All You Have To Do Is Dream
Dreaming of her lover16 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
the sun's rays upon her skin - add apostrophe for possessive
vivid descriptive detail that makes for a passionate tone as his breath flirts and dances across her body and skin - you have me feeling all hot and bothered! :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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the sun's rays upon her skin - add apostrophe for possessive
vivid descriptive detail that makes for a passionate tone as his breath flirts and dances across her body and skin - you have me feeling all hot and bothered! :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Hot and bothered !!MISSION ACCOMPLISHED
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
What a wonderful easy flowing piece of hope and love. The descriptions were spot on and delightful. the sun, the warmth, the hope, the love
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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What a wonderful easy flowing piece of hope and love. The descriptions were spot on and delightful. the sun, the warmth, the hope, the love
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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thank you very much Barb !!
tk
Comment from krys123
A beautiful picture to represents your poem entirely. So beautiful! Great rhythm, concept, context, and imagery. I could feel the passion she is going through. The longing she has for her loved one. The concept of a dream as her only direct line to her lover and love. Just great imagery in the poem, Tarnished Knight.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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A beautiful picture to represents your poem entirely. So beautiful! Great rhythm, concept, context, and imagery. I could feel the passion she is going through. The longing she has for her loved one. The concept of a dream as her only direct line to her lover and love. Just great imagery in the poem, Tarnished Knight.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Sometime my imagination can run run run lol
Thank you much krys
tk
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is interesting with an interesting choice of illustration. I guess I would like to have a better sense of where this is taking place. With the word "alas" I guessed it was another century, but maybe not. There are some places I would double-check the punctuation; for example, it should say "warm summer's day" with an apostrophe.
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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This is interesting with an interesting choice of illustration. I guess I would like to have a better sense of where this is taking place. With the word "alas" I guessed it was another century, but maybe not. There are some places I would double-check the punctuation; for example, it should say "warm summer's day" with an apostrophe.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2013
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Thank you for reading and commenting Yes I do need a few double checks Thanks for catching them
TK
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
But alas his eyes do not open.
His heart does not beat.
For he is only a dream.
Love those lines. The whole time she's waiting for him and missing him , thinkiing only of the day he'll be by her side again. A lot of women suffer thru this with soldiers overseas etc. Well written with real feeling.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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But alas his eyes do not open.
His heart does not beat.
For he is only a dream.
Love those lines. The whole time she's waiting for him and missing him , thinkiing only of the day he'll be by her side again. A lot of women suffer thru this with soldiers overseas etc. Well written with real feeling.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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THANK YOU VERY MUCH PHYLLIS IT MUST BE THE FEMALE SIDE OF ME COMING OUT LOL
Comment from nomi338
You certainly do fashion some fantastic dreams. I want to know where you find the fabulous images. I swear that whoever provides you with your females have access to some fascinating models. I mean they are hot, hot, hot!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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You certainly do fashion some fantastic dreams. I want to know where you find the fabulous images. I swear that whoever provides you with your females have access to some fascinating models. I mean they are hot, hot, hot!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Make you sweat a bit do they hehehehe Think I have another Dream on the horizon you really should like that one
PS ThankS for the funny great review too You dirty old man
TK
Comment from Treischel
A breathtakingly beautiful free verse poem about separation, about yearning deeply, and waiting for the wonderful return of her true love. Smoothly written. Poetically expressed. This is a fabulous poem that I enjoyed very much and felt deeply.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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A breathtakingly beautiful free verse poem about separation, about yearning deeply, and waiting for the wonderful return of her true love. Smoothly written. Poetically expressed. This is a fabulous poem that I enjoyed very much and felt deeply.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Thank you so very much Mr T Coming from you makes it extra special as I do admire your work Both Hawaiian Mermaid and myself think you A OK
TK
Comment from country ranch writer
I like this poem it reminds me of a" Ricky Nelson" song All I have to do is dream. When I want you in my arms,when I need you and all your charms, all I have to do is dream, dream,dream. Love the picture it goes with your poem. She dreams a little dream for you
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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I like this poem it reminds me of a" Ricky Nelson" song All I have to do is dream. When I want you in my arms,when I need you and all your charms, all I have to do is dream, dream,dream. Love the picture it goes with your poem. She dreams a little dream for you
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Think that was the Everly Bro don and Phil back humm 1959 maybe dang hate to say I even remember that hehe. Thank you so much for your kind words on this and yes she did dream a little dream for me and I came to her all the way to Hawaii and very glad she had that dream toooo
Comment from Kiki12
Lovely and a little sad. Such a romantic verse- it's too bad we can't hold on to those dreams a little longer sometimes, but your poem speaks of hope and true love, and those things never fade. Beautifully done-
Kiki
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Lovely and a little sad. Such a romantic verse- it's too bad we can't hold on to those dreams a little longer sometimes, but your poem speaks of hope and true love, and those things never fade. Beautifully done-
Kiki
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Why thank you so much Kiki I do hope the words I write do stir the senses and make one imagination flow whoo hoo and a big Tarnish Knight Hug to you.
TK
Comment from luna_catkins
dear friend. i think i'm more and more addicted to your romantic flow. there are many things that light up my mind and heart and you have a special place there. how exquisitely you are stringing your emotion, how skillful you weave your tales in between reality and fiction. i'm surprised by every of your poems, yes, they are like every evening chocolate lullaby. thank you for them.
...and then your music....stop. ;):)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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dear friend. i think i'm more and more addicted to your romantic flow. there are many things that light up my mind and heart and you have a special place there. how exquisitely you are stringing your emotion, how skillful you weave your tales in between reality and fiction. i'm surprised by every of your poems, yes, they are like every evening chocolate lullaby. thank you for them.
...and then your music....stop. ;):)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2013
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Wow a 6 and a chocolate too what more could a lowly poet ask for. Thank you so much for your kind words and the galaxy of stars !!!
Tk
Ps ill write another one just for you how's that include a cat and the moon tool it will be a real cat in the moon one hehe
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ahh, nooo. about chocolate you know more then i. lowly...knight of a round table...you saved many beauties, be proud. :)
ps. i'm really curious about that one...sounds dangerous, hahaha.
waiting...
