All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Beginnings and Endings"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Dawn Munro
I am ticked off because I can't give this beautiful poem the rating it deserves. (yet again!) I have a very hard time picking out any one phrase - it's all fabulous and it resonates with me so very, very much! If I were forced, however, I'd probably pick the last stanza - it echoes my beliefs...
Superb! (And of course, rolls off the tongue magnificently!)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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I am ticked off because I can't give this beautiful poem the rating it deserves. (yet again!) I have a very hard time picking out any one phrase - it's all fabulous and it resonates with me so very, very much! If I were forced, however, I'd probably pick the last stanza - it echoes my beliefs...
Superb! (And of course, rolls off the tongue magnificently!)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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oooh goodie! I was hoping you'd like this one Dawn - I'm singing it tonight. I've been wanting to do a 'circles' one for ages to go with my "Snow" monologue (to replace "Windmills of Your Mind", so I don't have to pay a fortune in royalties) - and yesterday was finally the time it popped in. So glad you enjoyed this one! :)))S
Comment from Dibul
It's a wonderful read with strong rhymes and a great message! Reminds me of my childhood when I used to lay on my back and look at the stars, and enjoy my carefree childhood without anything to bother me.
"But now that I'm older, I ask what's my place? And life goes around in birth, marriage and death." That's the reality we come to when we grow up and wonder if that what life is all about. I especially loved these lines: "Is life only ashes, then dust into dust, and I'm just a clock that's been too tightly wound?" A brilliant read it is.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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It's a wonderful read with strong rhymes and a great message! Reminds me of my childhood when I used to lay on my back and look at the stars, and enjoy my carefree childhood without anything to bother me.
"But now that I'm older, I ask what's my place? And life goes around in birth, marriage and death." That's the reality we come to when we grow up and wonder if that what life is all about. I especially loved these lines: "Is life only ashes, then dust into dust, and I'm just a clock that's been too tightly wound?" A brilliant read it is.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much divya! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one with me!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from ravenblack
A circle- no beginning or end- is a sacred symbol in many native cultures. Aside from the rhythm and rhyme which I will not comment on other than it is up to your usual high standards, I am particularly taken with your many evocations of the circle -merry-go-round, tightly wound clock, ( motion and time) and the tide as death of men/breath of ocean ( love that line, by the way). Maybe the reason we did not ask the big questions as children is that we already knew on an instinctual level that point a to point b made far less sense than circles set in perpetual motion.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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A circle- no beginning or end- is a sacred symbol in many native cultures. Aside from the rhythm and rhyme which I will not comment on other than it is up to your usual high standards, I am particularly taken with your many evocations of the circle -merry-go-round, tightly wound clock, ( motion and time) and the tide as death of men/breath of ocean ( love that line, by the way). Maybe the reason we did not ask the big questions as children is that we already knew on an instinctual level that point a to point b made far less sense than circles set in perpetual motion.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thx so much Ed! I needed to do a 'circle' type song in a waltz rhythm for the centerpiece of one of my monologues and yesterday, finally, it 'popped'. :)S
Comment from fairy77
Awesome Sharyn the galaxy and different perceptions:)Marvelous best poem I read all night and you have a great weekend.Congrats.Loved the display!
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Awesome Sharyn the galaxy and different perceptions:)Marvelous best poem I read all night and you have a great weekend.Congrats.Loved the display!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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oh you're always such a sweetheart Beth - I'm so glad you liked this one (AND gave me one of your lovely sixes - so much appreciated). Can you sing it now?? I'm going around humming all kinds of waltzes for it - driving myself nuts!
Blessings, and a lovely weekend to you also my dear :)Sharyn
Comment from Gungalo
I know that in circles we'll spiral tonight,
as we in our universe grow and expand,
where love's all that matters and we bask in light-
in all of creation we'll feel Spirit's Hand.
Such a do about something girlie. It seems we are all in this together and you have just put us straight. Love's a pretty big part of it and we do feel the spirit's hand. SIgh what a lovely write you.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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I know that in circles we'll spiral tonight,
as we in our universe grow and expand,
where love's all that matters and we bask in light-
in all of creation we'll feel Spirit's Hand.
Such a do about something girlie. It seems we are all in this together and you have just put us straight. Love's a pretty big part of it and we do feel the spirit's hand. SIgh what a lovely write you.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Straight? you said STRAIGHT after all my circles?? tut tut! :)) glad you enjoyed it Pam! Thx so much dear :)S
Comment from Ridley Williams
I love the flow and meter of this work. You are
able to draw the reader into the poem with some
of the very questions that have been asked over
the eons by some very bright minds, (I'm not sure
if any of them ever came up with a good answer either).
Your piece, however, finished with a strong message
of hope and conviction, very well done, Ridley
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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I love the flow and meter of this work. You are
able to draw the reader into the poem with some
of the very questions that have been asked over
the eons by some very bright minds, (I'm not sure
if any of them ever came up with a good answer either).
Your piece, however, finished with a strong message
of hope and conviction, very well done, Ridley
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thx so much Ridley - so glad you enjoyed this one!
:)Sharyn
Comment from sunnilicious
Great choice of artwork. It is beautiful and spiritual too. Very relaxing and happy too.
Wonderful poem. Nice flow of rhythm and rhymes. Creative visual imagery created. Sound perspectives. Well done. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Great choice of artwork. It is beautiful and spiritual too. Very relaxing and happy too.
Wonderful poem. Nice flow of rhythm and rhymes. Creative visual imagery created. Sound perspectives. Well done. Excellent work.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thx so much Sunni! :))S
Comment from honeytree
The art work is very special for these words.
God's gifts is what we see in the evening sky
When earth and other planets in the universe were created
Would have been something very special to see.
When will everything end we don't know?
Honey tree
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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The art work is very special for these words.
God's gifts is what we see in the evening sky
When earth and other planets in the universe were created
Would have been something very special to see.
When will everything end we don't know?
Honey tree
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much Honeytree! :)S
Comment from Betty Bleen
This is a well written poem about the mysteries of life. I used to love to lie and look at the clouds when I was little and I think there is not a day goes by now that I'm an adult that I don't look at them each day and see what shapes they remind me of. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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This is a well written poem about the mysteries of life. I used to love to lie and look at the clouds when I was little and I think there is not a day goes by now that I'm an adult that I don't look at them each day and see what shapes they remind me of. Nice poem.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thx so much Betty! :)Sharyn
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abab rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
good contrast established between the carefree days of youth when we needed few explanations to the complexities of adulthood
nice alliteration and strong verbs in circle and spin
effective use of questions to draw the reader in to your musings
in circles we'll spiral - I like that alliterative passage
strong spiritual element in your thoughtful closing
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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solid use of abab rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
good contrast established between the carefree days of youth when we needed few explanations to the complexities of adulthood
nice alliteration and strong verbs in circle and spin
effective use of questions to draw the reader in to your musings
in circles we'll spiral - I like that alliterative passage
strong spiritual element in your thoughtful closing
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thx so much Brooke! :)S
