A Springtime Ballet
I am always amazed by the artistry of nature17 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
Bumble bees dancing
gliding flower to flower
true artists at work
pirouetting with such grace
Springtime's ballet to behold
And you tanka show it too girl. A brilliant write no doubt. Amazing artistry yourself.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Bumble bees dancing
gliding flower to flower
true artists at work
pirouetting with such grace
Springtime's ballet to behold
And you tanka show it too girl. A brilliant write no doubt. Amazing artistry yourself.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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thank you for the kind review of my work
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Comment from The Death
It is a beautiful poem.
I liked the comparision of movement of bee with ballet dance.it is the most elegant and beautiful dance form.it has alliteration too in first,second and last line.good luck
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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It is a beautiful poem.
I liked the comparision of movement of bee with ballet dance.it is the most elegant and beautiful dance form.it has alliteration too in first,second and last line.good luck
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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than you for such a nice review of my work
Comment from kiwijenny
Beautiful mixture of two beautiful things...springtime and ballet.
I love watching bees dance. I love the imagery of your little poem.
Thank you and the picture is a perfect match.
Pirouetting with such grace......
Thank you and God bless
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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Beautiful mixture of two beautiful things...springtime and ballet.
I love watching bees dance. I love the imagery of your little poem.
Thank you and the picture is a perfect match.
Pirouetting with such grace......
Thank you and God bless
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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thank you for such a nice revire of my work
Comment from ravenblack
They do pirouette with grace while gliding flower to flower. The flight of the bumblebees - Ali in a tutu ( floats like a butterfly, stings like a bee).
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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They do pirouette with grace while gliding flower to flower. The flight of the bumblebees - Ali in a tutu ( floats like a butterfly, stings like a bee).
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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thank you for the nice review of my work
Comment from 4tun81
A Springtime Ballet is a well constructed Tonka that paints a beautiful picture of nature. I particularly like the use of the word pirouetting. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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A Springtime Ballet is a well constructed Tonka that paints a beautiful picture of nature. I particularly like the use of the word pirouetting. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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thank you for the kind review of my work
Comment from Carly C Reynolds
This was a very beautiful poem and I loved reading it. The only technical issue that I would point out is that "springtimes" should be "springtime's." Great job!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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This was a very beautiful poem and I loved reading it. The only technical issue that I would point out is that "springtimes" should be "springtime's." Great job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much for the review and the tip..kept thinking I was wrong with that and have corrected it.
Comment from SteveY
Indeed, and boy do we love to "beehold" them! Very nicely done with this one. You gotta love the spring time. It's always such a welcome relief!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Indeed, and boy do we love to "beehold" them! Very nicely done with this one. You gotta love the spring time. It's always such a welcome relief!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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thank you for the nice review
yea==love this time of year
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A very nice entry for the tanka poetry contest. The syllable count is spot on and the picture is perfect for the poem. I wish you luck in the competition. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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A very nice entry for the tanka poetry contest. The syllable count is spot on and the picture is perfect for the poem. I wish you luck in the competition. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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thank you so much for the nice review of my work
Comment from wiljacro
HI! Judith. The hovering Bee, gives a beautiful representation of a ballet dancer and is the perfect complement to your tanka. good luck in this comp.wiljacro.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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HI! Judith. The hovering Bee, gives a beautiful representation of a ballet dancer and is the perfect complement to your tanka. good luck in this comp.wiljacro.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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thank you for the great review
Comment from tbacha58
Its so nice to imagine a bee dancing, I remember 53 years ago I was pregnant with my second son, working in the kitchen and a bee stinged me on my back, who that hurts, in our country they say rub the sting with a piece of raw garlic, I did that, it was better.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Its so nice to imagine a bee dancing, I remember 53 years ago I was pregnant with my second son, working in the kitchen and a bee stinged me on my back, who that hurts, in our country they say rub the sting with a piece of raw garlic, I did that, it was better.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013
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Garlic..wow! thanks for that tip and the review of my work
