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From out of the Grayness

Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Weekend Dream"
Reaching from the gray areas to understand life

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Comment from lakeport
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Weekend dream, indeed that's a beautiful expressed weekend dream, a lot of wonderful things to do, very nice rhyming, I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. Lakeport.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2013

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
    Thanks so much for your very kind review and generous six stars! you have made my day!! Always a delight to hear from you and may God Bless You as well....Vance
reply by lakeport on 09-Jul-2013
    your welcome,Lakeport.
Comment from MelissaBickel
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Those are the kind of dreams that I don't want to wake up from. I always feel let down when I've had a great one and the morning light shows me it was all just a dream lol.... Enjoyed this. Put a smile on my face.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
    Thanks Melissa...every now and then something nutty comes along and the was started as a country lyrics years ago and I just found it. Val Fitche's first words in his review" Ya gotta make this into a country song. So I guess I will have to get back to my original mission. At least it's been fun so far. Hugs! Vance
Comment from val fitchie
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DUDE!THIS IS A ROCK AND ROLL COUNTRY SONG! JUST THROW IN A CONSISTENT CHORUS "TITLE" EVERY OTHER STANZA(MAYBE "JOHN, WAKE UP"?)REREAD IT AND YOU'LL SEE! EXCELLENT RHYTHM TO IT EVEN IF IT WERE ONLY A POEM/PROSE.GREAT WARMTH AND FUN AND FOLKSY ENERGY

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
    Val, yes it does have potential and I will get to work on it as soon as I find my guitar and a few quite moments. Life has been really hectic for the last few months and I'm wearing thin on energy but certainly not on the belt line!! HOpe you are well and thanks so much for the great review. Vance
Comment from mikenbel
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No - I did not know a Jag purrs at one-twenty - but I am more of a Lamborghini girl. I love the way you recount a whole weekend adventure from the standpoint of a dream.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
    Thanks Mikenbel: Much appreciation for your review and hope you are careful in that Lamborghini! Let me know when you visit Las Vegas and we can take the Jag or the Vett, or just take a walk down the strip...but it is 115 degrees here right now at 7:30 in the evening! Have a great day and thanks for the great review.Vance
Comment from NicciFaye
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LMBO...very Humors poem. I like this dream to only wake up to the reality. Been there before. And yes sometimes it is truly better to say in the dream.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
    Well NicciFaye we have to let our hair down and have some fun once in awhile so really glad you enjoyed this and really thank you for your kind review. Blessings, Vance
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
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LOL, this lady really needs a break. Move over John, I'm going back to sleep. A great poem and has a very believable scheme. Thanks for sharing. Carolyn

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
    Carolyn...thanks so much for sharing your thoughts about this work and hope it gave you a chuckle! Blessings, Vance
Comment from reconciled
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lol....Hey Fox....-smile- Very well said...yep, sometimes....ahh hell most of the time...dreams are way better....dreamt...-wink- alright...really good stuff....love Michael

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
    Thanks Michael...gotta let our hair down every now and then and have a giggle. Glad you liked it...Cheers! Vance
Comment from Glasstruth
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This tragedy is truly the comedy of errors. When we're young it seems time's forever, yet that's when it's time as in a PC a setup, get started, yet we think we can do it in the middle. That's when the human PC freezes, and wonders why? Like how you tell a story with your imagery. Great! Les

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
    Hi Les! Glad to hear from you and WOW..thanks for the sixer!!! It's always great to get your reviews and your perspectives are always respected and appreciated! Blessings, Vance
Comment from GracieAnn
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This end of stanza rhyming scheme gives the poem a consistent flow. It is humorous with a universal experience of sometimes good dreams being more fun than real life. :) Gracieann

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
    GracieAnn; thanks so much for your kind review and so glad you enjoyed it. We all have to let our hair down now and then and have a bit of a laugh! All the best, Vance