Lost In The Fifties Tonight
A nostalgic acrostic poem34 total reviews
Comment from sholessjo
Growing up in the fifties was a great experience. It was a time of innocence and pride in country. You did a great job with this poem and I love the picture. It is hard to rhyme with type of poem but you did it.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Growing up in the fifties was a great experience. It was a time of innocence and pride in country. You did a great job with this poem and I love the picture. It is hard to rhyme with type of poem but you did it.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you! Yes, I wish we could back to the morals and values of those times. Thank you again for your sweet review!
Comment from Bryon1248
What a fun read,
I remember watching films of these days and thinking what a wonderful time to have lived, the music was alive, and people enjoyed life, I guess that it was because they could all remember what it was like in the forties, and how lucky they were. Shame people today could not do the same
I enjoyed the free flow and great rhyming throughout. The only thing if I may is the spacing on the layout would be nicer if displayed as a couplet or a quatrain.
Thank you for sharing your words
PS, 61 was a good year wasn't it... ;)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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What a fun read,
I remember watching films of these days and thinking what a wonderful time to have lived, the music was alive, and people enjoyed life, I guess that it was because they could all remember what it was like in the forties, and how lucky they were. Shame people today could not do the same
I enjoyed the free flow and great rhyming throughout. The only thing if I may is the spacing on the layout would be nicer if displayed as a couplet or a quatrain.
Thank you for sharing your words
PS, 61 was a good year wasn't it... ;)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. You know, I grew up mostly in the 70's and it felt like a modern day 50's to me. Mostly because Vietnam and all that turmoil was behind us. Just seemed a really peaceful time. Still would've preferred the 50's. I agree with you on the spacing but because it was an Acrostic I wanted to separate each word in the title so when read downwards the title would stand out, you know what I mean? That you again for this sweet review!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Love how you managed to find a rhyme for minute ...!
I used to love watching Happy Days as a silly young thing .... had a crush on Richie Cunningham - not the Fonz: odd!
One o'clock, two o'clock, three o'clock rock ... c'mon now ... altogether ...!!!
Thanks for the smile and the trip back in time.
You gave me such a fabulous review, I thought I'd pop in to say hell and check you out.
Hi Suzie .... :)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Love how you managed to find a rhyme for minute ...!
I used to love watching Happy Days as a silly young thing .... had a crush on Richie Cunningham - not the Fonz: odd!
One o'clock, two o'clock, three o'clock rock ... c'mon now ... altogether ...!!!
Thanks for the smile and the trip back in time.
You gave me such a fabulous review, I thought I'd pop in to say hell and check you out.
Hi Suzie .... :)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2013
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Thank you! Yea, I was sweating the rhyme for that one! I watched Happy Days too. Wasn't crazy about Potsie. Too goofy. Also liked Laverne and Shirley. Loved the movie Rebel Without A Cause. Thank you again for reading it, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from 4tun81
This is a very imaginative and well constructed acrostic. I was not quite old enough to participate in most of the things (but I do remember a root beer float at the A&W) but they all are ringing bells. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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This is a very imaginative and well constructed acrostic. I was not quite old enough to participate in most of the things (but I do remember a root beer float at the A&W) but they all are ringing bells. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much! I appreciate you taking time to read it and I'm so glad you liked it!
Comment from bossladyone
I like it. The singer and songs you mentioned, I like and I didn't grow up then. I guess we are unique. The poem is well written and flows nicely. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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I like it. The singer and songs you mentioned, I like and I didn't grow up then. I guess we are unique. The poem is well written and flows nicely. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much!
Comment from GregoryCody
This is so interesting. I LIKE the fifties too! Always think about what it would've been like. Your poem is beautifully structured and the flow is great. Your descriptions are Fantastic. Great piece! .
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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This is so interesting. I LIKE the fifties too! Always think about what it would've been like. Your poem is beautifully structured and the flow is great. Your descriptions are Fantastic. Great piece! .
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Wow! Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you again!
Comment from Cornelius2000
I was in high school and college in the '50's, so what you've described is very familiar to me. Of course you couldn't cover everything, but drive-in movies were very big back then. Passion pits on wheels.
I find your meter is a bit erratic at times. For instance, if you'd substitute "rush" for "hurry" in the tenth line, the line would read more smoothly. And if you'd insert "to" in the sixteenth line, so it would read "Slip a coin in to the slot," I think it would help the rhythm.
On the other hand, your rhyming is impeccable. I enjoyed reading your poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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I was in high school and college in the '50's, so what you've described is very familiar to me. Of course you couldn't cover everything, but drive-in movies were very big back then. Passion pits on wheels.
I find your meter is a bit erratic at times. For instance, if you'd substitute "rush" for "hurry" in the tenth line, the line would read more smoothly. And if you'd insert "to" in the sixteenth line, so it would read "Slip a coin in to the slot," I think it would help the rhythm.
On the other hand, your rhyming is impeccable. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Thank you!! I'm so glad you liked it! As for the meter, I'm never sure what cadence will be in the mind of the reader. As a matter of fact, when I wrote it, I had written " slip a coin into the slot". Then when I reread it, it sounded like one too many syllables! Haha Since you mentioned it, I went back and changed it back to "into". Thanks. You know what line drove me crazy? The "Twistin the night away" line. It seems like a couple of syllables too many but that line has to start with the letter "T" and that song was the best I could think of to dance too. Plus, I had mentioned Sam Cooke earlier. That's one thing I don't like about Acrostics. They can limit you. I also wanted to have a reference to Opie and Aunt Bee, but couldn't fit them in. Thank you again for your input!
Comment from ravenblack
You captured certain elements of the fifties well in this acrobatic. I remember a & w car hops on skates- some were still around in the early seventies. I just wish I was born in the late fifties so I would have been old enough to become a flower child.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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You captured certain elements of the fifties well in this acrobatic. I remember a & w car hops on skates- some were still around in the early seventies. I just wish I was born in the late fifties so I would have been old enough to become a flower child.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Thank you! I remember car hops too! Thank you again!
Comment from lorijean
Sounds like a great time was had by one and all, love your poem with lots of memories, well written and a pleasure to read, thank you for sharing...
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Sounds like a great time was had by one and all, love your poem with lots of memories, well written and a pleasure to read, thank you for sharing...
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much! I appreciate you reading it and I'm so glad you liked it!
Comment from chasennov
'Lost In The Fifties Tonight.' An excellent poem you wrote here about the good ole fifties. I also grew up in that time-frame. Good job and thanks a lot.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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'Lost In The Fifties Tonight.' An excellent poem you wrote here about the good ole fifties. I also grew up in that time-frame. Good job and thanks a lot.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Thank you!! I appreciate you taking time to read it and I'm glad you liked it!
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You're always welcome.
