Comment from The Death

Excellent

This is a sweet and cute poem.
The syllable count is correct and yes it surely is a quick entry
the theme is very good.
Good luck

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017

Thanks! :)

Comment from JeffreyVPerry

Good

A good 5-7-5 poem. Although it is only on one level you might call it a love poem. But you mastered the style for whatever that is worth.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017

Thanks! :)

Comment from 4tun81

Excellent

Ron, welcome to Fanstory. I hope you enjoy your experience here. This is a well constructed 5-7-5 ( I'm not sure the punctuation is needed). Good luck in the contest and thanks for posting.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017

Thanks! :)

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

Shyness or fear of rejection are so often the reason we with hold our feelings.
I like the personal approach. It feels like the writer is speaking to the reader.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017

Thanks! You really caught the meaning I tried to convey! :)