Aftermath
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Comment from mystery poet
No one would want to spend much time thinking
of the consequences of a nuclear bomb going off
or another 911. Not certain what the writer has
in mind though the lurid mental image is one
no one wants to see first hand. Very vivid
imagery.
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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No one would want to spend much time thinking
of the consequences of a nuclear bomb going off
or another 911. Not certain what the writer has
in mind though the lurid mental image is one
no one wants to see first hand. Very vivid
imagery.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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That's for darned sure girlie. Thank you for such a great review.
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Glad it fit the writers intent.
Always my pleasure.
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Smile.
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Smile...
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Smile-smile-LOL-smile-smile
Hey, I'm getting good at this reviewing.
Answered four in one.
Hehehe.
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LOL you nut.
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Me nut, you fruitcake...
I am laughing my head off.
We gotta stop this.
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For real.
Comment from ravenblack
black bells and cracked shells - rhythmically reads like a nursery rhyme. ironic, but not really - ring around the rosy is a little sing-song about the plague ( ring around the rosy being a rash around a red spot which signaled the beginning of the end). you have tapped into the darker nature of nursery rhymes whether you realize it or not, and it suits the poem well. cute little girls/bad little boys - also reminds me of " girls are made of /greasy grimy gopher guts, etc - a playground song emphasizing the difference between boys and girls. and the cement they are buried in could very well be a bombed-out playground. very grim. very good. very timely ( Syria).
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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black bells and cracked shells - rhythmically reads like a nursery rhyme. ironic, but not really - ring around the rosy is a little sing-song about the plague ( ring around the rosy being a rash around a red spot which signaled the beginning of the end). you have tapped into the darker nature of nursery rhymes whether you realize it or not, and it suits the poem well. cute little girls/bad little boys - also reminds me of " girls are made of /greasy grimy gopher guts, etc - a playground song emphasizing the difference between boys and girls. and the cement they are buried in could very well be a bombed-out playground. very grim. very good. very timely ( Syria).
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Thanks you Raven and I see you have caught the flavor or the write? Beautiful review from you. Beautiful.
Comment from Treischel
Wow! Dark poem departure from your usual style, but done in a stunning free verse that flows down the page like a burning acid rain. Unknown evil. When children are victims, the horror is multiplied. I shudder! Very reminiscent of the Holocaust.
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Wow! Dark poem departure from your usual style, but done in a stunning free verse that flows down the page like a burning acid rain. Unknown evil. When children are victims, the horror is multiplied. I shudder! Very reminiscent of the Holocaust.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Yeah Tom because that is what is depicts. Such a travesty. SIgh.
Comment from hifein
wonderful little poem g. sounds like the past has been buried deep, sifted and eventually gone in the aftermath of time. the fog seems to have lifted and a glorious new image emerges from the negative.
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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wonderful little poem g. sounds like the past has been buried deep, sifted and eventually gone in the aftermath of time. the fog seems to have lifted and a glorious new image emerges from the negative.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Thanks so very much Hi for a fantastic review.
Comment from lorijean
Oooo A bit creepy, but really well written, it made me shudder in parts, acid baths and scrapes of wrath, just loved it, the artwork is perfect....
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Oooo A bit creepy, but really well written, it made me shudder in parts, acid baths and scrapes of wrath, just loved it, the artwork is perfect....
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Thank you Lori and I'm glad that you liked this change of pace write.
Comment from Mark Schardine
The poem in the shape of a column describes a scene after a disaster. The column (or pillar) form mocks those people who would build something solid. Look what happened her, everything fell apart.
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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The poem in the shape of a column describes a scene after a disaster. The column (or pillar) form mocks those people who would build something solid. Look what happened her, everything fell apart.
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Sigh yes Mark, it did for sure. Thank you so much.
Comment from Jaq Cee
Suffer the little children...
Great and very different write for you G. It talks of horrific things but doesn't scare you. Loved this one a lot. Jaq xx
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Suffer the little children...
Great and very different write for you G. It talks of horrific things but doesn't scare you. Loved this one a lot. Jaq xx
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Sigh JC it is a dark write for sure. Thanks girl.
Comment from barkingdog
Well, this one gave me the chills. The images of buried children in cement and acid baths along with black bells and cracked shells(good internal rhyme)
bring up thought of a serial killer disposing of his victims.
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Well, this one gave me the chills. The images of buried children in cement and acid baths along with black bells and cracked shells(good internal rhyme)
bring up thought of a serial killer disposing of his victims.
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Hehe I guess it would too. Thank you Ellen for a great review.
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
How can conditions and behaviors so black and dirty be turned into a poem? You just demonstrated with an excellent example. That's why I admire you and your masterful skills. This is a master piece and must be preserved. Bob
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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How can conditions and behaviors so black and dirty be turned into a poem? You just demonstrated with an excellent example. That's why I admire you and your masterful skills. This is a master piece and must be preserved. Bob
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Thanks so much Bob. I don't know how but it came to me just as such.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this well written my friend yes what about the aftermath it is the children that suffer you are right well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Yes my friend this well written my friend yes what about the aftermath it is the children that suffer you are right well done regards Jill
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Thank you ever so much Jill.
