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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from robina1978
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She is a fair old age but I understand you would like to be there too. You wrote these beautiful rhyming quatrains for her and good flow. She will start her next life in Heaven.,

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    She will indeed Ine - thank you my dear!
    :)Sharyn
reply by robina1978 on 10-Jun-2013
    most welcome Sharyn, Ine
Comment from honeytree
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I love the art work and words written.

Even though this lady is 95 years of age

We don't like seeing our loved ones die.

We miss them no matter what age.

We will meet up again to see our loved ones when we die.

Memories are very special to hang onto.

Honey tree

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    thx honeytree!

    Rose just passed away a couple of hours ago - peacefully. It was her 'time', but we'll still miss her. She was always larger than life!
    :Sharyn
Comment from Louise Michelle
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Oh, God, this nearly brought tears to my eyes. To everything there is a season, yet death is always hard for us to deal with. That's why I think it's so important to believe in an afterlife. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    Thx Lou - I believe the same thing. I always think of the ending of the wonderful "Lord of the Ring" movies, where Frodo embarks upon his next journey ... on a boat ... into the mists ... with people he knows and loves.

    Rose just passed away a couple of hours ago - peacefully. It was her 'time', but we'll still miss her. She was always larger than life!
    :Sharyn
reply by Louise Michelle on 09-Jun-2013
    My deepest condolences, dear Sharyn.
Comment from RPSaxena
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Hello Sharyn,
It's really a nice piece of Spiritual Poetry. Its theme is perfect for a person who is about to leave for Heavenly Abode after fully enjoying this mortal life's mortal pleasures.
Instead of shedding false tears and making the out going person's journey painful, it is better to speak some encouraging and consoling words. 1st and last stanzas are marvelous from this point of view.
Its language is simple having spontaneous flow with nice rhyming scheme and imagery.
Superb! Good Luck!

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    Thx so much RP!
    Rose just passed away a couple of hours ago - peacefully. It was her 'time', but we'll still miss her. She was always larger than life!
    :Sharyn
reply by RPSaxena on 10-Jun-2013
    Hi Sharyn,
    Sad news indeed, but peaceful demise is one of the most cherishable things in this mortal world. I know you are brave enough to bear this great loss. May God bless her soul!
Comment from JM daSilva
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Nice song and I saw that movie a long time ago and loved it. That's a great song to remember as you go to the mysteries of mysteries.

SUNRISE SUNSET
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 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    Bless you Joe - it's always been one of my favorite movies! AND I was lucky enough to play Tzeitl, the eldest daughter, in a theatre production of it!

    Rose just passed away a couple of hours ago - peacefully. It was her 'time', but we'll still miss her. She was always larger than life!
    :Sharyn
reply by JM daSilva on 09-Jun-2013
    I understand perfectly. My condolences.
Comment from adewpearl
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excellent use of alternate-line rhyming in your quatrains
good alliteration in stays strong
and in seasons spinning
a thoughtful good bye to a beloved friend in good poetic form
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    thx so much Brooke!

    Rose just passed away a couple of hours ago - peacefully. It was her 'time', but we'll still miss her. She was always larger than life!
    :Sharyn
reply by adewpearl on 09-Jun-2013
    June Hill, a lovely 93 year old widow in my congregation died late Friday night, and I just learned it this morning. She was part of my Sunday morning ritual. For years, she and her husband would enter the church and walk past my pew and we would smile and greet each other. Then when Roy died, Lorraine Hawk, June's neighbor, started driving her to church and would walk her down the aisle, and I would smile and exchange greetings with both of them as they passed by. Lorraine came over to me before church to tell me June had passed in her sleep. She wanted me to hear it before the pastor announced it so I wouldn't be caught off guard. So your poem and your news mean more to me today than they will to most, I think :-)
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    Bless you Brooke - 'passing' is never easy - there's always a strange vacancy left behind, isn't there?
reply by adewpearl on 09-Jun-2013
    A huge vacancy - June was not a close friend of mine, but she was a constant in my life. I knew with certainty that every Sunday morning would include that smile and exchange of hellos. She radiated life and joy in that smile.
Comment from Sasha
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To be love and to express love is the most wonderful thing we have. I am sure she heard your song. This is such a beautiful and touching poem about reaching out to someone you care deeply about. May her death be peaceful and your grief filled with the memories that made you smile and laughter. Although reading this put tears in my eyes I felt the sincere love you fee for Rose and wish you and her all the best.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    Thx so much my dear - Rose just passed away a couple of hours ago - peacefully. It was her 'time', but we'll still miss her. She was always larger than life!
    :Sharyn
Comment from Bill Schott
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I feel that this is an apt and touching poem for gently letting go of Rose. My wife and my parents have all moved on and this poem reminds me of their gentle crossing.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    Love your words, Bill - "gentle crossing". Rose just passed away a couple of hours ago - peacefully. It was her 'time', but we'll still miss her. She was always larger than life!

    Thank you for your wonderful 'six' for this one.
    :Sharyn
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
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Good morning, I have a hug for you from thousands of miles away. Your song, with all the sorrow it contains, is a gentle guide to forever and beautifully filled with love. I wish you a day filled with the happiest memories of your Rose and a smile for knowing that she heard you and loves you too. - Wendy

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    Bless you, Wendy - thank you. Rose is still with us - we keep saying "any time now" - but she's not going gently into any good night. Bless her.
    :)Sharyn
Comment from RKagan
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The hardest thing to say is Goodbye. I feel for you. YOur poem is a beautiful tribute to a lady who you care a great deal for and it's is more than obvious that you are an excellent poet.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
    Thank you so much RK. Yes, she's quite a lady - no shrinking violet, by any means, and she will be missed.
    Blessings,
    Sharyn