Comment from mrsmajor

Excellent

I love the relationship you have with your Grandson, it's a wonderful thing, since there are so many children that do not have such a pleasure, this was a well thought out and written poem, interesting descriptions for one that may not have had the enjoyment of have been involved in such an experiences..It was a pleasure..Thanks for sharing.

Warm Hugs,
Victoria

 Comment Written 09-May-2013

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reply by the author on 09-May-2013

Thanks again Victotia. Your warm thoughts are well appreciated.

reply by mrsmajor on 09-May-2013

You are so welcome, this one was a real pleasure...Your descriptions were well written, I felt like I was there..
Hugs,
Victoria

Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid

Excellent

Aloha Treischel,
Being part Cherokee Indian I can appreciate the cave, cliffs and sketching on the rocks. You had a great memory with your younger one and a great poem as a tribute.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid

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 Comment Written 07-May-2013

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reply by the author on 08-May-2013

Thank you Ginger. My Grandson is also part Cherokee. His Great Grandma Rose is 100%., on my son-in-laws side.

Comment from Sararb

Excellent

What a lovely adventure for you and your grandson, This will be a memory that he will always hold dear. You did a wonderful job writing this poem. It flowed so smoothly, and the added bonus was a picture of the cave that was a part of your special day. Sararb :)

 Comment Written 06-May-2013

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reply by the author on 06-May-2013

Thank you Sara.

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

CAVES, I am so scared for you both. I'm telling Grandma. Learn to fly fish together, play golf or tennis together. Stay out of caves. Your verse is delightful, and teaching your grandson a true. treasure. Well written, as always
and a delightful read. NO more caves!!!!! Robin :)

 Comment Written 06-May-2013

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reply by the author on 06-May-2013

Thanks Robin, No, No, don't tell!

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

well done Tom, this is wonderful. Quite a few 5-7-5's in one methinks and as I am not one for rules, I love it even more lol, Indie

 Comment Written 06-May-2013

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reply by the author on 06-May-2013

Thanks Indie.gotta think outside the box.

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

Treischel, this 5-7-5 is remarkably executed in a logical, readable, and pleasurable way. The words have depth of meaning and demonstrates the time honored passing treasures from generation to generation. GracieAnn

 Comment Written 06-May-2013

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reply by the author on 06-May-2013

Thank you Gracie Ann. I appreciate those thoughtful comments.

Comment from Callyope

Excellent

I like this in that I can see the inner boy in you... I have 3 boys myself, such adventurous little guys. They certainly bring out my inner child. If there was a hiccup, it would be the second verse of the last stanza, having 6 syllables instead of 7... Great poem, boys being boys :)
Cordially,
Callyope

 Comment Written 05-May-2013

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reply by the author on 06-May-2013

Thank you Callyope.oops your right. Infixed it. Thanks for the catch.

reply by Callyope on 06-May-2013

Your quite welcome. I know how easy it is to miss a tiny little oops. The mind knows it by heart, making the eye skip right over the imperfection. Glad I could help!
Callyope