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Comment from RPFoster
A very nice poem, I enjoyed the sorrowful content and how you lightened it with "running out of tissues" and the last line " write something a little more light"
The only place I stumbled was with "there's got to be something's right" it slowed me down like it didn't fit.
All in all a good poem, I enjoyed, well done.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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A very nice poem, I enjoyed the sorrowful content and how you lightened it with "running out of tissues" and the last line " write something a little more light"
The only place I stumbled was with "there's got to be something's right" it slowed me down like it didn't fit.
All in all a good poem, I enjoyed, well done.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you RP.
Comment from RYME4U
Sad but a good depiction of how it feels to "lose" friends and family as you age.Well rhymed and the rhythm is smooth and even. Good job!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Sad but a good depiction of how it feels to "lose" friends and family as you age.Well rhymed and the rhythm is smooth and even. Good job!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you Ryme4U.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
This is an excellent poem. It has rhythm and rhyme. It follows a rhyme scheme. It uses figurative language to institute a sad mood which is lightened in the last verse.
Apparently ABCB is a popular rhyme scheme.
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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This is an excellent poem. It has rhythm and rhyme. It follows a rhyme scheme. It uses figurative language to institute a sad mood which is lightened in the last verse.
Apparently ABCB is a popular rhyme scheme.
Comment Written 10-May-2013
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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Thanks Preston.yes, abcb is popular because it creates the rhythm with great flexibility. I use it occasionally.
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of abcb rhyming
your poem flows well and has nice touches of alliteration
a thoughtful look at the loss of friends and colleagues for a host of reasons :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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excellent use of abcb rhyming
your poem flows well and has nice touches of alliteration
a thoughtful look at the loss of friends and colleagues for a host of reasons :-) Brooke
Comment Written 10-May-2013
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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Thank you Brooke.
Comment from robina1978
I can absolutely relate to this poem. I loved you wrote about the ones that left or died and we miss now as well. But I agree there has to be something right.
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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I can absolutely relate to this poem. I loved you wrote about the ones that left or died and we miss now as well. But I agree there has to be something right.
Comment Written 10-May-2013
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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Thank you Ine.
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welcome, Ine
Comment from 9999pool
As with life, people come and people go. We just don't know anymore. We will miss those going but there will be new ones coming in.
As with the seasons of the year and all year round - the cycle of things continue until they disappear like the wabi-sabi concept of things.
We looked on helplessly as we cannot do a darn thing about it except to write our stories here and hope they understand the message that we will not forget them.
Excellent write and a well deserved tribute to those leaving in one way or another.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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As with life, people come and people go. We just don't know anymore. We will miss those going but there will be new ones coming in.
As with the seasons of the year and all year round - the cycle of things continue until they disappear like the wabi-sabi concept of things.
We looked on helplessly as we cannot do a darn thing about it except to write our stories here and hope they understand the message that we will not forget them.
Excellent write and a well deserved tribute to those leaving in one way or another.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you Ritchie. Yes, the circle of life goes on.
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So true. At least Ritchie is still around slogging at the typewriter and writing God knows what, LOL. Be happy that there are still many of us around to entertain you, Tom, and of course to review too.
Cheerio, and all good things must end in some way. Ritchie.
Comment from Sararb
Such an emotional and sad poem my friend. I get these feelings too. So many friends have either moved away or passed on, plus I lost my mate in 2010, and then my life really changed. The writing is my therapy. I have met a lot of wonderful people on this site too, and you are one at the top of my list! Have a great day. I love your writing! Sara :)
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Such an emotional and sad poem my friend. I get these feelings too. So many friends have either moved away or passed on, plus I lost my mate in 2010, and then my life really changed. The writing is my therapy. I have met a lot of wonderful people on this site too, and you are one at the top of my list! Have a great day. I love your writing! Sara :)
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you Sara, you make me smile. I'm glad you can write. I helps.
Comment from NicciFaye
Point well taken and I have noticed that as well. I've only been on here a little over a month and see the trend of what you stated in this well needed poem.
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Point well taken and I have noticed that as well. I've only been on here a little over a month and see the trend of what you stated in this well needed poem.
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you Nicci. It's the circle of life, I guess. Some go, and new one's come in.
Comment from Laurent Andre Menot
Very well expressed thougts and feelings. very profound, touching and moving words, well chosen.
With an emotional, melancholic and nostagic atmosphere.
This is a very creative piece of poetry well written. Thank you for sharing!
Laurent
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Very well expressed thougts and feelings. very profound, touching and moving words, well chosen.
With an emotional, melancholic and nostagic atmosphere.
This is a very creative piece of poetry well written. Thank you for sharing!
Laurent
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you so for visiting and commenting Laurent.
Comment from Gungalo
Yet, even with all the tears and gloom,
There's got to be something's right.
I think I'll go find a quiet spot,
And write something a little more light.
Please do Tom and make it float way up there. Those that left here had their own issues to deal with. If you just write, you can't go wrong. Great quatrains by the way.
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Yet, even with all the tears and gloom,
There's got to be something's right.
I think I'll go find a quiet spot,
And write something a little more light.
Please do Tom and make it float way up there. Those that left here had their own issues to deal with. If you just write, you can't go wrong. Great quatrains by the way.
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you Gungalo. I'll do that.
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Smile.
