The Mole
A day at school15 total reviews
Comment from Dibul
Wow! What a wonderful little story with a great moral! The children will love it and learn from it. Loved the characters in the story and its great rhyme and rhythm. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
  |
Wow! What a wonderful little story with a great moral! The children will love it and learn from it. Loved the characters in the story and its great rhyme and rhythm. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
-
Its a Wow back !!! Thank you so much for your comments. Its good to hear that you think children will love it x
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Being honest and happy listener and learner is ever appreciated, the allegorical space of schooling and learning is well written, fun and fantasy in learning is well exalted, I liked. 25/619
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
|
Being honest and happy listener and learner is ever appreciated, the allegorical space of schooling and learning is well written, fun and fantasy in learning is well exalted, I liked. 25/619
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
-
So pleased you liked it, and thank you for your great review, means a lot x
Comment from Gianinas
"Our mole felt sick and sorry, and tried to be 'all brave'
He really cared, and loved them, a great way to behave
And so a lasting lesson learned. He could clearly see
By being good and honest, how happy he would be"
Very nice story. I liked the rhythm and rhyme and of course, I enjoyed the content.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
|
"Our mole felt sick and sorry, and tried to be 'all brave'
He really cared, and loved them, a great way to behave
And so a lasting lesson learned. He could clearly see
By being good and honest, how happy he would be"
Very nice story. I liked the rhythm and rhyme and of course, I enjoyed the content.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
-
Thank you so much for the lovely review x
Comment from ravenblack
Good use of rhythm and rhyme and good moral to your story. The characters just seemed a bit generic to me, like it did not matter that they were animals at all. Just wish that they had some traits associated with animals ( mole squinting, etc.)
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
 |
Good use of rhythm and rhyme and good moral to your story. The characters just seemed a bit generic to me, like it did not matter that they were animals at all. Just wish that they had some traits associated with animals ( mole squinting, etc.)
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
-
Thank you for your great comments. I see what you are saying, hadnt thought of that, was thinking more of the lessons, but thank you x
Comment from Selina Stambi
I love this poem in the Wind In The Willows style.
-
Would make a wonderful children's series.
Truly enjoyed it.
I don't think we have into each other before - hello, justchillin!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
|
I love this poem in the Wind In The Willows style.
-
Would make a wonderful children's series.
Truly enjoyed it.
I don't think we have into each other before - hello, justchillin!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
-
Hallo Reachingforthestars, love your name. So pleased you enjoyed it, and what a great compliment to compare it to Wind in the Willows. I have written another couple with messages, one about a hedgehog and the other about a fox cub. Want to get a few more done, then will do something with them, so your review was so encouraging, thank you x
Comment from emjaihammond
This turned out to be such a very cute story. It is written with such a cute sense of rhythm and great ryhme as well. I thought the story to be very well put together and it has a nice flow throughout. I enjoyed this. Good luck with this.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
|
This turned out to be such a very cute story. It is written with such a cute sense of rhythm and great ryhme as well. I thought the story to be very well put together and it has a nice flow throughout. I enjoyed this. Good luck with this.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
-
Thank you for your great review, so pleased you enjoyed it x
Comment from lorijean
A great little poem with a strong message, really well written and tells a good story, a pleasure to read and also a bit of fun too...
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
|
A great little poem with a strong message, really well written and tells a good story, a pleasure to read and also a bit of fun too...
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
-
Thanks for your great comments on this one too, so pleased you enjoyed it x
Comment from kiwijenny
I see this as a children's picture book. I like the moral twist to the tale. The photo of a mole is great.i like ....He could clearly see..... A mole visionary...I like it.
Thank you and God bless
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
|
I see this as a children's picture book. I like the moral twist to the tale. The photo of a mole is great.i like ....He could clearly see..... A mole visionary...I like it.
Thank you and God bless
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
-
Thank you for your great review, and seeing this as a childrens picture book, just what I see, so that means a lot. Not written anything for ages, so it is good to be back x
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the whistling wind to the little fox looking at the picture a comical little fellow you wrote a really lovely piece I enjoyed
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
|
from the whistling wind to the little fox looking at the picture a comical little fellow you wrote a really lovely piece I enjoyed
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
-
Thank you so much for your lovely comments. its the first poem I have written for ages, Nice to be back x
Comment from 4tun81
This is a very well written children's story poem. It has rhyme, a deliberate rhythm and pace and a good message. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
|
This is a very well written children's story poem. It has rhyme, a deliberate rhythm and pace and a good message. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
-
Thanks for your good wishes and comments. Pleased you thought it was a good children's story poem x
