Children of destiny
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "to party with liberty"One can anticipate a prize~ Heaven sent
5 total reviews
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading your piece, however I'm a little confused in he presentation. Perhaps something went wrong when you uploaded because after the sentence
* a huge hug from Rose- each and every available time*
there is nothing else until author notes. Is that the end? Or is something missing?
Definitely take a look.
Despite that I think it's well written with natural sounding dialogue.
The paragraphs are long and I might break them up for an easier read.
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I enjoyed reading your piece, however I'm a little confused in he presentation. Perhaps something went wrong when you uploaded because after the sentence
* a huge hug from Rose- each and every available time*
there is nothing else until author notes. Is that the end? Or is something missing?
Definitely take a look.
Despite that I think it's well written with natural sounding dialogue.
The paragraphs are long and I might break them up for an easier read.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
Comment from Riya B.
It was a great story, and the author makes Rose and Joshua are two college students who are also fun-loving people and each character tells about their struggles. Good Job!
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It was a great story, and the author makes Rose and Joshua are two college students who are also fun-loving people and each character tells about their struggles. Good Job!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
Comment from raptor k3
Four stars for effort and bravado,story was okay, but kinda seemed to trickle around a bit.
Sentencing was nicely coined together, with comprehensive flow, build up was also okay.
All the best with rest of your work
:D
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Four stars for effort and bravado,story was okay, but kinda seemed to trickle around a bit.
Sentencing was nicely coined together, with comprehensive flow, build up was also okay.
All the best with rest of your work
:D
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
Comment from Liberty Justice
The author characterizes Rose and Joshua as two fun-loving people. Marijuana and other drugs plague these fun-seeking
college students. Each character tells of his/her struggles.
Dorm hours and regulations play an important part in this lifestyle.
Liberty Justice
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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The author characterizes Rose and Joshua as two fun-loving people. Marijuana and other drugs plague these fun-seeking
college students. Each character tells of his/her struggles.
Dorm hours and regulations play an important part in this lifestyle.
Liberty Justice
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Thanks Liberty Justice +the rating well received. uncleJohn
Comment from gramalot8
UncleJohn, you have easily taken your readers into the life in dorms, etc. Good visuals with your descriptive language. Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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UncleJohn, you have easily taken your readers into the life in dorms, etc. Good visuals with your descriptive language. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Well gramalot8 +thanks for the review that had me to appreciate my writing more so. I'm glad it worked for you. uncleJohn
