History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Hangman's Noose"Poems that tell stories of long ago
17 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Treischel,
I live in Wyoming so this poem really appeals to me. I like the descriptive words, the repeating line, the even flow and effective rhyme. Each line has been composed with care and the theme is excellent. This is a six star poem in my book....chey
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Hi Treischel,
I live in Wyoming so this poem really appeals to me. I like the descriptive words, the repeating line, the even flow and effective rhyme. Each line has been composed with care and the theme is excellent. This is a six star poem in my book....chey
Comment Written 09-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Thank you Chey. Yes I can see how it would appeal to your sense of the West. I really an honored with this high rank.
Comment from Glasstruth
The repetition of "Fearing hangman's noose" and the aabbb rhyme scheme with your elegance in telling this story made for an interesting read. The ending was predictable, but what he could he expect. Well done! Les
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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The repetition of "Fearing hangman's noose" and the aabbb rhyme scheme with your elegance in telling this story made for an interesting read. The ending was predictable, but what he could he expect. Well done! Les
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you Les. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from adewpearl
good aabbb rhyming
with a compelling refrain line
excellent flow aided by good use of enjambment
good alliteration in poker pot/sharp was shot
they hung him - they hanged him
you tell this tragic tale of the old West in excellent poetic form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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good aabbb rhyming
with a compelling refrain line
excellent flow aided by good use of enjambment
good alliteration in poker pot/sharp was shot
they hung him - they hanged him
you tell this tragic tale of the old West in excellent poetic form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 08-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you Brooke. Glad you enjoyed this trip into the Old West.
Comment from ravenblack
Really strong ballad. Reminds me of Marty Robbins . Your unerring ear preserved the rhythm throughout. Makes me want to saddle up and ride.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Really strong ballad. Reminds me of Marty Robbins . Your unerring ear preserved the rhythm throughout. Makes me want to saddle up and ride.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thank you ravenblach. Giddy up!
Comment from Selina Stambi
How many poems do you pen per day, sir??
Loved the repeated refrain between stanzas - very effective.
There was such a powerful, suspenseful wild, wild west feeling to this piece.
Fabulous!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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How many poems do you pen per day, sir??
Loved the repeated refrain between stanzas - very effective.
There was such a powerful, suspenseful wild, wild west feeling to this piece.
Fabulous!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thank you Sonali. The site only allows two poems ore day. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Rmocruz
A very interesting western story in a poem.
Solidly rhymed stanzas present an accurately
depicted old west scenario. The repeating
refrains are effectively employed as the poem
flows at a very appropriate pace.
A well written entertaining verse,
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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A very interesting western story in a poem.
Solidly rhymed stanzas present an accurately
depicted old west scenario. The repeating
refrains are effectively employed as the poem
flows at a very appropriate pace.
A well written entertaining verse,
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thank you Rmocruz. I appreciate your encouraging comments.
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You're welcome, my pleasure.
Comment from zanya
A distinct flavour here of other times and days.'Justice', i.e Hangman's Noose is a distinct possibility. Nature is in sympathy with his plight' whirlwinds' 'lightning', 'thunder'. The chorus line keeps the reality in view'fearing hangman's noose'.Serious crime 'murder in cheap gambling den'.Wishes it had been different''should have grabbed that poker pot'.What was the point, he wonders'- now that he is both'empty-handed' and an 'outlaw'.Desperation sets in'Now he's off to Mexico'.Caught 'his poignant mercy plea' serves no purpose.
'Justice' is delivered on the spot'they hung him from the nearest tree'.An atmospheric tale told with color and suspense.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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A distinct flavour here of other times and days.'Justice', i.e Hangman's Noose is a distinct possibility. Nature is in sympathy with his plight' whirlwinds' 'lightning', 'thunder'. The chorus line keeps the reality in view'fearing hangman's noose'.Serious crime 'murder in cheap gambling den'.Wishes it had been different''should have grabbed that poker pot'.What was the point, he wonders'- now that he is both'empty-handed' and an 'outlaw'.Desperation sets in'Now he's off to Mexico'.Caught 'his poignant mercy plea' serves no purpose.
'Justice' is delivered on the spot'they hung him from the nearest tree'.An atmospheric tale told with color and suspense.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thank you Zanya. That is a really impressive review. If I had a reviewer's recommendation left, you'd get one for this. Alas, my six are already used up..but I really appreciate you dropping by to comment.
Comment from Darkhorse555
they all fair run when they get the whisper of the hangmans nose different and a very enjoyable piece your words an excellent picture
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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they all fair run when they get the whisper of the hangmans nose different and a very enjoyable piece your words an excellent picture
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thanks Darkhorse.
Comment from Capricorn30
A well-penned old West poem--I so enjoy your story-in-a-poem as the focus on gambling tells an intriguing tale;
Good audio and visual imagery in the first stanza;
Good concept of the "hombre" in the American setting.
Excellent!
I've always had a keen interest in the "wild west" days--today these settings are ghost towns, but still continue to fascinate me!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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A well-penned old West poem--I so enjoy your story-in-a-poem as the focus on gambling tells an intriguing tale;
Good audio and visual imagery in the first stanza;
Good concept of the "hombre" in the American setting.
Excellent!
I've always had a keen interest in the "wild west" days--today these settings are ghost towns, but still continue to fascinate me!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thank you Capricorn. I've always loved westerns too.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is brilliantly written, Treischel, I love western stories and songs, so this one is a real delight to read. It has a story in it and the flow is amazing. I do like the rhyme style of couplet followed by the trio of rhyming lines, it works really well with this poem. It deserves the 6 I have here, but it won't come up for you, so you must have had your 2 just lately.
Treischel, please forgive the lack of reviews I am able to do at the moment, I am coming on as much as I have time for, but it is not nearly enough to keep up with all the messages for reviewing I am receiving. I have now got to limit myself to the latest of every message I get when I come on. I will be back to normal in a few weeks, one more week to go and we leave Spain, then it is the settling in.
I just hope I don't miss too many! :) Sandra xsx
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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This is brilliantly written, Treischel, I love western stories and songs, so this one is a real delight to read. It has a story in it and the flow is amazing. I do like the rhyme style of couplet followed by the trio of rhyming lines, it works really well with this poem. It deserves the 6 I have here, but it won't come up for you, so you must have had your 2 just lately.
Treischel, please forgive the lack of reviews I am able to do at the moment, I am coming on as much as I have time for, but it is not nearly enough to keep up with all the messages for reviewing I am receiving. I have now got to limit myself to the latest of every message I get when I come on. I will be back to normal in a few weeks, one more week to go and we leave Spain, then it is the settling in.
I just hope I don't miss too many! :) Sandra xsx
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thanks Sandra. I understand.
