Love Unseized
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Comment from Selina Stambi
Wow! I love your way with words, cpj! You twist and torture and then tame them so tunefully!! LOVE it!!
Love the rapid mood changes as you take your reader through a wild glide.
Fabulously well done!
Spags:
irreversible (not ...sable)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Wow! I love your way with words, cpj! You twist and torture and then tame them so tunefully!! LOVE it!!
Love the rapid mood changes as you take your reader through a wild glide.
Fabulously well done!
Spags:
irreversible (not ...sable)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Wow I loved your way with reviews. LOL
Thanks so much.
I'll attend to the spag...much appreciated.
Cheers P
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, closetpoetjester, you did an excellent job writing this cute poem about the one who had love in his grasp but left it to pursue another and when he wanted a swig of the one he was comfortable with, he was left thirsty because she was gone.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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this is very well written, closetpoetjester, you did an excellent job writing this cute poem about the one who had love in his grasp but left it to pursue another and when he wanted a swig of the one he was comfortable with, he was left thirsty because she was gone.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thanks jax, I appreciate that. I also appreciate you recommending Phyllis's write. She is a funny lady.
Cheers P
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Comment from amada
I like your works, the have that touch of honesty and sassyness. I admire that. Your love story is compelling, it draws the reader in. Great.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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I like your works, the have that touch of honesty and sassyness. I admire that. Your love story is compelling, it draws the reader in. Great.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thanks amada. I'm known for my honesty in stuffing things up. LOL
cheers P
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Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello there Phillippa, it is good to see you here again
This sad little piece causes each of us to reflect on the one that got away or the what ifs. You did a superb job of composing this one
Bear
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Hello there Phillippa, it is good to see you here again
This sad little piece causes each of us to reflect on the one that got away or the what ifs. You did a superb job of composing this one
Bear
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Hey Bear
Thanks so much...yes always much sadness and wistfulness pondering on that one that slipped the grasp.
Cheers Phillippa
xo
Comment from l.raven
A knight on a bike Phillippa. Sounds so so gallant!!! I can just see you sitting in the basket. But realy it's funny how we never forget our first crushes. That first feeling of love. Wandering what could have become of that relationship. Or better yet what is he doing now?? Memories!!! So good to see ya sweetie. Hummmmmmmm Ya know I luff ya ! Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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A knight on a bike Phillippa. Sounds so so gallant!!! I can just see you sitting in the basket. But realy it's funny how we never forget our first crushes. That first feeling of love. Wandering what could have become of that relationship. Or better yet what is he doing now?? Memories!!! So good to see ya sweetie. Hummmmmmmm Ya know I luff ya ! Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Haha, why does EVERYONE think this guy was on a bike? LOL
It was a metaphor. So was mother. LOL
It doesn't matter mate...everyone loved the Pepsi line which for me was the killer and almost started the poem. I am friends with him on facebook but won't ever initiate a message. Kinda pointless huh? LOL Nahh, we live and learn. I'm pretty well over the shit.
Cheers P
xoxo
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your free verse, with its provocative title and use of the "Knight" image. Your story about the rejection of the second chance to seize love is quite compelling. Like many paths not taken, who knows what the end result woould have been. In any event, I enjoyed your clever and colorful rhymes. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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I admired your free verse, with its provocative title and use of the "Knight" image. Your story about the rejection of the second chance to seize love is quite compelling. Like many paths not taken, who knows what the end result woould have been. In any event, I enjoyed your clever and colorful rhymes. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thanks Joan and I know the Knight has been flogged silly. Not that he's complaining...haha
Cheers for your delightful review and the irony is - this particular unseizure was the one that started my poetry off but if we'd ended up together I would not be here now with all the poetry I DO have under my belt. I'd completely be somewhere else. How bloody wonderful right? LOL Now THAT'S a gut wrenching analogy to my love story.
Cheers P
xoxo
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Well, I am one of many who is glad you took the path that led you to writing more poetry! Many cheers- Joan
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You know something?
ME too.
Funny how things DO work out.
LOL
Its ALL how you look at it.
xxxxx
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I like your attitude/philosophy. Just keep writing and sharing! More hugs- Joan
Comment from Spitfire
LOL. A knight on a bike. That's when I caught on you were in grade school, no doubt. Delight simile about the unfinished Pepsi. A playful build up to the wistful theme:
squandered youth /and missed opportunities. Winsome rhyming. This should be read aloud for the full impact.
A fun read. Sorry, no sixes left.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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LOL. A knight on a bike. That's when I caught on you were in grade school, no doubt. Delight simile about the unfinished Pepsi. A playful build up to the wistful theme:
squandered youth /and missed opportunities. Winsome rhyming. This should be read aloud for the full impact.
A fun read. Sorry, no sixes left.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Haha he was NOT I repeat NOT on a bike. LMAO
I understand it threw people but this was when I was 18 and there were NO bikes involved, well only the other gir...ahem the other fair maiden involved...LOL Nuff said.
Loved your review. Don't care nought for the sixer so long as you enjoyed. Free verse NOT a strongie for me.
Cheers P
xx
Comment from Treischel
A very compelling free verse with lots of imagery and loads of scattered inline rhyming. I like the way you sculpted the verse to create pace and pause in impactful measure. The intimacy of the thoughts is intriguing. The regrets flow freely like the verse.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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A very compelling free verse with lots of imagery and loads of scattered inline rhyming. I like the way you sculpted the verse to create pace and pause in impactful measure. The intimacy of the thoughts is intriguing. The regrets flow freely like the verse.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thank you. I appreciate you taking time to admire my sculpture.
LOL
Cheers P
PS. Oh the regrets flow freely alright. LOL
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Excellent story of pride over love... too many take that path. Yet, again... he did leave you once, so to assume that all would be roses if you gave him another chance would've been folly, I think. It's a fantasy that she's better off giving up.
I shunned Cupid
and let stupid reign << Great lines, like so many here!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Excellent story of pride over love... too many take that path. Yet, again... he did leave you once, so to assume that all would be roses if you gave him another chance would've been folly, I think. It's a fantasy that she's better off giving up.
I shunned Cupid
and let stupid reign << Great lines, like so many here!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Loved your review, thanks so much.
Cheers P
x
Comment from adewpearl
love the stress/duress/finesse...rhymes
good alliteration in lightened my load
good internal rhyme in smother like no other
and in other lines that follow
the Cupid/stupid pairing is clever
excellent use of enjambment throughout
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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love the stress/duress/finesse...rhymes
good alliteration in lightened my load
good internal rhyme in smother like no other
and in other lines that follow
the Cupid/stupid pairing is clever
excellent use of enjambment throughout
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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Thanks Brooke, glad you enjoyed.
Cheers P
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