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I have always loved sparklers
your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 form and pairs wonderfully with your delightful photo
great alliteration of soft S words
and pairing of dark delight - a wonderfully upbeat tribute to this time-honored tradition :-) Brooke
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you Brooke. It was a fun write.
Comment from Gungalo
spin sparks in the dark
sparkler sends its sulfur glow
happy child's delight
There is nothing like the fun you can have on the 4th of July. Sparklers create magic worlds for kids.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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spin sparks in the dark
sparkler sends its sulfur glow
happy child's delight
There is nothing like the fun you can have on the 4th of July. Sparklers create magic worlds for kids.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks Gungalo. Yup, they sure do.
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