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Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "These old Bones"
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Comment from Selina Stambi
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Your lines made me smile ... do I hear my Dad's voice??

I guess it's not unique ... age is a state of mind, though, I think. I know I'll feel 25 for the rest of my life - and my daughters are 22!!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
    Thanks Sonali. Yup, my brain it 22,
Comment from Preston McWhorter
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Excellent Quatrain, Treischei,
As far as I am concerned it is a winner. I hope everybody else agrees. I have those aches and pains too. I cannot say that I enjoyed being reminded of this.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
    Thanks Preston, it's tough getting older, my friend.
Comment from Gungalo
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Oh how these old bones creak!
There's distinct possibility
Of declining agility.
I guess that's not unique.


Oh leave it to golf to do the trick. Not getting any younger are ya Tom. Great write for everyone to read.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
    Thanks Gungalo. Nope, not getting any younger.
reply by Gungalo on 28-Jun-2013
    Smile Tom.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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Hi Tom this seems to be double posted - but I decided to reply again because that 2 star is ridiculous!
Double posting is probably a FS glitch:)
Maureen

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
    Thanks Maureen. Yeah I don't know how this happened. Now I can't post another poem today. Oh well, maybe it's a good thing. Thant you for your support.
Comment from robina1978
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I don't know why somebody rated you down as there is absolutely nothing wrong with this quatrain in your chosen rhyme scheme. You are not that old are you?

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
    Thank you Ine, This helps offset that 2 I got. I am turning 65 in September.
reply by robina1978 on 29-Jun-2013
    That is why I reviewed it. Ine
Comment from ronnie k
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A perfect case my friend of growing old (gracefully lol) a single mouth full of a poem that has a excellent taste, the FAVOR MAKES US KINSMEN, OLDER AND BETTER AT WHAT WE DO.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
    Thanks Ronnie k. Like your positive outlook.
Comment from jameskn
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Very good play with syllables,good theme image,great choice of words but lacks in the element of wanting to read again and again

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
    Hmm. The comments don't seem to align with such a harsh rating. I see you are new here. Maybe you don't understand that the rules of the contest limited me to a single quatrain.
reply by jameskn on 28-Jun-2013
    Yes i am new and that was my point of view,just an opinion ,sir
Comment from Sidmarks
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I love the simplicity of these words! definitely a case of less is more !
I can imagine the 21 yr old brain working up a frenzy behind the 'Old creaking bones'

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
    Thank you Sidnarks. You got it exactly.